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8097810 Love your avatar.

Just read all the chapters so far interesting start. Looking forward to what come next. Keep up great work.

name of the dojo Ryozampaku right?

8097810
Thanks you for pointing that out.

8097850
Yes I know I have bad grammar and I'm working on that. I'm actually only in middle school so I don't know how to get access to any editors. Thanks for the advise though and I will take it into consideration.

8097825 how can you NOT taste the sarcasm literally DRIPPING OFF OF THOSE WORDS.

8116160
Thai you for the support and ill be bringing much more, rest assured.

Still seems a bit rushed but your doing good!

8128062
I'm make sure that I work on that but thanks for the support.

Hey is this getting an update soon? This is great.

Underage user. Mods! Ban him.

P.S. This "story" sucks. Shitty "OC", boring premise, and bad dialogue.

any new chapter coming out?

soul reaper thing are't yes or no?

Holy shit! A new chapter after so long. Hope to see more and not be left hanging after that ending.

:pinkiesmile::applejackconfused::applejackunsure::twilightangry2::flutterrage: You don't want to know what I think of this.

Update it please is it where he blacks out because of Luna Savin him but get hurt instead and he snaps and be comes a soul reaper and nearly ends flaming ash

8101760
Because most people on this site have incredibly low standards.

more.....MORE......MORE!!!!!!!!

When's the update coming up

"AH! BLOODY TARTARUS! WHAT THE SHITE!" He yells as he holds his muzzle in pain. I was surprised to see he had an Australian accent but whatever. He uncovers his muzzle and glares at me. "Why you no good piece of traAH!!" He yells as I punch him in the muzzle again. "CELESTIA DAMN IT MATE!" He screams out in pain as he looks to his teammates. "Support please!" The others look at each other before looking back at the two of us and moves up. "HA! Let's see you handle all three of AH! DAMN IT!!" Yes, I punched him in the muzzle......again. It's not an asshole move, it's just he was annoying me. The other two finally reach us as the injured member, who I'm sure has a broken muzzle now, is on the floor in pain. One of them tries to stab me but I just tilt my body and rush to knee him in the gut. This takes the wind out of him as his teammate swings at me multiple times but is failing as I just move out of the way at the last second. Eventually I move behind him and grab the back of his head, before slamming it down into the dirt, knocking him out. The member I just knee'd tries to chop my head off, but fails as I roll backwards before running to him and dropkicking him to the ground. I walk over to him to see he's out of commission, leaving only the one with a broken muzzle. He eventually got up and grabbed his sword before looking at me and prepares to run at me..........only for him to call to the ground unconscious. Well that was anticlimactic.

Dbz abridged

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