After The Beep
"Howdy, it's Applejack. Sorry I missed your call, leave a message after the beep and I'll get back to you as soon as I can!"
BEEP
"She didn't answer. Should I leave a message?"
"Yeah, sure."
"Okay. Hey AJ, it's Dash."
"And Pinkie!"
"Yeah, and Pinkie. And Sunset."
"Hi Applejack!"
"Okay, quiet guys! The message is gonna get too long! Anyways, we're headed to the beach and we were wondering if you wanted to come. We already called Twi, Fluttershy and Rarity but they're all busy. Maybe you are too and that's why you didn't answer."
"Please come Applejack! It'll be sooo fun!"
"Pinkie, she might be busy. Anyways AJ, let us know, and Sunset can come pick you up. See ya!"
"End of message."
"Howdy, it's Applejack. Sorry I missed your call, leave a message after the beep and I'll get back to you as soon as I can!"
BEEP
"Hey, it's Rainbow again."
"And Pinkie!"
"Yeah, Pinkie and Sunset are here to."
"Hi again!"
"Guys!"
"Oops, sorry Dashie."
"Anyways, as soon as we got to the beach it started raining, and it doesn't look like it's gonna let up. We're gonna head over to Sugarcube Corner to chill. I think Twi and Rarity are meeting us there later, but Fluttershy still can't make it."
"Ooo, I really hope you can come!"
"Let us know. See ya!"
"Bye!"
"End of message."
"Howdy, it's Applejack. Sorry I missed your call, leave a message after the beep and I'll get back to you as soon as I can!"
BEEP
"Wow, still not answering your phone? Someone must have a busy night. Oh, it's Dash again, in case you didn't know."
"An-"
"Yeah, and Pinkie. And Sunset."
"Hello again. Ouch, Pinkie!"
"Sorry!"
"Ok, well Pinkie just kicked Sunset in the face. From the back seat."
"It was an accident!"
"We're stuck in traffic right now, and Pinkie wanted to try calling you again to see if you'd answer. Which you didn't."
"Answer us! Answer us! Answer us!"
"Pinkie, chanting won't do anything."
"Yeah, listen to Sunset. She knows what she's talking about."
"End of message."
"Howdy, it's Applejack. Sorry I missed your call, leave a message after the beep and I'll get back to you as soon as I can!"
BEEP
"Pinkie Pie, what are you doing with my phone?"
"Calm down Dashie, I'm just calling Applejack!"
"Again? We're gonna fill up her entire inbox."
"That's okay, I just like listening to her voicemail message!"
"Pinkie, what just hit my foot?"
"Oops! It was my phone! I dropped it and it slid under your seat."
"Hold on, I think I can reach it."
"Wait till I stop at this red light, okay Dash?"
"Yeah Sunset, I will."
"Get it Dash, get it!"
"Pinkie, we want to make sure she's safe! Ok, now go ahead."
"Almost.... Ah! Got it!"
"Good, now the lights green, put your seatbelt back on-"
CRASH
"End of message."
"Howdy, it's Applejack. Sorry I missed your call, leave a message after the beep and I'll get back to you as soon as I can!"
BEEP
"Applejack, um... S-something happened. I-it's Rainbow and S-Sunset. There was an accident, and w-we crashed and now they're not moving an-and I don't know what to do. I-I need help, please answer your phone... I just, I don't know what to do an-and... Oh god, there's blood. There's a lot of blood, an-and and I think it's... Oh god, it's coming from her h-head and please help me, I-I'm all by myself and I just don't know what to do.
"End of message."
"Howdy, it's Applejack. Sorry I missed your call, leave a message after the beep and I'll get back to you as soon as I can!"
BEEP
"It's me, P-Pinkie Pie. The p-police and ambulance came... I'm in t-the back of the truck right now, with S-Sunset and Rainbow D-Dash and I tried to ask if they were gonna be okay and the p-paramedics just looked at me and they said they couldn't tell me and oh god, Applejack I just... I just need you to answer your phone and tell me it's gonna be ok because I just don't know w-what to do and I'm not sure why I called you, my fingers just did and I just n-need you to tell me it's going to be ok, please... just answer me...
"End of message."
"Howdy, it's Applejack. Sorry I missed your call, leave a message after the beep and I'll get back to you as soon as I can!"
