Epilogue
Celestia sighed as she trotted through the palace corridors, a tired expression on her face. Around her, guardsponies snapped crisp salutes and maids curtsied quickly, offering a token acknowledgement of her presence. She closed her eyes—the lids weighing down with an unusual amount of sleepiness—before forcing them open again.
She followed a few more hallways before she found herself smiling at her golden chamber doors. Outside stood the same two guards she had assigned to protect Dawn, each one remaining stoic as false eyelashes and messy makeup adorned their faces. Celestia had to suppress a chuckle as they saluted, but she offered them a warm smile.
“How was Princess Dawn today?” she asked.
“Your Highness, her schedule was followed down to the minute,” the nearest one said. “Princess Twilight arrived several minutes late, but her lessons still followed as planned.”
“Good, good,” Celestia replied. “I must admit I am a bit surprised to see the two of you like this, but it’s reassuring to know that you two will subject yourselves to a filly’s whims for her amusement.”
“Permission to speak freely, Your Highness?” the other one asked.
“Granted.”
“I have a daughter of my own,” he said smoothly. “I couldn’t stand to think of disappointing Princess Dawn and not my own filly.”
Celestia smiled wider as a warm feeling flooded her chest. “I believe a raise is in order for the two of you,” she said as she trotted past them.
The doors swung open gently as she walked in, glancing about the room. She half-expected Dawn to have made a mess of the room with her dolls and craft projects, but she raised her eyebrows as she saw her laying on her belly, gently flipping the pages of a rather large book as a fire crackled in the background. Twilight sat on a pillow next to her, scanning through a tome like her life depended on it.
“Dawn?”
Dawn’s ears immediately shot up and she spun to face Celestia, a grin larger than her face gracing her.
“Mommy!” she squealed as she ran to Celestia.
Bracing herself, Celestia opened her foreleg as Dawn crashed into her, squeezing her with all her might. Celestia returned the hug, and the two of them cooed in contentment.
“Did you have fun today?” Celestia asked.
“Uh huh! Twi-lee and I read lots of books and she helped me learn to pick stuff up with my magic!” Dawn said, releasing her mother.
Celestia raised her eyebrows again, glancing over to Twilight before smiling. “She did? What did you pick up?”
“Watch me, Mommy!” Dawn shouted as she ran to the small table where a teacup sat.
Planting her rump into a pillow, Dawn stuck her tongue out as she concentrated on the cup, a cyan aura materializing around her horn and the cup. She gave a few grunts and nodded her head, but the cup shook a few times before levitating from the table. Dawn immediately sat up as straight as she could and brought the shaky cup to her lips. A loud slurping filled the room and Dawn smiled widely as her cup floated back to the table.
“Oh my,” Celestia said, trotting up to the table. “That was fancy!”
“We still need to work on it, but she’s a natural,” Twilight said, walking over to the table.
“Just like you, Mommy!” Dawn squealed again.
Celestia sat down at the table, smiling as widely as Dawn when another teacup and a pot appeared on the table. Lighting her horn, Celestia watched as the pot lifted and poured a perfect stream of tea into her cup before setting the pot down.
“Mind if I join you?” she asked in a fancy tone.
“Wow!” Dawn gasped.
Together, they both levitated their cups and sipped on their tea, Dawn filling the room with her slurping again. Once they had set down the cups, Dawn stared into it as Celestia tilted her head.
“What’s wrong, sweetie?” she asked.
Dawn looked back up, a confused look on her face.
“Mommy, can you please tell me about Sunset?” she said.
Celestia’s pupils shrank to pinpricks as Dawn looked down into the cup again. Looking down at her own cup, she said, “I guess it is unavoidable that you would ask.”
She glanced over to Twilight, watching as she gained an interest in the table. Sighing, she returned her gaze and stared into Dawn’s eyes. “She was a former student of mine, like Twilight. I made a terrible mistake while she was with me and she became very angry at me.”
“Did the mirror make her mean?” Dawn asked.
Celestia shook her head. “No, she made herself mean. She was very greedy and thought I had lied to her, making her run away.”
Dawn looked down in confusion, studying her hooves.
“But that means she was lying to me,” she said slowly.
“Dawn,” Celestia said as she placed her unslippered hoof on Dawn’s. “Sunset was a very mean pony. She tried to hurt me, Twilight and Cadance when she was talking to you, but you’re better than her. You’re sweet and loving, things Sunset didn’t understand.”
Dawn looked up at Celestia, her eyes glossy.
“She said I was hurting her when you told me I was a princess,” Dawn whispered, her tone one of shame. “She said I was supposed to be like her and hurt you.”
“Dawn, you are you, no matter what Sunset told you,” Celestia stressed. “You didn’t hurt her more than she already hurt herself, so don’t think you’re a meanie. Sunset chose to be mean and use others, so you being happy and loving me, Twilight and Cadance made her go away, not you hurting her.”
Dawn looked down again, her golden mane falling over her eyes. Celestia leaned in and hugged Dawn again, holding her like she meant it. She felt Dawn shift before a small kiss was placed on her jaw.
“I love you, Mommy,” she whispered. “I don’t ever want to hurt you like Sunset.”
A small gasp came from Twilight as Celestia squeezed her eyes shut, her chest tightening.
“I love you too, sweetie,” she replied. “My little Solisia Specia.”
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D'awwwwwwwwwww.
This was so much fun to help you polish. So proud.
*Wipes liquid pride away*
That is the absolute sweetest thing! Incredible!!!
Excellent story, I really liked the background information you gave on the mirror and Starswirl the Bearded. I do have a few questions though, why did only two guards respond when Sunset screamed, were the others that intent on following orders, or do screams just not bother them? It would have been nice if you mentioned how much time had passed between Sunset's death and the night of her rebirth.
