Page generated in 0.03 seconds
Total duration
966 users online
473,025 hits today, 1,996,409 yesterday
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
wait, I'm a bit lost....
Twilight had lost Zecora as her slave? I mean, I know Zecora was bound to her, even after Twi got caught but...what was that about her 'losing Zecora' did she...remove Zecora from being her slave or something?
Oh come on! Of all nights for this to update its gotta be on family night... ffffffuuuu...
6560951 You should take a look at chapter 23, you may have missed it.
May I ask what the dark is for? I don't want to go into anything that's outside my range...
Alright, so.... I decided to check back in on the story after a while and catch up with everything. Now, let me just say, you have a pretty damn good writing style and I really love it, but it's the story that's kinda pushing me away. Just.... I said this before in my last comment so I won't go into it much, but it feels repetitive.
Not boring, definitely not. It just feels like some things repeat themselves too much, and it kinda shows in the older chapters. Especially in these newer ones, but that's to be expected as Twilight is growing out of a cycle Celestia loves to put her in. If you want some advice I would say that you might want to spice it up a tiny bit.
Say, show Spike's involvement with this. He clearly has some part in this, because he did mysteriously vanish when Celestia stripped Twilight and made her dust. Notice it never said he LEFT, merely that he stomped down the hall. Even then he could have heard Celestia ordering Twilight. But then again Zecora didn't hear Twilight, so I may be a tiny bit wrong.
However this is going back onto favorites due to the writing style and the quality, so.... Well done .
I find it ironic that Trixie is, with reason, calling Celestia an amateur. Am I right?
6561011 Thanks!Although what do you mean by "a grey morality war"?
I want more
I just completed reading this yesterday for a new wonderful chapter to show up today? yus!
6561062 Sometimes moral conflicts are black and white. Other times, one or both sides is a shade of grey. In this case, both sides are shades of grey, and it's debatable which is the darker and which is the lighter.
And then there's blue and orange morality, but I'm not going to venture into TV Tropes to get a link for that - look it up if you want to know (and if you've not encountered TV Tropes before, take supplies - it could be a while before you emerge)
Nice chapter.
I like the idea of having a puppet, are we going to see more of that, or is it to this one chapter.
In the next chapter: Twilight steals the sun.
6561027 Nah, I'd actually almost say it'd be OOC for her to NOT call any magus other than herself (or those that are in the room and she is inclined to not want to insult) an amateur.
6561864 Yeah, but this time, she has a legitimate reason to do so. Seriously, Celestia, did you have a partial brain fart when you made this spell to where any unicorn could dissect the thing?
That was fun, may I have another? Looking for more.
Keep up the good work. Deus tecum.
and in the next chapter..... Twilight and Trixie steal Celestia's panties. 'Twas called the great panty-heist of 2015.
I mean, Celestia's clothes would soak up her magical signature, wouldn't they? :p
6560975 6561011 I'd add to this list memory alteration and in later chapters, strong psychological tension. No physical violence or injuries though. A correction though, Twilight at the time of this story is a unicorn, and has not become a princess.
6561874 That's not really accurate. Put together, Twilight has spent weeks trying to document and understand the charm; without her notes, there probably isn't another unicorn that could make head or tail of it. What Trixie brings is a different perspective and a fresh pair of eyes, which eventually helped catch something Twilight missed.
New chapter, woo!
Oh man, that Redheart scene was delightfully sexy. Role reversal is fun and every Celestia scene is just super intense because of the inherent danger.
You'd better do it, Twilight! Show that solar flank who's boss!
That puppet scene was awesome. What a cool idea to use telekinesis for some fun!
Lucky Trixie, Twilight is spoiling you~!
I will admit, I really miss the Twilight that was willing to take what she wanted, without compromise. This is nice too of course, but I enjoy the charm the most when it enforces will, rather than asks for permission. To make ponies accept its mastery. I hope that such events won't be gone once Celestia is taken care of.
I'd love to see Twilight, in a moment of weakness, tweak Luna so that at a command (similar to reasonable request), the Princess will find Twilight's actions in that moment to be morally sound and acceptable. And then she begins to abuse the ability, with her moral compass now selectively defunct. I understand if that's outside of what the author intends though.
