So yeah, went to Comic-con with my girlfriend and cosplayed as a Tyranid Swarmlord. And I saw this creepy merchant selling some legit stuff. I bought a set of Bone Sabres to complete my costume but ended on some girly show land called Equestria filled with xenophobic ponies. So my plan? Run to some random ass town with a squad of Tyranids and open a diner!
Hey look a cupcake. *picks it up and eats it and spits it out* THIS *BLEEPING * CUPCAKE IS SO *BLEEPING* SWEET, IT GAVE KOBE DIABETES!!!
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finally a tyranid displace
and this is good and great
Love it already.
Make more please!
Buddy, you deserve a lot more likes and faves then we can give. Bravo and well done.
well.... you did attack first....
I had similar Idea for a fic, I started making it but then I realized my story was crap and abandoned it before I even finished the first chapter. It's still sitting unpublished on my account, Hopefully your story lasts much longer than 'Omnomnom: A Swarmlord in Equestria Tale' did.
can't wait for the next chapter
well this actually happened
ill check this out later.
Yay a Tyraind story
So we got a Swarm lord, Warriors and Carnifex. What's next Lictor?
oh lord, the others are going to try to NOMNOMNOM her aren't they?
they are 'nids, she is a tasty teasty eldar...TIME FOR A Doom of Malan'tai!
Okay so two thing about this bug me. Heh bug, get it? Cause nids? no? okay then.. anyways.
Pacing! I know its a comedy fic so that grants a bit of leeway, but slow it down a little. The plot is moving at 88 MILES PER HOUR! Great Scott!
Secondly, and this is just a bit of nitpicking. A swarmlord, or any Tyranid for that matter, CAN'T drop their weapons. They are attached to them. Literally grown from and intertwined with their own flesh. Heck just look at your cover art. He could let them go but they'd be dangling from his arms.
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Swarmlords weapons aren't attached. Most Tyranid weapons are attached to them but some do not.
6457057 You might wanna double check there mate. They are attached to them. its true that some of the older tyranids ( see the days of 40K mark 3 ) had some weapons they carried like a normal gun or sword. But any bioform from mark 5 onward has their weapons grown out of their own body. Including the swarmlord. The blades are grown from its own bones and charged with psychic energy directly from its mind. Heck you can see the bio conduits attached to the grips. Some weapons like the lash whip have a mind of their own but are still fused to the Hive Tyrants flesh. To take a quote from the codex: Its nearly impossible to see where the Tyranid ends and its weapon symbiotes begin.
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Is that so. Darn..now how am I going to keep them?
more plz
I think that the bleeping needs to be replaced with squeels to be more lore friendly.
6457108 im sure you could find some way to improvise. a little clever writing can solve it no problem. some new type of forced evolution maybe to allow the blades to retract or be stored somehow. Tyranids mutate all the time after all
Wouldn't equestrian be gone in like a day? XD Tyranids devour entire planets worth of life very quickly and that's what we know about and they usually have space ships.
Also I apologise in advance as I'll be one of those arseholes who nitpick out what isn't canon. Such as the fact that near every Tyranid that isn't a Swarm Lord is an animal and nothing else. It's literally the only reason Swarm Lords exist. Even then they should all be overcome with the urge to eat every single living thing they see. Plants included.
This story looks great, however, I can't help but notice how the past and present tense is in a continuous - and quite annoying- switch. It throws me off a LOT. Man, I'm here not to criticize you, but the story needs a proofreading. I can help you with it.
Anyway, about the good parts.
The story starts off in a quite quick pace, however, after in Equestria it slows down, so it's all good.
The point that made me love this fic was this:
This is the single best thing I have read in the past weeks!
Moving on in the story, I think there should be a little bit of explanation of how the other Tyranids appeared. Hopefully that won't go unexplained. Well, that's about it... save for what the mane 6 - or the ponies generally - react to these news.
-Zeph
This is perfect.
this is an amazing story but are you going to explain how the tyranids got there and how he will get more or will they just somehow wander into his presence
ch.2 now plz
BRING ME MORE!
You know, once this gets updated again..... I'm certain Ahriman would be astonished to meet a SwarmLord....
The fuck?
Since when could Hive Tyrants blast energy out of their swords?
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The energy empowers the Sabres giving them destructive power which will destroy anything it hits.
It's a Swarmlord not a Hive Tyrant.
that carnifex.... if the best damn carnifex in existence.
Interesting start... Can't wait to see what happens...
I like it.
We gonna see Sarah in this?
Awesome job, dude^^ Please more
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More like 12/10. I would simply love more of this. Plz
more plz
The Swarmlord, one of the only 'nids to actually outsmart the Ultramarines who's own military tactics are legendary! You have my attention!
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Hope it doesn't go like it did with Marsara.
I like how this is going, keep it up ^^
Could be interesting. I'll keep an eye on this for now. I can see possibilities for it in the future.
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It is an honor to have the author of the Gilgamesh displace enjoy this.
Is it dead? (pokes with stick) I think so.
Did this story die? Or do you nit have enough time to work on it?
Nice story you have here :3
Is it bad that when i see the word 'tyranid' that the first thing that goes through my head is "REEEEEE"?
make more chapters please
all you need is the red terror and old one eye to show up lol
realy please make more
Hersey
Death to xenos
FOR THE EMPEROR!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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your pleas have not been heard
what a shame they canceled it in 2016
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I'm sorry but he died in 2016