9/10 would recommend.
AWWWW! So wonderful and adorable and what a wonderful sweet and fantastic story!
Thank you for such a great tale!
Sequel?
It's OUT. Penstroke you better watch out!
P.S. Comet, don't worry about the dislikes... Someone's clearly got their brain addled.
I loved the story. But I'm a little confused. What Exactly happened to Sunset? Is she Dawn? Or is Dawn her own filly with Sunset in her head? Whats the deal?
I hope it was really Sunset but tell me what it was when you wrote this story.
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Solisia is to Sunset Shimmer as Nyx is to Nightmare Moon.
*leans back in my seat, and glances up at Sunset sitting on my shelf* Please bear with my Comet, I'm having to set my own thoughts on Sunset aside for this. This is one of the best things I've read Comet, and I will rank up with Past Sins. You captured Celestia perfectly and made her mortal and flawed. Dawn is adorable and deserves to know to truth and walk into the future as her own pony.
There is one glaring plot hole though, for the other side of the Looking Glass... murder investigation anyone?
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Well, considering Sunset was no longer human, had people under control, threw fireballs at people, and had no mercy to those she wished to enslave, I think the Elemental Blast that killed her could be considered self defense.
That, and Twilight would have been in so much shock, she'd jump through the portal before anyone recovered.
That's my reasoning anyway. Comet's may vary.
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Still got a dead body, a blown up building and a crater. Someone will want to investigate it.
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Building and crater, sure.
But there's no body; she was vaporised.
In any case, the portal is sealed. What happens there is irrelevant to the rest of the story.
(A deleted scene included an explanation of some things, but the word limit wouldn't allow. You can chat to Comet if you want some more answers)
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No body? Must have missed that, missing persons report then.
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Missing person?
Maybe. But what happens when (the real) (human) sunset shimmer turns up alive and well?
Hehe. We're getting into the realms of speculation here.
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Yeah... part of stems from the fact that Sunset ranks #2 on my Best Pony list.
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Now that we can definitely agree on
Considering the condensed nature, I would hesitate to call this the best I have ever read, but I liked past sims, and this is an intrestimg spin on the concept. Adoes to absolute favorites.
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If the word count wasn't 15k, there would be so much more explanation on everything, but thank you so much! I'm glad people like it!
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Possibly.
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CV said it pretty much. She is and is not Sunset at the same time.
5533848 I was never good at those kinds of logic questions. Thanks for the clarification.
5538243 I just think it's sad when one personality dies in such a way. Unfulfilled and engulfed in rage. I honestly think it's a worse fate than just death. To have your very being destroyed like it was worthless garbage. To not exist as if you never were. That's some scary stuff and sad to think about.
Still I loved the story regardless of how I feel personally. Hope you intend to continue on with it. Give "Sunset" some closer please.
What I like about this fic is it actually bothers to explain the how in a way in line with canon. It actually makes sense.
Sunset used a spell in Starswirl's books. This is something that was established at length in the show and comics. She did dig through his stuff and he did hide spells he thought were dangerous or incomplete canonically. It takes advantage of the canon to make it more feasible within the universe. It makes it feel better than most fics where it just happens and is never explained.
Overall this is a good read. It's very cute, perhaps too cute with the baby talk, but good nonetheless.
The epilogue was necessary. It really ties it all together and ends it in a satisfying way.
5538243 not hating for the length, but please continue this in a sequel.
This was an interesting story, but... I didn't really feel the weight of the events. For something like this, where an emotionally wrenching thing is happening, I just feel like the story would be better served from closer in. Feeling everything that comes, as it comes. Granted, that is a stylistic preference, and I am a fan of a strong character voice in a story, so I know that character's emotions inside and out.
The premise is solid, and the plot interesting, however, and the characters are decently within character - even if Dawn feels a little two dimensional at the moment. Seeing her grow up into a full pony would be interesting - especially if word of what her heritage is leaks out. Living with that spectre, real or imagined, could be something interesting to explore.
If you wrote a sequel, I would likely read it.
This is a very interesting mix of Past Sins and Harry Potter! Both the way Sunset preserved her life by imbuing a portion of it into a book (just as Valdemort did with his horcruxes) and the mirror showing what one desires (and the warning about spending too much time in front of it!) parallel the Harry Potter books. As a great fan of J.K. Rowling I approve!
BTW, do you intend to continue this as a series?
Alright, so there was a bit more with the voice, if indirectly.
I'm feeling mostly satisfied with this one. I enjoyed it, yes, but I can't help but feel things happened a bit quickly.
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But wait, does that mean post-contest, you'll be looking to expand this? Yeeeeeeeees.
This was so sweet that I can't even. Really an adorable story, rebirth into a better being than the original could ever hope to be.
Good job
A pity I can't downvote it more than once. There is so much wrong here I can't even decide where to start.
D'awww.
This was a great read. A really interesting take on both Sunset and Starswirl. I wish it was a bit more fleshed-out, but given the restraints of the contest, I think you did a good job. Have a fave, Comet. 
You sure this wasn't ALSO based on the Coldplay's song: Viva La Vida?
trololololol?I would love to see the scene where she's old enough to find out the full story. For some reason though, I feel like I know exactly how it would turn out.
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I presume you did not read the summary. This was an attempt to reboot Past Sins in a better way.
I really enjoyed this story and would love to see a sequel for what might happen in Dawn's teenage years or something similar.
This. I love this. I love this alot> this is perfection incarnate. Thank you for making this. I would pay for a sequel.