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Rabuiods


Brony and fanfic writer. Part time college instructor, full time grad student

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Laughing Stock is a standup comedian from Canterlot who is having a difficult time with life as of late. He hops on a train to Ponyville in hopes that small town life will help him get a better perspective on things. During the journey, he meets a mare who offers to help him find what he is looking for and some things that he doesn't expect to find. During his trip, he realizes that while accomplishing your dreams is a fantastic feat, having nopony to share them with makes life's long journey pointless.

Special thanks to Golden Hoof and wildberk for helping me with this beast!

Another special thanks goes out to HoovesLikeJagger for the fantastic artwork!

Chapters (7)
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Comments ( 142 )

Not a bad start. This looks like this will be an interesting read. Loved the Mane Cook joke by the way.

First off all, this deserves more readers.

Secondly, the commas at the end of dialogue is bugging the crap pout of me,
(see what I did there)

Last thing is that I really like this story and I can not wait for the next chapter!

I feel sorry and glad for him at the same time.

Cliche ending is cliche! BUT it's good! Congratulations you have made me like a cliche ending. I hope you're happy!

Although it is cliche, it is also Daww inducing. Besides, the story isn't over yet, you might find the ending not so cliche...

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Cause the story says incomplete...:pinkiehappy: And any good story doesn't let a romance bloom without some sort of hitch or problem.

Huzzah! More marvelous chapters of magnificence!

Oh god I missed things...:derpyderp2:
I'll go fix them RIGHT now.

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Oki doki loki!:pinkiehappy:

I'm going to send you chapter 7 revised later tonight.

Marvelous! I really like the way you handled this and how this ended! So I say to you good sir: Great job! I honestly thought the marefriend would be mean like his ex best friend but instead you made her a character you could use later!

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Well, they say write what you know! :raritywink: Thanks again for the comment!

Awesome story man. I thought I would hate the chuck norris references the first time I saw one being that I played WoW for 5 years but you made them funny again:rainbowlaugh:. heres hoping we see more storys from you in the future:pinkiehappy:

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Thanks! You are pretty righteous yourself!:pinkiesmile:
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I am tired of Chuck Norris jokes myself; so I was VERY determined to make sure any references weren't horrible. And you're in luck, I am currently writing a sequel to this one! :pinkiegasp:
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I aim to please, thank you

What a way to end it. Excellent, truly excellent.

Get on that next story, bro.

im enjoying this. when i read they are going to meet applejack i was like. :pinkiehappy: did gonna be good. :trollestia:

You sir, have made a masterpiece!
I have not read something that made me happy like this in a long time.
Well played, Keep up the good work.

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Dawww, thank you!:raritywink: That motivates me to work even harder!

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Why thank you! :twilightsmile:
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That is the reaction I was hoping for. thank you for enjoying it!:pinkiesmile:

I cant belive I laughed at that 'Stable tennis' joke *groan*:rainbowlaugh:

“Fancypant’s, I have one question to ask. Have you ever considered being a superhero? Seriously, you’re rich and good looking! Your parents aren’t dead, are they?”
:rainbowlaugh:

Stable tennis:pinkiesmile: I'd be lying if I said I never heard that one before also.....
:pinkiegasp:A hetero Twilight Sparkle pairing with an OC thats not a human stu??? Rare find.

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Thank you, I do my best to try stuff that is "somewhat original".:pinkiehappy:

991159 Well done then,human/pony pairings never sit well with me. I see so many stallion OCs on DA plus a large list of BG males with fan names on MLP wiki but barely either of these are used in the fanfics I find for some reason.Always nice to see find someone use one.

A few grammar errors but otherwise a good chapter.:heart:

Conversation between Applejack and Laughing Stock seems rather strange to me.

I`d picture Laughing Stock being more forceful about not being lumped with showbiz type... Something like this.

“So do we have a deal?" Applejack was gritting her teeth. Her hoof was hanging in front of the stallion, waiting for him to shake it.

Laughing Stock paused, making a show of thinking things over, then abruptly answered - "No. Deal`s off." It wasn`t what Applejack expected to hear. "What? Why you..." - she was shushed by a waving hoof. "And now, I`ll tell you why it`s off." - he offered quietly, glaring at orange mare - "Because I will tell her on my own, in the RIGHT moment. And if I`m really the slimy showbiz type for whom right moment never comes, ask yourself this - would you want THAT kind of pony anywhere around Twilight?"

Wow, a well-made OC story...don't see too many of these around. Great work on this! I can't wait to see what kind of jokes he's got!

It's funny, we both have OCs shipped with Twilight. Yours is a comedian, mine's a soldier. Your's found his cutie mark by complete accident, mine had his life circumstances force it upon him. :pinkiegasp:

That's interesting. I'm really hooked right now. Great job! :pinkiehappy:

Silver out!

This is really good. I am enjoying this greatly! Your structure is great and you go deeper into the thought processes of these ponies rather than keeping it bland like many stories do.

Great work!

Our OCs are very alike in personality to some extent. They'd be instant bros if they ever met! :rainbowlaugh:

Silver out!

Applejack's contract, Rainbow Dash and her Buck Norris jokes, and a near muffin fatality at the hooves of Pinkie Pie...:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

I laughed so much during this chapter! Laughing Stock is an awesome character, I can see why Twilight likes him. :twilightsmile:

The grammar did get a little screwy in that last paragraph though, watch that. Anyways, carry on! :twilightsmile:

Silver out!

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Thanks for all the kind words! Your story intrigues me, which story is it? I want to check it out!:pinkiehappy:

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I can't wait for you to read chapter 7 if you laughed a lot during this one. :trollestia::pinkiehappy:

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He's not in my story just yet but he's gonna intro'd in my next chapter. My story is a little darker than yours and has a crossover/world war type thing going on. I still try to put a little comedy in there for relief though, which you seem quite good at yourself.

Spoiler Alert: Reading Optional

Anyways, if you care, my OC is Blaze Silverstein. He is a brown earth pony with light green eyes and a field commander for the Republic of Karalia, an Equestrian allied nation. My plan is to have him fight alongside Shining Armor throughout the war and that's how he comes into contact with Twilight. He's slightly younger than her. Wish me luck on how I'm gotta get that shipping to work! :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

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Ok now that my self-advertising session is out of the way, I'd like to tell you that when I clicked on this story, I had high hopes for it...

And I got exactly what I wanted! This is a great story and I could sure learn a lesson from you about writing while you learn a lesson from me about GRAMMAR! :twilightangry2::twilightangry2:

Just kidding it's not that bad, and I'm sure you've probabgly fixed it already.

I can already tell just by looking at the picture that your sequel is gonna be gold! :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

Great work and keep it up! :yay:

Silver out!

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