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Spartan889


Just a normal dude who loves making fics

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I wish I didn't bought that helmet. But who cares about that! Now I am in Equestria more importantly I'm the current ruler of the Crystal Empire ruler also have a couple Protoss Templars and others with me. But those who dare threaten our new home shall face our wrath!

Chapters (2)
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Interesting story. Let's see how it plays out.

DAMMIT!

I thought I was gonna be the first...:pinkiesad2:

You might want to typo-proof your synopsis. It's the first thing people read, and they will judge your story based on what they see there. Typos there are a biiiig no-no.

It has potential. I love stories where a person beats shining armor and cadence to the crystal empire and becomes the crystal empire's leader

6272567 One thing about the displace there never is a first. XD

Looks interesting.
I like it when Lovebutt doesn't get the control of the empire.
Can't wait to see how this goes.

Looks like the crystal wolves have new allie or enemy, only time will tale

I would love to see this cross over with the crystal wolves

THIS has p[ossibilities, I'll follow. Oh and since he had no idea where they were, ,he wouldn't have know Sombra's name

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True... DAMMIT! LOGIC YOU HAVE SNEAKED UP ON ME AGAIN! I will need to watch my back better.:trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright:

If you see any speeling errors or anything just inform me and please go easy on the criticisms too.

sorry could not resist

And now we only lack Terrans XD
Great idea, i like the Story so far, and the faint scene at the end was funny XD

Interesting story. However, if this story ends up dead and forgotten after couple of chapters, don't expect any support from readers....

Promising. Well worth my attention even in its current condition, but I still recommend getting an editor.

AWESOME, can't wait to see more :pinkiehappy:

MORE! MORE! MORE! MORE! MORE! MORE! MORE!

I NEED MORE!!!! love the story so far and cant wait for the next chapter to come out, hope its soon

Anyone home? Going to update soon?:fluttercry:

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Still alive but due to personal life is making a lot of delays.

You need a good editor, badly.

Truth be told, I never really liked displaced. They just kinda feel unrealistic. You know? People don't just get cut off from everything they've ever lived with and just go 'meh'. But I've always wanted a Protoss in Equestria fic, so I'll follow this and see where it goes.

It has potential, let's see where you take this.

Looks good so far. Looking forward to more.
Keep up the good work. Deus tecum.

Dude it's: EN TARO TASSADAR



OMFG I can't believe that's what annoys me the most out of all of your spelling mistakes... :applejackunsure:

6544437 Understandable, since as a StarCraft fan that kind of mistakes should be considered heresy. For example, there was a fic that keep spelling "Auir" instead of "Aiur". Mfw :pinkiecrazy:

6545079 True dat fellow brother (or sister) of the StarCraft fandom... true dat.

Story have a decent start, but could really use some proof-read to fix all the spelling errors. Also, ignore the next statements if I'm wrong, since I don't read Displaced fics much. The whole part about explaining that you are a Human to the supposed fictional characters and telling them their entire existence is a game to us, and having them immediately understand, treating that sort of exposition as nothing is really illogical (not that the Displaced concept is any more sane, but still). If the MC just go along with the flow instead of explaining, it would make a better introduction.

6545111 Or better yet, making the other protoss treating that as something like their leader being mind wiped of sort. It's a starcraft universe...Mind related shenanigant are in abundant.

This Story seems great so far! Hope you continue it!

I the name of all what is holly please update this.

it's quiet face paced, i tried reading it word for word, but i couldn't picture how most of the combat went, how your main character went from freaked out to calm and collected.

I'll fav and follow your story, but do try and put a bit more detail into it


Good Job By the way:twilightsmile:

Question: Update?

Fast, but I find the ending to my tastes.

So we have a Xenolestia in this universe?

Still a bit quick, but I find it very odd that so much time passed without Cadance and Shining Armour trying to check up.

Must be convenient for the Protoss that they need so little sustenance. I'd love to be able to live on as little solar radiation as moonlight.

*cough* Needs more Karax (Basically the Swann of the Protoss)
Well, even without Karax and Vorazun and Selendis, this is proving to be a good story.
Remember: Don't listen to evil Solarkness' on the internet trying to tell you to do something, because if you do your story might become worse than if you don't.
Keep up the great Brotoss!
(And maid-outfits)

Aw please don't tell me Chrysalis died.

MORE PLEASE LET ME KNOW WHAT HAPPENS I LOVE THIS STORY

Loved the chapter cant wait for the next one, and im interested to see when you introduce the mian six

Seems a lot like the crystal wolves, but I like it so far. Also, It's alive!

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She said that more than one country attacked them so Celestia might not even have attacked them.

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