A Bookish Delight story?

It must be Christmas.

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What the fucking hell did I just read? I wont be sleeping happy tonight, might as well call on oreos to help me.I kinda liked it, but the ship me no like at all.

7063136 Bruh, you saw what kind of ship this is. I mean, it's literally on the coverart.

7063154 I like the ship, but when it was written in THIS form, I go: UUUUUUMMMM, well that was some really weird shit.

Okay.

So I saw this story in my feed and I was like "Why is Bookish using clickbait art?"

Then I opened it and I was all like "...Bookish wrote an M rated story. I suppose I'll give it a read."

I obviously didn't really pay attention to the tags because then I went "ABORT! ABORT! SUNLIGHT ROMANCE!"

But I kept reading because it was you.

In the beginning, it somewhat felt like you were shipping Twilight with yourself by Sunset as proxy because she sounded a whole lot like what I've gleaned from your blogposts. But hey, who wouldn't want to insert themselves into SciTwi AMIRITE?

I feel like the characters really came into their own sometime in chapter 2 when Sunset displayed extreme perturbation towards Twilight's plight. It was still kind of weird reading a romance, let alone a Sunlight romance, but I signed up for this ride and was not disappointed.

I especially enjoyed how you used the sex to magnify and reaffirm their relationship as opposed to how most people(myself included)write sex to act as someone else's release valve.

All in all, you wrote something that I liked reading through and through despite my every impulse telling me to jettison the story. That's no small feat.

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You're making no sense right now, you know that?

~Skeeter The Lurker

7063301 Sci Twi, err, it just doesn't mix, if you look at it from another angle.

How dare you talk back to the King Of Oreos!! My oreos will rise from teh dead, or my stomach, and come for revenge!!

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EDIT: Ignore the deleted one. I double posted.

~Skeeter The Lurker

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You clicked on a story tagged Romance where the only characters tagged are Sunset Shimmer and Twilight Sparkle, where the cover pic is the two of them making out, and the description is all about how they are getting together, and then you complain that it is all about shipping Sunset Shimmer and Twilight Sparkle.

What were you expecting?

This is like going to Burger King, looking at the burger logo, seeing the burgers on the menu, ordering a burger, and then when you get a burger - you complain that you hate burgers!

SHUT UP AND TAKE MY LIKE AND FAVE!

Loved it, sequel please?

Oh my.

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That's not what I said at all. I never said he should avoid these stories.

If you don't like that ship, that is perfectly fair enough. If you click on a story that is obviously all about the ship (despite not liking the ship) and then find yourself disliking the story, that's perfectly fair enough also. Even if the only reason you dislike the story is because of the ship you dislike. No, really. There is honestly no accounting at all for taste - you are allowed to like whatever you like and dislike whatever you dislike, no matter what other people think.

But if you then complain about it in the comments, it is in turn perfectly fair for me to go, "Um, what were you expecting?"

Let me put this in the burger analogy I used earlier. There is nothing wrong with hating burgers. There is nothing wrong with going to Burger King despite hating burgers. There is nothing wrong with ordering and eating a burger in Burger King fully aware that it's a burger, while still hating burgers. But then if you loudly declare - after having eaten your burger - that all burgers are awful, then when the rest of the patrons in the place who probably do like burgers turn and stare at you, don't be surprised if they start wondering, "What were you expecting?"

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Yeeeeeeeeeeesh. All the blushing. Thanks all the same. Really, I just wanted to write something I'd read myself.

I'd pass this on to the others but I've already 100% they've already seen this!

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In the beginning, it somewhat felt like you were shipping Twilight with yourself by Sunset as proxy

Purely coincidence, I assure you. (I did the vicarious thing in the Moonlight fic. :3)

But hey, who wouldn't want to insert themselves into SciTwi AMIRITE?

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I especially enjoyed how you used the sex to magnify and reaffirm their relationship as opposed to how most people(myself included)write sex to act as someone else's release valve.

Thank you, and that was my aim exactly. At the risk of sounding soapboxy for a second... one scarcely sees that around this site anymore. Once in three blue moons, maybe. I've checked. Heck, it was in semi-short supply even in the old days. Not that I mind release-valve fics, it's just... in all things, balance, y'know?

(Also, according to the "Clopfics" filter at the top of the site, writing lesbianism nowadays without any "extra parts" attached makes me an anomaly too. This is the 2016 we live in )

Ah well. I'm terrible at release-valve fics anyway. Believe me I've tried, but if it's not fulfilling for the characters involved, I just can't get into writing it.

Anyway, I'm glad you liked it despite every single one of your better judgments. Means I'm doing something semi-right. Thanks for the review!

The only reason I am reading this is because I got a bit pulled by the cover art... I do not mind any and I mean any ship so long as it's done well, it's kind of my motto for shipping stories

Now if you'll excuse, I'm going to start reading and see if this deserves me like

Well after read through, I can say this... it definitely deserves my like

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I cannot word it better than IJAB did. Physically cannot. But I will say this.

