- Member Since 18th Mar, 2015
- offline last seen Monday
SOG AVENGER 225
You didn't think it would be that easy did you?
SOG AVENGER 225
Joined 18th Mar, 2015 ·
Offline
Also LikedSimilarAuthor
- Hunter Knight · 22k words · 155 10 · 3.5k views
- DylantheArtist · 81k words · 255 45 · 8k views
- Shadow-Mane · 112k words · 79 14 · 2.5k views
- Phill9876 · 17k words · 120 55 · 5.8k views
- Moonking · 11k words · 121 34 · 2.8k views
- Spider5939 · 98k words · 107 25 · 2.8k views
- Yeah · 26k words · 124 18 · 2.4k views
- SomeRandomGuy1027 · 23k words · 56 8 · 1.4k views
Featured In12
Human in Equestria16,976 stories ·16,819 members
Looking for Editors3,384 stories ·5,415 members
Humans falling in love with ponies.2,411 stories ·6,065 members
Anthropomorphics7,626 stories ·5,017 members
- Co-Author and Editor2,620 stories ·156 members
Military178 stories ·297 members
No Originality Brigade1,134 stories ·299 members
Absolutely Disgusting12,193 stories ·604 members
Stats
Page generated in 0.188 seconds
Total duration
917 users online
467,550 hits today, 2,280,440 yesterday
FIMFiction
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Follow & Support Us
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
"THIS IS BULLSHIIIIT"
Best line ever
Thank you I'm trying my best
good job
7739705 thanks it's really hard to do this without a editor which means I have to check over my work at least four times to spot any mistakes then re-read it to see if it needs to be changed or have something added
Next please ! Your story getting good .
interesting premise.
now-
*puts on a monocle and addopts a German accent*
Vat ist ze conflict going to be?
7740011
you can also let the comment do that for you
still a great story
this is one crossover whit what??
I really suggest either getting a good document program with grammar and sentence checks, and maybe also a good editor. Throughout this chapter alone there were either sentences with odd structure, run on sentences., and incomplete sentences. Too much to try to point out in a review. Plus that was only what I noticed.
Anyway, I will still give this story a chance. I would like to see where this goes.
Hope you have fun writing.
7748955 I'm trying but it's hard to do this on iPad, I swear it's making me more mad than a hunchback at a limbo contest.
7748946 there are a lot of crossovers such as weapons and some equipment from movies if that counts
7749043 nice chapter i like it but 1 problem: why make Celestia 8 feet tall?
7749043 You had my curiosity on this story, now you have my full attention.
7749269 they did in a lot of stories, I could make her seven feet tall if you want but just remember.....That's a huge bitch
7749577 7'4/5ish i believe she can be but 8 feet no considering you made Luna 6'10, i believe?
Nice good start man. Looking forward to more of your story.
7750547 thanks I'm trying my best it's my first story
I'm liking this story. Keep it up.
Nice. A couple grammar mistakes here an there. But still. Good story, love to see more.
7793324 care to point them out so I can correct them
Man this is turn out to be a good story. Keep it up.
One more thing, great chapter
Still enjoying this, I like the little bro back story.
7819169 the backstory is important to the characters of every story, and it was super hard to come up with this on the back of my head
Nice chapter, but yet i find another story with a sappy backstory no offense it is well thought out and all but i have read ALOT of stories in which i read a sappy back story from a human/s who ended up in Equestria, i sorta was hoping this story would not be 1 of those stories with a sally sad backstory
7822858 eh, you get what you get dude
(I don't know which one of these is used for shrugging)
7828853 so how long do we have to wait for the next chapter?
7829454 I don't know these things take time but I will try my best, I'm already working on the next chapter and already two thousand words in, it should be out soon.
7835487 okay, and happy new year
*Jeporady theme song*
7922553 ?
7922632 its a joke. In videos spoofs and memes they play the Jeporady theme song when something takes a long time.
7922675 this is very complicated to come up with chapters for this story, and believe me I'm trying my best.
Not to nick pick or anything but Scootaloo is spelled with a 'c,' not a k
Nice chapter i hope there is more to come
Good story. But one things for sure. YOU. NEED. AN. EDITOR.
7991051 thanks for the reminder things have been a little hectic over here
7995428 I know but no one is offering and it's hard to find one and like I said this is my first story so I have no idea what I'm doing.
He talks in run-on sentences.
8001200 I will try to edit for you however I am very busy so It my take a while also my main issue with this chapter is that military officials are NEVER this chatty at ALL.
8040376 yeah but these guys are mercs they pretty much play by their own rules.
8048598 That might be the case but they just told a shit-ton of backstory to what amount to strangers.
8053975 yeah they might be strangers to Johnny but Tyler knows them pretty well from the show plus it was only Tyler who had his backstory told not his brother and as for the ghouls in the city that was just one small piece of their past as for Johnny I plan to reveal his past when the princesses access his memories through a spell and see how he turned into the person they've come to know.
8057386 Oh okay dude but it would be a good idea to have some conflict occur from that spell being used on him like him being pissed off about the massive invasion of privacy that memory reading spells are and him reacting like ANYBODY would to such a transgression. I always have liked the writers who make conflict occur in that manner like their main character doesn't know they did that but they find out and get pissed or the main character catches and shoves them out of his mind and then gets angry.
8058584 that sounds like a good idea but I'm going off of what I know from other stories I've read. For example before he was a merc Johnny was part of an elite spec ops group that consisted of a single soldier from six different militaries such as the Marines, SAS, Spetsnaz, SDF, German special forces (can't spell the name it's in German), and Israeli special forces (the Sayeret Matkal). They've gone on so many missions that they considered each other family and Johnny was engaged to his second in command who is named Samantha Carter she was in the SAS and they were supposed to get married in three weeks after the forth of July but they ended up getting called to an American embassy because Isis planted five I.E.D's in the building and they were the closest responders. During the mission Samantha accidentally stepped on a Russian anti-tank mine that was buried in front of the bomb and after Johnny tried for twenty minutes to disarm the bomb she told him to get the other bomb out of range, he reluctantly agreed and did as he was told but as he was leaving to get the rest of the team she saw no choice but to step off the mine killing herself in the process. Fast forward three months after the event Johnny has become what master chief did after losing cortana and his team was beginning to worry about him but before they could talk to him they got a report that they have just found the very terrorist responsible for the bomb and the death of his fiancé and they were sent to wipe them out. Long story short they arrived got ambushed because someone sold them out and all but one member got killed. Johnny was killed but he was brought back to life by a twisted doctor who planned to used him to bring down the US and its allies but he failed and Johnny escaped and went on a killing spree of everyone in the facility he was being kept in. Now fast forward again ten years and you know the rest.
8065832 that sounds epic dude but all that would DEFINITELY leave some trust issues for him to bring a little conflict between the ponies and him self I can't wait for the next update.
8066943 the trust issues that he has is that some of the girls fall in love with him but he can't fall in love with them out of fear that he might lose them like he lost his fiancé but overtime he ends up falling in love with them anyway so he becomes determined to to protect them with his life.
8068354 The fiancé died yes however where are the trust issues from a teammate betraying him and his team.
8068894 the betrayal comes from someone he didn't expect to do that sort of thing.
8070138 Okay then. Still an EPIC story dude.