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Man this story is getting good~ I'm eager for more! But more than anything I really do still want to RolePlay this fic out, with some other characters, other than the mane 6, Zecora, Luna, and Tia....other characters like Fleur De Lis, or Trixie...would anyone be interested? Please answer!
... PINKIE FING PIE EVERYPONY!!!
My F5 key doesn't work anymore after waiting for the new chapter. Must've tapped it at least 9000 times.
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Nearly 15K words in the new chapter? Wintermist holy crap these chapters are getting huge!
I hope my body can take it.
6062892 Look up the group Lillith's "Special" House, you will find the rp partner you desire and more, oh so much more.
6063340 could you give me a link please? I can't seem to find it.
6063425 http://www.fimfiction.net/group/199688/lilith911s-special-house
Just got done working 10 hours in yard hauling around tree limbs, stoking fires, standing in a single spot for an hour at a time. While surfing phone I found this updated, I felt invigorated to keep going and am now getting ready to enjoy it~
Wow geeze, there's a lot happening in this chapter: First wake up sex with Luna and Zecora, then talking strategy with Luna, talking and rope fun with AJ, finished up with Pinkie Pie being remarkably reasonable by being completely unreasonable.
Both the bits with Luna, Zecora, and Applejack were all done very well. The whole wake up sex scene is a hot idea to imagine and fulfill. The whole bit with Big Mac and AJ was great, and then finally letting Applejack have her fantasy fulfilled was a good bit of fun.
The Pinkie Pie section though seemed a bit rushed, all in all the actual sex part was like a single paragraph of not very descriptive dialogue (though I did enjoy the food play a lot). I understand Pinkie's a bit crazy, but such a short sex scene feels like a travesty for the party pony who is easily the most kinky of the mane 6 (my personal opinion at least). so I hope Pinkie gets a big spotlight during the mane 6 orgy.
I'll accept that Pinkie trusts Twilight a lot and would probably be more than willing to be placed under control to keep being with her friends, but I am very interested to know what would happen if Twilight breaks that trust. Like how far does Pinkie's ability stretch? If Twilight broke a Pinkie promise would it even really matter if she can just make Pinkie forget or not care? Its kind of like a child trusting someone with their soul without really understanding all the deep implications of what that means,
As always I'm riveted to your story and have been very satisfied with both the quality of the story and your capability to keep to a decent update schedule!
Err, why would using the elements help in a fight with Celestia? I think Twilight might not qualify as righteous artifact wielder material at the moment...
It's possible wearing and using them would free her friends! The charm was shown to not be all powerful, and the elements (especially loyalty /honesty) surely don't play nice with mind control.
Maybe Twi should gat AJ's nipples pierced or something to show that she's her favorite
Woo! Okay, now that I've read through the whole chapter, I can make another comment...
First of all, I loved that first part with Twilight and Luna. Applejack is great and all, but I think Luna and Twi have to be my favorite pairing in this story, just because of what the Princess of Night represents. She's regal and wise and powerful, and to see her dutifully assisting the plot to take over her sister/enslave ponies is just wonderful. Having her give Twilight a specially crafted dream was really sweet.
Luna is just so fun to read. She's a Goddess, but of the Greek kind; flawed, 'human', with wants and desires.
I also enjoyed seeing things from AJ's perspective for a bit. Very sexy, and as far as I remember this is the first time we've watched from a POV besides Twilight. I wouldn't be averse to seeing more of that, if you are considering it. I'd especially love to see the mind control; the awakening itself isn't really something that can be shown, since it's inherently unnoticeable to the charmed character, but it'd be interesting to see its effects.
For example, the reader sees a minor skip in some way that the character doesn't perceive, and all of a sudden there are subtle (or not so subtle!) differences in the thought process of the person. Would be interesting to see first-hand how the charm messes with a person's mind/beliefs/perception.
I've noticed a large quickening of pace over the last couple chapters. Early on Twilight was charming one character every two-three chapters, but now in the last three chapters she's focused FOUR people. It completely makes sense within the context of the story of course, since Twilight is moving faster in order to try and consolidate her power before Celestia ruins everything. But I do hope (if you're not finished with the story following the conquering of Celestia) that we get to see a bit more 'messing around' (and when I say 'messing around', I mean those moments when Twilight uses her power on a person whom she already controls). Some of the more recent characters (in particular Fluttershy) haven't really had a chance to be 'used' much.