I have a mental disorder, Aphantasia, and you almost made me able to visualize the Twilight winter scene and the SunLight sex scene. Sadly, it's impossible, but I got a slight glimpse of Twilight's face during her emotional breakdown.
This story really moved me. It inspired me. Unfortunately, I will never mentally or physically be able to put my stories out with a lot of graphic detail, due to my disorder.. but I am thankful this almost made me able to see it in my mind. For this story, and for almost helping me visualize my first image, I thank you.

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Here, witness the healing power of SunLight! Should start a church. 'And yea did She of the Hair of Bacon lie with the Lover of Knowledge. And all who witnessed said "It is Good."'

B... Buh.... Bookie? You didn't just... did you? COMMENCE READ.

That... Was one of the (if not the) best SunLight story I think I've ever read...
And that's saying a LOT !

It had the perfect amount of romance, cuteness, and sex that a shipfic like this could ever have.
You just fully satisfied my shipping needs.

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Things like this keep me going (even in the midst of... other things).

You're very welcome.

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This too.

Never thought about Sci-Twi's little science room after she left crystal prep. I wonder if she ever did get it back/ guess don't matter. Was a good enough read though.

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Yeah, pretty much.

Ok, I am a HUGE sucker for romance, Sci-Twi and Sunset especially. This fic was heartwarming, utterly adorable, and a perfect amount of romance, real world, and ultimately: ...not even clop but wonderful use of intimacy, because every other word I could think of CHEAPENS the QUALITY of what they shared, especially in the last 2 chapters!! Seriously, for me it was THAT GOOD!! Well done, VERY well done! And thanks for bringing me feels to the surface with a pair of my favorite characters!

Might be repeating myself here, but this is some great stuff, Books!

Shame I gotta downvote it because Sunset's still wearing her tights in the cover picture, though. Sorry, it's out of my hands!

(Kidding, kidding. But yeah, let's fix that when the sequel comes around ;).)

Awesome...
I love your writing style, I love your story... it was good. So good.

This is definitely the most interesting clopfic I've read. I've read some good ones, but none really got into the mind of the characters like that. Where they had sex so good that not even the narration is fully aware what's going on. I really wish there were more ship/clop fics like this out there, rather than the 2k word mindless sex "stories" that flood this site.

And I'm just going to throw my two cents in on that mess that was happening in earlier comments (without replying to any of them directly since I don't feel like getting a headache), I don't support any ship within MLP. Based on character interactions, I've yet to see any romantic potential between characters that are not already in a relationship (so excluding the Cakes and Cadance and Shining, obviously). But, that doesn't stop me from liking these kind of stories. A well-written story makes me stop caring about how I don't ship anything, and this was a well-written story. It was cute, it was heartwarming, and it was fun.

Cute and sexy,10 outta 10.

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Fun fact if it helps: Twi rigging a timed EMP out of stuff from the JUNK! box was the very, very first version of this story! Kid ya' not.

...this story went through countless revisions before it reached beta. Countless.

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Intimacy is wintimacy.

You're welcome! I'm so glad you liked it so much! Partly because this is the only style of this sort of story I'm capable of writing () but also just 'cause it's clearly made you so happy! Thanks for letting me know!

Whew, saucy.

Stories that assume a noncanon relationship from the word go are always risky, but I can buy into this one. Not because the how and why are thoroughly fleshed out, but because the two of them just have believable chemistry together. They both have book fantasies! That's cute, plausible, and better at selling the ship than any amount of shared angst.

Also digging the indirect approach to conflict resolution, which isn't something I see too often.

Not the best sex scene around, but it was engaging enough that I didn't start skimming over chunks of it like I do with the painfully formulaic examples out there.

Stories like this are why I leave the M filter off, in any case. The odd tender, steamy romance makes putting up with all the 2nd person clopfics in the feature box worthwhile.

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What are these "tights" that you speak of

Come sequel time these two(?) will be lucky if they're wearing makeup much less anything else

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Appreciate the review! Though:

sex so good that not even the narration is fully aware what's going on.

Can I quote this? No, seriously.

I don't normally read anything with explicit sex in it. Not that I dislike it, it's just not my thing. I tried it once and it just felt awkward.

I do, however, love me a good romance story, and you hit the mark with this one. This is good. This is grade A shipping, romance in its purest form, and the sex is used as a stepping stone to reach a higher level in their relationship rather than simply mindless pleasure. Me like.

Funny thing is, I wouldn't mind spending the rest of my life alone. I've never put much stock in relationships, both platonic and romantic. I simply don't have the need for human contact that seems so prevalent in our race.

You made me want it though. Somehow, your depiction of the ship made me want someone with whom to share my life. Someone to accompany me in all of the ups and downs I encounter, someone to love and cherish and appreciate.

So congratulations, you managed to make me want other people in my life.

I should go out more

Oh yes, this was very beautifully done. This is the kind of M rated story I think I could recommend to people without looking around furtively and wearing a hoodie.
Well done!