6561874
Well, to be fair, Trixie and Twilight are probably among the most talented unicorns of their age. Twilight especially so, given her Talent, and while Trixie is not as powerful/skilled, she specializes in mental/illusion magic. Compared to those two, I don't think just any pair of mages would be able to unlock this spell. Certainly not without years of research.
6562023
i.warosu.org/data/tg/img/0374/40/1421522994577.png
"A Thief has stolen a pair of ☼Celestial undergarments☼!"
I need a picture of Twilight sitting on a throne looking bored but satisfied and surrounded by her harem at the end of this, if that's where this story is leading.
YESS!! FINALLY A TWIXIE SCENE!!! AND IT WAS GLORIOUS!!! THANKYOUTHANKYOUTHANKYOUTHANKYOU!!!
Man that scene with Nurse Redheart was really hot and I guess I was right, Celestia is a voyeur through and through, that's why she prefers to watch others having sex rather than herself. From the scenes that we've seen so far it definitely points towards that direction. While Twilight definitely has a Control/Domination fetish, which is why the charm has had such an effect on her as it has. Twilight loves getting down and dirty with it, while Celestia loves to watch and probably gets off even more knowing that she cannot be seen by the other party. Like the scene with Nurse Redheart she simply masturbated on top of Twilight instead of grinding into her face. If things keep up as they are with Celestia I can bet that all of Equestria will be one big orgy with Celestia getting a front row seat. While as for Twilight, things will probably stay normal for the most part save for whenever she feels like fucking somepony else for a while.
I can't wait for the next chapter, but this one was definitely worth the extra wait, TWO clop scenes in ONE chapter, I couldn't ask for more! I just hope that Zecora comes back soon, I miss her already... Hopefully things will go well in the Great Canterlot Panty Heist.
Anyway Keep up the amazing work!
Trixie makes me want to pound my head in with a brick some times, and other times I just want to hug her and say "Awww!!" That puppet bit made me smile so much my face still hurts a little. And can I just point out how disappointed I am in Celestia, you live that long and still don't think to think everything thru. Twilight really is the better Princess, prone to excessive panicking when it comes to getting ready for tests but still the way better Princess.
oh crap that's right , seeing this update here reminded me of something else i wanted to say when i made my previous comment on this fic that was a sort of observation and question about the fic , but now i can't remember when i wanted to say :c ....
"I'm so pleased to hear to hear you say that, Twilight." One extra 'to hear'. Don't mean to be a grammar nazi, but I just thought to let you know.
Also, huzza for Trixie finally getting a go.
Gotta say, I'm disappointed that Twilight decided to allow for a morality compass. I loved tyrant Twilight, and would have loved to have seen her enslave all of Equestria. Then again, that would be rather cliche, so perhaps you're onto something.
Trixie truly brings out the best in Twilight, of both her good side and her bad, and it makes their relationship incredibly endearing. Trixie has easily supplanted everyone else as my favorite character after Twilight, probably due to her bombastic personality and the fact that only she can get Twilight's dark desires to really surface. The puppet scene was absolutely delicious and I can't wait to see more interesting methods of using the charm!
Also yay! We finally have possibilities for modifying the charm, if Twilight and Trixie can read the charm's inner workings not only could they develop a method to affect Celestia but maybe also a true counter for the spell that removed it completely (even though I loathe to have a Good End where Twilight finally manages to beat temptation and destroy the spell).
Thanks for putting these out at a fairly reliable pace, it really helps build that excitement for the next chapter. Looking forward to the next .
Is it a coincidence that Twilight says this just before she masters her puppet Trixie? \m/
6563823 Oh, darn. I noticed that in proof reading and forgot to fix it. Good catch; taken care of now.
6565532 googles Oh, song lyrics. Total coincidence!
During the nurse redheart scene when twilight decides to check on what Celestia was up to, and she's literally in her face. was comedy gold.
Keep up the amazing work!
Woah... intense...
6590912 My reading of the situation is that, at least for now, anything Celestia does in and around Ponyville will be focused on Twilight - she'll have started off with (mostly) good intentions, so she'll have set out to just undo what Twilight did - purge their memories, and probably make it so Applejack can't even imagine falling in love with Twilight, but not plan any follow-up with them - after all, they're Twilight's innocent victims...