That being said though, from your author's notes it looks like you have plans for a group session that should hopefully spread the love around a bit (in more ways than one!), so I'm hoping we'll get to see some of the more recent additions have a chance at the limelight.
Hopefully none of that criticism sounded harsher than I meant it to be. I'm loving the story, and really enjoyed this chapter. Pinkie was definitely different, it was funny to see her doing an impression of what she thought a mind-controlled person should act like. And I should have expected food play from her, I can't believe it never occurred to me that that was going to happen.
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Well, all we know about the Elements is that they are based on some concept of Harmony. It can certainly be argued that total obedience is very harmonic . They are all honest under the charm, they are all loyal, they are generous, kind, and I guess they still laugh. The way I see it, the Elements of Harmony are still very much theirs to wield, perhaps even more now than before. Scary thought. What if Celestia's charm spell was inspired by the Elements' power? Do we know exactly how the beam turned NMM back into Luna? What if it is based on benevolent mind control, like the supposed 'reform spell' that Twilight was looking for in Discord's return episode? Maybe mind control is how Celestia has kept the peace for so long.
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I expect that once Twilight is supreme uncontested queen of Equestria, with both Princesses and the Elements dutifully serving her whim, we'll start to see her really go off the deep end with that sort of stuff.
She already considered having Luna do it. Hell, she basically admits to seeing Zecora as her slave; It's a quick downward slope before she's referring to everyone like that.
Love the chapter, but where's Twilight dominatrix outfit? I though she'd make it part of her permeant wardrobe? Hope it's in the next chapter.
PLOT TWIST:Celestia had in fact planted the book for Twilight to find and use. Since she is the original creator of the Charm as well as being very ancient she has finally seen the "error" of her ways, but unfortunately the temptation of using the charm is just too strong to ignore, especially when she had decided to use it to fuck her own sister, which I might add is definitely best charmed pony in the story. I can easily see Celestia using it on filly Twilight and giving her "extra curricular" classes in her Royal bedchamber. And so she had ordered a now adult Twilight to find the book and use it so that she can use the Charm on Celestia to ensure that she can never charm anyone else. In a way it can be seen as some kind of sick passing of the baton from Teacher to Student.
That's just my guess, but heck it may go in a completely different direction, which I'm quite sure I will enjoy.
This chapter was sexy, cute, wonderful and absolute torture you mean little sadist! *flails*
I've been expecting Pinkie to suddenly jump out of a barrel or drawer and make everything a mess, for at least half of the chapter.
That said, your Pinkie Pie is incredibly well-written, maybe even more so than the rest of the characters so far (except for Twilight maybe). You've managed to actually enforce suspension of disbelief around Pinkie, so that I can enjoy her antics no matter how abstract they are. And they're excellent antics, most definitely.
(Gruff Gruffinton The Tea Drinking Stranger is best princess)
I hope there's more pony furniture or Rainbow Doll; 5 slaves at once is a lot to manage.
Twilight still has gathered almost no information from Luna about Celestia, which I found a bit strange.
The only thing missing in this chapter that would make this perfect? Rainbow Dash, because Twidash is best ship and you can never have enough Rainbow fun. Other than that, I predict that Luna and Celestia have the charms on each other as some sort of twincest thing, and the only reason Twilight doesn't know about it was because she made a mistake in her statements to Luna, and it will be revealed that the only reason Luna never said anything was because Twilight never asked. Luna seemed to recognize the charm whe Twi cast it on her.
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She has no conscious knowledge of it, though, and either Celestia is managing her memory or no one.
Dear God...its a porn with an interest plot!
No really, this could easily fly as a non-clop centric fic, since its all about Twilight and her morals slowly evaporating.
Now, I do wonder if this ends immediately after the encounter with Celestia, which I'm not gonna even try to predict, or will it continue onwards?
6063196 But not over?
6064052 Pinkie's abilities are deeply opaque, which is the main reason Twilight didn't try this sooner.
6064808 I'm not sure that the artefacts would be able to tell if someone's reasons for using them were skewed, as long as they continued to represent the elements in question.