BEEP
"Hi Applejack, it's Twilight. Pinkie told us a while ago that she, Rainbow Dash and Sunset Shimmer were going to meet Rarity and I at Sugarcube Corner. She said that you would be here to, and we were just wondering where everyone was? Do you think the others forgot? It's just the two of us so far. Nobody's answering their phones either, which is weird. Anyways, we'll hang out for a while longer and see if the others show up. Bye!"
"End of message."
"Howdy, it's Applejack. Sorry I missed your call, leave a message after the beep and I'll get back to you as soon as I can!"
BEEP
"Oh my god, oh god, Applejack, p-please answer your phone, please please, I n-need you. We got to the hospital and they r-rushed them away, S-Sunset and Rainbow and I don't know where they went and I don't know where to go... Sunset, t-they said she would be alright... But R-rainbow, she was bleeding so much, R-Rainbow was, because her head went right through the windshield, cause she took her s-seatbelt off to pick s-something up... and there was glass in h-her hair and they wouldn't let me near her... and oh god, Applejack.... she just... I-I couldn't see her eyes because they were closed, and, oh god, what if I never see them open again? I just need you to come down here and h-help me because I n-need you."
"End of message."
"Howdy, it's Applejack. Sorry I missed your call, leave a message after the beep and I'll get back to you as soon as I can!"
BEEP
"Hey, it's Twilight."
"And Rarity."
"We're just gonna head home now, because the others haven't shown up, and neither have you, and it's been two hours. Why don't we all hang out together tomorrow? I'll text the other girls later."
"See you tomorrow, darling!"
"Bye Applejack, and have a good night!"
"End of message."
"Howdy, it's Applejack. Sorry I missed your call, leave a message after the beep and I'll get back to you as soon as I can!"
BEEP
"She's gone. Oh god, she's gone... They couldn't save her, they tried but they just couldn't save her... Sunset's gonna be okay, but... But Rainbow is gone, and it's my fault and oh god, Applejack please just answer your phone! I need someone to just be here, and the doctors were asking for her information, they have to tell her family, and I... I just need to get out of here. I don't know where to go or how I'll get there but I just need to go. Because Dashie is dead and I lived and it should have been me! She had so much to live for, and she had so many plans for what she was gonna do and now she can't. Did you know she just got a scholarship for university? She j-just told me today. She was gonna graduate, and go live her dream, and now she can't... And it should have been me! Why did it have to be R-Rainbow, none of this was her fault! I've gotta get out of here. Applejack, why aren't you answering your phone, I need you to answer your phone. I don't know what-"
"End of message."
Applebloom paused, her clenched fist mere inches away from the wooden door. She pressed her ear to the worn surface, listening intently. The young girl heard nothing, so she turned around, about to walk away. As she took a step, she spotted her older brother leaning against his doorframe with crossed arms.
"Mac, what's wrong? What happened?" Applebloom whispered, a sense of dread filling her entire body. "Something had to have happened." Mac shook his head.
"Don't know." He grunted. "Granny wouldn't tell me. But I do know that Applejack needs someone to be there for her." Applebloom nodded, approaching the oldest Apple sibling.
"Well, tell me what happens later, ok?" She slowly walked towards her own room before she was stopped by a hand on her shoulder.
"Little Bloom," she turned, surprised by Mac's voice. The last time he had called her by that old nickname was at their dad's funeral, six years ago. He gripped her shoulders, bending down so he was at her height.
"Mac?" She whispered.
"You've gotta do it." He broke their eye contact. "I'm no good at talking about feelings and stuff. I reckon she needs you more than she needs me right now." Applebloom bit her lip.
"Ok." She nodded. "Ok, I will." Mac smiled sadly.
"I'll be waiting, right out here." He sat on the floor across from Applejack's bedroom door. Applebloom approached the door again and raised her fist. Glancing at her brother one last time, she knocked three times. There was no answer, but she slowly turned the doorknob.
"Applejack?" She cracked the door and slipped inside. "It's me, Bloom." She was met by a loud sniff.
"H-heya Bloom." Applejack's voice cracked slightly. Applebloom stepped further into the room, catching sight of her sister. She was sitting in the space between her bed and the wall, clutching her phone in her hand. Applebloom couldn't see her face, as it was hidden behind her long, blond hair.
