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Most excellent.
I would like to imaging that once Twilight has control over Celestia, and has back her friends that she redo what she did to Applejack in Chapter 4 with Luna, Celestia and the mane 6, you know like she would tell them that imaged that they were completely dressed, won't realize that twilight doing stuff to them, make sure that they won't leave the house and she would be invisible to them. That would be nice.
No real danger, and besides, she screwed with your head, you've gotta be peeved about that.
In a sense.
What.
She knew. She knew all along. I, wow, even though she's technically the antagonist, I must say
Oh, geez, oh, wow she's GOOD. Then again, Celestia's been playing at this game a lot longer than Twilight has.
Yeesh, any more like an actual villain and she's have an evil laugh, it's like she's toying with her.
Looks like it.
If not more.
Oh hell.
She's really good.
Damn.
Looks like it. That reminds me, where are Trixie and Luna? In the Everfree cabin?
Well then.
Well. That was easy.
This feels rather fitting:
With some luck.
I, doubt that'd be such a smart move.
... Interesting, also, wincE, not winch
Aye, still Rarity and Applejack to go.
Here we go.
Yes, that, wasn't perhaps her best move.
No wonder you're Honesty, brutal honesty is part of that.
I see...
I'd say so, yes. Twilight isn't usually the kind of pony who'd lie to a friend. Much less somepony who'd be able to instantly tell if she's being lied too.
Oh dear.
She's pissed. I kinda called Rarity being the only one who was going to say no, since her "focusing" was the most out of desperation. Unfortunately.
She's REALLY pissed.
Good luck, she really knows how to hold a grudge.
Doubt it'll be that easy, but I hope so.
Aye...
Commentary aside, moments like this make this SO much better than your average clopfic, this isn't just Porn with Plot, this is a Super Clopfic, no, more like a Super Clopfic that has ascended beyond a Super Clopfic. A, Super Clopfic 2, if you will.
This is REALLY sweet.
Your restrain is admirable.
I can see why.
I'm actually glad one of Twilight's friends decided not to go on with this. It's very realistic.
Moreover, as 6728083 pointed out, Rarity's mind controlling was an act of aggressive desperation. It was a mental assault, pure and simple. And Twilight abused her like the others, changed her a lot from what she was, down to whom she is attracted to. They all have reasons to hold a grudge, and it's cathartic to see one make use of it.
Well you sure have rustled my Jimmie's vary well. I do have a plan of next chapter. Rarity betrays all and heads straight to the queen!
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All of these direct comments on the content of this chapter are kinda spoiler-y, aren't they? I mean, it was only released today. Anyone who hasn't gotten this far yet is likely to see those comments and have their experience of future chapters spoiled. =P
I'd recommend deleting the direct copy/paste quotes from the chapter, and I also urge the makers of said comments to either take them down or put spoiler bars on them. Just wait a while for the other readers to catch up, please.
Is it just me who is reminded of this?
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Me too... I hope the resolution of all this mess will be as good as this.
Hmm.... wouldnt have imagened rarity being the one leaving but I guess it makes the most sense. Im glad to see the others staying with her though^^ and maybe Rarity and Zecora will come back to her in time as well^^ Also, im curious to see what Luna'll say to Twilights new charm^^ hehe^^
Well...
Oops. I guess Celestia hasn't been the supreme chessmaster of Equestria for the past X-ty thousand years for nothing.
Oh, that's chilling. That whole section was done rather well. Its rare that I read a clop story and think "Ugh, all this damn clop is getting in the way of the plot". but this story has pulled it off a few times.
My Reaction:
6730824 I agree, I was expecting Applejack, a major left turn so to speak?
I actually felt choked up when Rarity said her bit, and then angry, and now I've talked myself out of it, I know Rarity has the right. This story continues to blow my mind, and I have just realized how deeply invested in this story's Twilight I have become. This definitely deserves to be a favorite.
Ok. So she was genuinely enraged after all. Shit.
Rarity used Slap! ITS SUPER EFFECTIVE!
Twilight Sparkle is Confused!
More or less what that dude did at the 2:24
Umm ...
WAT???
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Keybounce.exe has executed an illegal instruction and will be closed.
Err ... umm ...
WAT?!?
This is AFTER all the orders on Applejack are gone, and she can freely choose .. and is choosing this????
Ok.
So ...
Umm ...
Still having issues here. Yes, I know that sub/dom is a common enough pair of fetishes, and that it can be surprising to see who takes sub roles.
And yes, I know that there really are some people out there that take the sub role to the extreme of slavery.
Still.
Did not one of them decide "I want to be your girlfriend, but I don't want mind control or orders. I just want us."
Rainbow Dash: Takes it all, orders and everything. "Awesome". Ok ... sort-of? I can see her "Awesome" view, but ... being a slave in the process? Not just limited to "Be my master in the bedroom, fine, but outside of that I'm my own pony"?
Pinkie Pie: Ok, she was the closest to being fully informed beforehand, so I'm not surprised that she still agrees.
Fluttershy: "It was... wonderful, but, you didn't ask me. I feel kind of... complicated."
Beautiful! Wonderfully expressed.
Now, I'm uncertain: She took the memories, she's staying because she likes feeling like that, did she take the orders? If she did not, then she seems to be close to what I understand the "typical" (ha, does such a thing exist in this realm?) pet/sub fetish person is like.
Applejack: "I'd drop those orders y'gave me, and you and me, we'd sit down together and draw up some new ones. On one condition, mind. No more hiding things. You're straight with me, and ah'll be - well."
...
"So I'll give it a chance, all've it, so I can see how I feel. "
Is Twilight understanding that Applejack is basically saying, "Lets agree on orders for me, give me a chance to see what's it's like, but I still want to be able to say 'no thank you' later on."?
Will she give her -- or any of them -- a chance to say "I'm done" later on?
Truthfully, I expected RD and AJ to be in the "Nope, you went overboard" category. Heck, I could see RD going "You've learned your lesson, I'm OK going forward, but as your awesome girlfriend, not your awesome slave." And with 2, possibly 3 expected "outs", would Fluttershy still be OK, or would she be "I'm not sure I want to be the only one" -- would the whole group have a "minimum size before falling apart" issue?
Rarity: Oh my. SOMEONE had to call Twilight out. If she had kept all 5, that would be bad writing.
I do hope that they stay friends. Judging from the chapter title, they probably will. Eventually.
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Has anyone made a "Cards against Equestria" deck for this story yet?
Are ... is this really how some people are?
I see Applejack as both Honesty, and personal inner strength, and this seems to be ... well, unexpected, honest, and lacking that personal inner strength.
If there are any other readers still paying attention here: how does my reading of AJ / thinking this is unexpected compare to your reading?
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I think the order is
Clopfic
Clopfic 9001
Super Clopfic
Super Clopfic 2
Super Clopfic blue
Transcendent Clopfic
Autonomous Instinct Clopfic
Did I miss any?
Geas is a real term TIL
I had to look to up cos i was sure wintermist wouldn’t just be making an anime reference lol
Oh I LOVE this Celestia; I know Twilight will almost certainly win, but given Celestia’s tone, I’d be surprised if she was particularly upset about it.
I’m sad to see Rarity go- it makes sense narratively, since her original enslavement was entirely circumstance- but it’s nice that Twilight is learning.