6065255 You'll see it again, don't worry!
6077187 I promise at least one more chapter after Twilight takes on Celestia, there'd be way too much to wrap up that fast.
6065247 I really like Luna as well, I'm enjoying their interaction. The pace has sped up, it's true, some of that being longer chapters with more going on, and some due to the looming deadline of Celestia finding out. The party coming up will give the ponies she already owns some spotlight time
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I'd briefly wondered if he was controlling Twilight and ordering her not to notice him, but the logistics don't seem to add up. His excuse for not being around could last a long while.
6117986 What is this RDdeMC? For
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My first guess is the fic 'Rainbow Dash Discovers Erotic Mind Control'
6119795 Seems plausible, thank you! RDdeMC is an interesting contrast, it's going for realistic inductions and really spending a lot of time in there. Perhaps on the other side of the story-with-porn, porn-with-story boundary.
Oh I hope the next chapter comes soon! I want to see twilight conduct an orgy to her pleasure^^ Also, is it just me, or did she not get her ususal power gigh when she charmed Pinkie?
I'm both terribly excited to read more of this Fic, and yet gut-wrenchingly certain that this is all going to end badly for Twi, and throughout my reading of this Fic and my following of the building of her harem, I've wanted nothing more than for her to end up sitting on her throne with her hoof on Celestia's back, surrounded by her beloved slaves.
I won't demand the Fic writer make my wishes come true, and I'll likely enjoy the end regardless of Twi's ultimate fate, but I'm on pins and needles about it! The plot (Ha!) has certainly captured me! :D
6147242 That's what I like to hear!
Progress update: 13k words into chapter 14 so far, and it's very not nearly finished. Either the next post will be of Chapters 14 and 15 together to cover the events I promised, and it'll be in a few weeks time, or I might post Chapter 14 when I'm finished with it despite a certain confrontation being saved for the chapter after. Feel free to weigh in if you have preferences!
6153268 I'd go with the sooner the better. Personally I've liked that you've come out on a regular basis and would rather have half up front now and half later more so than all of it later. So I'd really like it if you'd release Chapter 14 at your earliest convenience, but it's up to you on what you plan on doing.
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I like long chapters, but if this is going to be near 20k it might be worth it to split up. If there's a place for a natural break I'd say split it and treat us all to a delicious cliffhanger.
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Honestly I think it'd be obvious that for me personally, a few weeks would be torturous waiting to see this gem
continued. I don't personally see any harm in posting chapter 14 as it's finished and leaving us on a cliffhanger awaiting the confrontation in the next one, suspense just makes it better!
However, again, I'm making no demands here. Release in your own time, and know that all of your readers are waiting patiently with baited breath for the conclusion!
Well, just power read through this over the course a day. Kudos to the author for making it interesting enough for that to happen.
The way I see it, Twilight is probably entranced by Celestia. Her reasoning for NOT being under is that Celestia wouldn't have let her plan against her, but when you think about it, why would Celestia feel like she needed to in the first place? No pony else knew the spell and Twilight was unaware she was being controlled.
Another theory is that Celestia is treating this like a game. Maybe she wants a confrontation to happen. It wouldn't be any fun if she halted Twilight's plan before it even started.
I imagine Twilight and her harem will storm the castle, enter the throne room, Celestia will laugh maliciously before saying "Twilight Awaken". From there, she only needs to tell her student to say Awaken, and the whole plan is ruined.
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There could be a lot of subtlety to a battle between the two. Celestia could entrance Twilight, but Twilight could previously have ordered Rarity or Luna to hide and entrance Celestia when she doesn't suspect (not sure if Rarity could use the spell). She could order Luna to come to her in her dreams, entrance her, and order her to stop obeying whatever commands she was given.
What I'm wondering (again) is why the elements are necessary? The spell seems enough to control a princess, and I don't think Twilight wants a stone Celestia anyway, so... what does she think they'll do when activated upon Celestia anyway?
6154753 It'll probably weaken Celestia enough for the charm to be effective. The only reason Twilight was able to overpower Luna was because Luna wasn't prepared for the type of magic Twilight had. Now she's dealing with the pony who's been using this spell for over a thousand years, if not the one who created it.