"Applejack?" Applebloom cautiously approached her sister, unsure of what to say. "Can I sit with you?" The girl huddled on the floor didn't answer. Applebloom slid down next to her, hugging her knees. The sisters sat in silence for a moment, one with tears streaming down her face, the other with a tight throat and a heavy chest.
"Do... Do you wanna tell me what happened?" The redhead scooted closer, so their shoulders were touching. Applejack shook her head.
"Nope." She clenched her fist tighter around her phone, which had been dead until about an hour prior. "You can listen for yourself." She dropped the phone in Applebloom's lap. The young girl glanced at the screen, seeing the inbox full of voicemails. She tapped the first one, dated for earlier that day, and held it up to her ear. She felt Applejack's hand grip her own, her tears flowing faster.
"Howdy, it's Applejack. Sorry I missed your call, leave a message after the beep and I'll get back to you as soon as I can!"
BEEP
"She didn't answer. Should I leave a message?"
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Hi, this is Chicago Ted.
I'm calling due to your unusual storytelling style. It's rather gripping how the phone messages line up with the current chain of events-- no wonder law enforcement uses them for investigations!
Anyway, I'll be watching this story, so you best keep writing.
If you have any questions, my number is http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Chicago%20Ted
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Oh my God....that was heavy.... I'm never going to put off charging my phone ever again
This needs a sequel if there is one....I...need to cope with this....DARN YOU, WRITER!!! 
[whimper]
*sniff* just...keep up the good work! T-this was great!
[bawling]
I don't know how to feel about this story...
Wow... I did not expect that twist. I mean, I expected something, but wow, it certainly wasn't that! (Granted, I neglected to look at the tags for some reason, but that just made it so much more effective.)
Seriously though, great job with the build up. The pacing felt really good, and you captured the different moods really well. It was heartwrenching to read Pinkie's later messages. And I can't even imagine being Applejack and listening to all that. To be able to hear the moment your friend lost their life, over and over again in a recording, and wondering if it wouldn't have happened if you had just charged your phone... chilling. And that blissfully unaware message from Rarity and Twilight just makes it all that much worse! Fantastic work.
Don't care that feeliest isn't a word. I'am using it.
Honestly, I thought I wasn't going to like this when I started reading it because of the...unconventional style. Turns out, this was really effective and sad.
This story sure is something and had me begging for more!
Good job on writing such an awesome story!!!!
That was pretty heartbreaking.
I thought this was going to be just another answering machine story, like a dozen or so I've read before.
I was surprised. I can't call it a pleasant surprise given the tragedy, but...
Anyway, well played.
Wow. I just... Wow. That was excellent and heart breaking and wonderfully well written. You've earned a like, favorite, and a follow. I hope to see more stories from you soon, just hopefully with a little bit happier endings.
Wow, I wasn't expecting that... I thought from the description we'd read as the Mane 6 find out something's wrong with Applejack over the course of days or something. Unconventional, effective, emotive... and what a twist. At first, I thought there was going to be a second tragedy when Big Mac and AB were outside Applejack's door. I also really like that the end comes back to the beginning.
I don't see why Pinkie didn't answer Twilight/Rarity's calls and txts, but I guess she was pretty shaken up to respond rationally. I honestly could not have guessed Rainbow would actually die.
The story never really answered the questions in the description. Still a good story though.
Good attempt at a storytelling gimmick done to death.
This is mindblowing.
The amount of feels and depth behind the unusual way you tell this sad story is just.. wow.
I can't... I need to... give me a second..
I just..
"She didn't answer. Should I leave a message?"
My god, wow, just... Wow, this story was sad, especially in the short amount of time given to present that feeling, and it was excellent.bbbbbbut sniff it was really ...
Woah just woah so many emotions all packed into one story just woah
Okay, but why ponies?
I did love this story, and though it was a bit of a cliche, I really do feel sorry for Pinkie in the end. I feel like doing my own fanfic about these two now!
Thanks for the muse!
I did not see that coming. And I actually cried for a little bit. I liked the way the story was written and all the emotions that kind of hit you in the gut rather suddenly. It was beautiful.
Whoa, darker than I thought... But a great read anyways!
THE FEELS, AUTHOR!!!! ALL THOSE INNOCENT FEELS!!
YOU BROKE THEM ALL!!!