As for Twilight herself, Celestia will have felt she had to check in on her from time to time to make sure she hasn't rediscovered the charm somehow or been up to more wickedness. And once she had Twilight safely Awakened, well, there's a certain justice in giving Twilight a taste of her own medicine. And it's not like any of the ponies she drags into the situation are harmed in any way - what they don't remember won't hurt them...
More pragmatically, Celestia has a solid excuse for visiting her former student and old friend Twilight Sparkle, so anypony who sees her and Twilight meeting somewhere won't think twice about it. A secret rendezvous with someone else in Ponyville without Twilight being involved starts raising questions - nothing that can't be handled with the charm, but, still...
Is it wrong that I really want Twilight and Celestia to sit down and talk this out?
They love eachother, I bet they could coexist, but they have to be all Highlander "there can be only one" and it's killing me because I just want everyone to be happy :(
6600601 Yeah but Highlander was awesome, so perhaps the future chapters will contain equally awesome things that may very well lead to a happy ending for all Always optimistic lol
6600601 Two controllers is an unstable situation - even when neither thinks the other shouldn't have the power, there's still the question of trust - or rather distrust - when the only defense against someone else taking control of you is to take control of them first, it takes a lot of trust not to strike first and command forgiveness later...
Progress update: a bit slow on this chapter. Expect something in a couple of weeks time as a rough ETA.
Wow! First a teacher, now a nurse! You got two of the things I like most!
6603455 Thanks for keeping us updated!
I would like to imaging that once Twilight has control over Celestia, and has back her friends that she redo what she did to Applejack in Chapter 4 with Luna, Celestia and the mane 6, you know like she would tell them that imaged that they were completely dressed, won't realize that twilight doing stuff to them, make sure that they won't leave the house and she would be invisible to them. That would be nice.
Holy shit this story is amazing. I still have like, 10 chapters to go, and my "Read it Later" list is getting longer and longer, cause I haven't read another story since starting.
Amazing props Wintermist, this is one of the best stories on this site.
It's that time! Ahead of schedule, I'm pleased to bring you Chapter 25:
Oh Trixie, WTF is Your DealKey to the Kingdom!6561570 Twilight certainly enjoyed it! We'll have to see if she makes further use of that application for telekinesis.
6562023 I was almost tempted to change my plans for this.
6577264 6608217 Zecora's dialogue does take a bit longer to write, but I really can't imagine her speaking any other way.
So Celestia IS doing a thing.
This is like CHeerilee all over again.
Celestia. Lovely.
Very amusing.
Maybe THIS should be called The Puppetmaster.
Ambitious!
So, very?
"portmanteau" is the first word I don't understand
7115395 "Portmanteau" was originally a piece of luggage that unfolded into two parts, and got used by Lewis Carroll to refer to packing two words into one (originally in Through the Looking Glass, where Humpty Dumpty uses it to explain some of the words in the Jabberwocky). Nowadays it's used to refer to mashing two words into one which combines both the form and the meanings of the two original words.
Trixie, The Lost Element of DETERMINATION!
(...... Wait is that correct? )
ih1.redbubble.net/image.240495585.1299/mp,370x410,gloss,f8f8f8,t-pad,420x460,f8f8f8.3u1.jpg
s-media-cache-ak0.pinimg.com/originals/21/65/f9/2165f9c235c3b0b02e986206cb664bf7.jpg
Simbol of DETERMINATION and Spikes Crystal Heart, Same format and color, coincidence? i think not!
I'm reading this story for the plot. ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)
No seriously, I'm actually reading this for the plot.
8537425
Yeah, trixies!
6561751
She had to leave Twilight alive.
6561874
So far, only 1 unicorn has shown the ability to take this spell apart, and even then she needed help from another.
So ... if it has Celestia's and Luna's signature, why does it work on Luna and not on Celestia?
This ... this bit is what doesn't make much sense to me. Combine this with the fetch quest in a couple of chapters, and ... Why does having Celestia's signature make it Celestia safe?
Just throwing a premature guess out there, the strap-on Celestia used on Luna
Trixie is so silly and cute in this fic.
also the end of this chapter has national treasure vibes
"I'm gonna steal the declaration of pone-dependance"