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I'm happy to read the update whenever you feel that it's ready. That being said, given that I tend to read these chapters in multiple sittings (one for each, ahem, 'clopworthy moment' in a chapter), I'd personally prefer to get Chapter 14 now. That way we get a sizable chunk now, and then the exciting conclusion in a few week's time. Better than a extra-long wait for an extra-long chapter that I, at least, would have to read over the course of days anyways.
But again, do what you feel works best for the story you want to tell.
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Maybe Twilight intends to use the Elements as a shield against Celestia's powers (or to strip her of her powers long enough to get the charm through). Sort of like when they fought Discord for the first time, the Elements could create a barrier which prevents Celestia from hitting Twilight & Co. with the charm.
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I'm right there with you. Either way, the final confrontation is going to be intense.
I wonder, if Twilight wins (since this story takes place before her Ascension to Princess status), will Twilight make Celestia and Luna grant her immortality? I can just imagine Twilight becoming God-Empress over all ponykind with her new slaves and magical powers. It'd be so beautiful to witness.
I have a theory about the confrontation with Celestia. Celestia planted the spell in that book knowing Twilight would find and use it. She did this to see what Twilight would do with that power. Twilight used this to enslave her friends, but with kindness, making them happy and willing servants.
This is what Celestia wants. If Twilight avoided using it, or if she used it maliciously, she would have stepped in. She probably knows how to undo the spell, she may have even created it. My theory? Celestia is tired and lonely from her long rule, and wants Twilight to enslave her so she can be loved and relieved of the burden of rule. Maybe she and Luna would remain rulers in the public eye, but she would happily be subservient to Twilight.
I can't wait for the next Chapter. Enthralled Zecora and Luna, mmhmm I hope Twilight plays with both of them a lot more :3
Simply amazing, as usual. I've been anticipating Pinkie since the beginning, and I'm glad that she was as amazing as I had hoped.
God, the only way that this story could get any better is if Twilight used magic to turn herself into a futa. Dickgirl Twilight is best Twilight.
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That would be significantly relevant to my interests.
Bonus chapter, maybe?
6180876 Well you already have a Futalestia so it could be possible.
6183258 Not quite. We've had a strap on Celestia so far.
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It's possible that the spell increasingly corrupts the user unless its hold is broken in some way, like Inspiration Manifestation. Maybe Celestia fell under its sway until something happened that freed her.
Or perhaps the Celestia using it on Luna had herself been entranced by another into doing so.
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Celestia being under someone's control could be possible, though there's no real list of suspects since I'm pretty sure Luna didn't do it, and the scene Luna described doesn't really seem like something Celestia would be ordered to do.
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Wait wait, I think I've finally figured it out:
Luna is entranced by Twilight and Celestia, Celestia is entranced by Fluttershy, who is entranced by Discord, who is entranced by Twilight Sparkle from the future, who commanded him to teach Celestia the mind-control charm so that past-Twilight would find it and fulfill her destiny.
It all makes sense!
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Hey Wintermist, how goes it with the upcoming chapters? I don't mean to rush or anything, just curious what ballpark we can expect the upcoming bombshell to drop.
This is your queue to be a badass and say "RIGHT NOW" while pushing the update button.
6192384 I'd love to hit the button, but its not quite ready yet! Expect something in seven to ten days, this chapter has gotten a bit... involved.
Fluttershy in the recent episode: "It's nice to be the pet for once" .
6193588 Ha! Canon!
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Ooooh, now I'm getting goosebumps imagining what that could mean!
Eagerly awaiting the next installment, as always. <3
It's that time again.
Okay, upfront: this one is 24k words long. First I intended it to be 7k or so, to give room for the Celestia confrontation. Then I pushed that back to the next chapter, so I could finish this one and push it out. Then it just kept going. Fully exploring the idea I had for it kind of got out of hand. I considered splitting this chapter too, but it's all the same day and scene, so I ended up keeping it as one piece. Enjoy!
This is excatly what I wanted.
And then what will she do / She'll mix up an evil brew / Then she'll gobble you up in a big tasty stew!
So... watch out.