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Blackbird2


A pony writer and video maker just trying to find an audience

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After an unexpected nap together, Twilight finds some of her feelings for Rainbow Dash might be changing...

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I approve of this fic. This ship. Whatever. :twilightsmile: Now I wonder where it goes from here. Ideas in head. :scootangel:

pretty well written actually, wasnt sure whst to expect from a random new story from a new author but I was pleasantly supprised.

6614017 Hey thanks! I know I'm new here but I've been writing and posting pony fics over on FF.N for about four and a half years now. Just started posting them over here on a friend's advice.

6614021 ah cool

Only grammar / spelling issue I noticed was that you need a space after...so not like this, like... this

6614031 Thanks. I'll try to get to it. The formatting can be weird on this site sometimes and it's hard to get them all.

:rainbowhuh: A very nice little story here. Good flow and progression. Nice use of detail. You have earned the like! :twilightsmile:

“And what was so important it was grabbing your attention this time?!” Twilight growled.

“Your smile,” Rainbow blurted out.

11/10 :rainbowkiss:

“I dunno Twilight. A play? About Starwhirl the Breaded?” she repeated in disinterest.

Should be Bearded? Although, Starswirl the Breaded sounds like it might be good fried in oil hehe.

Either have I until today,” Twilight said as she pulled herself away from the table. “I’m just not sure what to do now.”

Neither

“I dunno Twilight. A play? About Starwhirl the Breaded?” she repeated in disinterest. “I know you’re crazy about him but I just don’t find him that interesting.”

Bearded

This is all I could think of while reading. Part starts at 1:50

6620841 Congrats man! That is EXACTLY where I got the idea for this story from! I was wondering if anyone was going to figure it out.

6620906 I can't tell you how many times I watched through the entirety of Friends. The whole scene just took that reference and beat me over the head with it. I thought that there was no way it couldn't be one.

Glad to know I was spot on!

That was so adorable:rainbowkiss:

If only they kissed

6689543 Then you might want to check out my new fic "The Clockwork Pony".

6691322 I might check it out later:derpytongue2:

6692643 Hope you enjoy it if you do.

This was cute. The ending felt a bit abrupt, but it works well. The scene with the dress code didn't come off too well, though. It read more like "rules I don't like don't apply to me, because princess" rather than "classism is a bad thing."

7171264 Yeah I was trying to walk the fine line there but it seems I slipped up a bit. Try to make sure to do it better next time. Glad you still enjoyed it though.

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