7067062 Can you quote me? Sure, why not

That's the kind of story you wrote, and I thought it was fantastic.

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This is a beautifully intimate story that is just so well written. Props to you Bookish and to everyone involved! Mature, yes. Smutty, no. The way you brought SciTwi's character to life is just amazing. The emotions you showed the emotions between these characters is just stunning. This is the type of mature story I really love...with real feelings and caring between the physical attraction. Well Done!

More words of praise simply escape me...this was simply delightful.

This was fantastic and so moving! Thank you, Bookish.

You win.

Just saw this in the feature box. Thought "Cool, Sunset and Twilight. Eh, mature? Most likely not worth reading." After looking at the other stories I remembered that the description had actually kind of sounded like that Bookish story I read and liked yesterday, and sure enough it was the same

More on topic: I liked that it was one of the relatively few "mature" stories that actually deserve the romance tag.

Just about all of the below is spoiler-ish, for anyone just coming to the fic. Y'all been warned.

Regarding some of the feedback about Cinch's chapter 2 actions not 'working' in this context, I'm of a mind that: moreso than what Cinch is actually capable of, it's a matter of what Twilight believes she's capable of. Cinch's intimidating demeanor in the scene, and Twilight's current state of mind, made it pass the "willing suspension" test for me here, and thus work. Especially in light of the following scene outside, where Twilight really shows that full accumulation of just how much Cinch has gotten into her head over the years.

And I'll second the "staccato breathing" comment. A big thumbs-up crossed my mind when I read it.

Really enjoyed seeing Sunset go through her emotional outpouring in the 3rd chapter. Though a voice in the back of my mind was yelling "don't do this Books" - as for a moment, with something about how the convo was going, I was afraid Sunset was going to say she was really in love with pony Twi and had just been using glasses Twi as a proxy, and was now so sorry, and tears ensue, and... yeah.

Anyway, glad it resolved the way it did. Always enjoy seeing moments of vulnerability from the stronger-willed characters like Sunset and (yes, of course) Adagio.

Finally, while driving home from family Easter stuff today, this song came on the radio. At this point, I had reached the middle of chapter 3. I'd never heard the song before, but found it very fitting for this story. I think the first verse fits Sunset talking to Twi outside in the rain during chapter 2, and then second verse the other way around in lab during chapter 3. (But then, the singer herself kinda looks like Adagio... logic breaking down. Wot now? Anyone who knows my work, knows my dilemma here, heh.)

Good stuff. The long hours and (I'm sure many) polish passes show.

This is the first ever 'clop' fic that I have read that I didn't need a sex scene in order to be good. If read my comment on the last chapter my daw meter exploded. I loved the scene when Sunset broke down in front of Twilight, that was by far the best scene throughout the entire story. This story was a true love story between Sunset and Twilight, becoming my new favorite mare/mare ship. regardless if it is Sunset and Equestria Twi or SciTwi. I loved this story and it deserved my like and favorite. By far the best 'clop' fic I have ever read. The reason being because this isn't a clop fic. This is a beautifully written love story that just happens to have a sex scene in it. I applaud you.

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Not the best sex scene around

Lies and base deceit.

Also, eighth draft of this story called for Segata showing up and throwing Cinch into the ground so hard that she explodes. Twice. Eventually figured that was a little over the top, so I started brainstorming indirect solutions from then on out.

Thanks and glad you enjoyed.

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Somehow, your depiction of the ship made me want someone with whom to share my life. Someone to accompany me in all of the ups and downs I encounter, someone to love and cherish and appreciate.

Don't sweat it--happens to me in my weaker moments too! Then I remember that close companionship is out of my budget.

In all seriousness, though, there are definitely times in life where that sort of closeness with others helps. Had to call upon all of 'em for this!

Thank you for the review, and I'm very happy you enjoyed yourself! NOW GO MAKE SOME FRIENDS.

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Especially since you never can know just where those hoodies have been! Thanks and glad you liked!

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D'aww, thank you! That was what we were going for here--if it was going to be sexy, at least let it be emotionally and romantically so.

And yeah, I've wanted a character like SciTwi on this show since... well, since the pilot really. When she finally showed up, I may have gone all in.

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Sweet!

...wait, what game were we playing

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Yeah, there's a lot of stuff I wanted to expand on (like Twi's CHS acclimation) but it would have turned into a book that had mostly nothing to do with selling the pairing (not that this pairing needs selling after that movie lol). Had to infodump some things to keep the ride going. Glad you liked it regardless!

I like the "staccato" turn of phrase too. I use it for breaths, sometimes moans. Thing is, you really can't use it more than once or twice a story otherwise it gets really overdone really fast. But it's great for a sensual punch out of nowhere. :3

Thanks!

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Eh, mature? Most likely not worth reading.

This happens to me a lot and I was sad that it'd come to that. So basically I just started writing one of these things I knew I'd like to read.

And then it turned out to be infinitely more work than planned because I am a shipping snob.

Thanks.