But feels aside,
this was an excellent read, with an unexpected twist at the end. So sad!
Just woke up. Saw this and said to myself, this one seems harmless! Didn't read the tags. Blindsided by feels.
Hi there! I read your story-duh-and what I can say is: Have a favorite.
It may have helped if you used colored text for when the characters were using the phone, though.
You know this was featured, right?
Loved this story.
-ISP
[End Call]
Good story, (I usually don't cry at stories, and this one almost made me, so amazing job!)
There are a couple things, though.
This should be
That's Ok, though. Just a small mistake. :)
The whole story, you used pass-tense words, such as
so, maybe you should fix that back to a past-tense state?
I mean, if you meant it to be that way, then forget the last suggestion.
Really amazing story, totally would recommend, and keep it up! :D
Wow, that was really good. I liked it a lot! This is the second time I've read a story told in this kind of a fashion, and you pulled it off pretty well.
I do have one suggestion though. When Big Mac calls Applebloom "Little Bloom" and you say that he hadn't called her that since their father's funeral ... That felt really forced. Somewhat contrived.
Other than that though it was a brilliant read. Thank you for writing it. ^_^
Why didn't she just pick up the phone?
don't cry... I need to stay strong..
*sits in the corner and cries* MEEEHHHHH
Okay. This is the second story I've read about a car crash this week; near the day that my Driver's Ed teacher was talking about crashes, and cell phones, and...now I'm thinking that this is an omen. O_O
Man, this was deep. Deeeeeeeep. I loved it as much as I fear it. (I'm probably being paranoid, so, whatev's)
-GTU
Unfortunatly, I can no longer cry,or I thought I couldn't, but this was a very intriguing story. hit me right where it hurts....
I don't get it. What's the point of this story?
100 likes...
6138521 I'd say it's most likely an effective exercise in telling a story only through answering machine messages. Also a brief exploration into the issue of Survivor's Guilt. It was pretty effective at its job.
Ummm, yeah. Not really impressed with this at all, to be honest.
The moral of the story: Never let Pinkie drive.
As if that needed to be said.
6137366 from what the last paragraph said it was dead but what i wanna know is why not just leave it on while charging and what phone takes an entire day to charge mines done in like an hour and a half
6138905 sunset was driving, pinkie was apprently in the back seat
6139198 They let the former villain drive?!
That's even worse that letting the delusional hypermaniac take the wheel! You never know when they'll suddenly become villains again! Especially if it's a Marvel comic...
6139232 lol marvel gonna need some cream for that burn
Excellent story. I had wondered if this was going to be another run-of-the-mill answering machine story, or if it would have had a cliché ending. I had, and it seems weird to say this, but I had hoped it would be this particular ending, as it is an inversion of the normal ending to these style stories.
Fantastic work, got a sniffle out of me at the end.
Not bad, but towards the end where the feels should hit you hard was a tad rushed in pacing... Besides that it was pretty good.
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
It's a very interesting, buuuuuuut.... it's not very good. Everything up to the crash was fine, but then Pinkie just kept calling Applejack and info dumping. Why wouldn't she call any of her other friends? Did she really call AJ before calling the ambulance? Pinkie is silly but she's not stupid. The whole time I was expecting the story to take a very different turn, that there would be some reason AJ wasn't answering her phone which was going to be gradually revealed, but no, apparently she had it on silence or something (or the battery was dead as it turns out). Like I said, it was a VERY good idea, I just think it was wasted on trying to get some easy feels.
Tis a fine story. My only problem with this story is that Pinkie made no attempt to call Twilight or Rarity to tell them what happened.
Spotted this story on the Featured list. Nice job!
I gotta admit, when I read the short summary I pretty much expected exactly this to happen.
6133079
Sure it answered the questions! "Why isn't Applejack answering her phone?" Because her phone was dead, I assume she didn't think she was missing much to just let it charge. "And why is her inbox so full?" Tragedy struck and Pinkie didn't know what to do but keep trying to call AJ... then and the other girls had no idea what was going on so they thought AJ might be able to help.
6139190
Old phones? My old flip phones would take several hours to fully charge, and I figure Applejack had better things to do than to sit there waiting... or so she though.
6133079 Her phone was dead. She had just charged it when she read the voice messages. It was really briefly said, and I almost missed it myself.