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Feature box again!
Wrong, Twilight. You do have a choice. You just don't like the outcome of it.
Holy shit! A new chapter?! http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=l8AioTlq4dc
*Reloads Feed*
*Sees a 24k chapter*
...
...Cancel my appointments.
Best ever
that last line
Holy shit that was good, I loved every second of it. Interestingly the bit at the end when Twilight gets chosen by Pinkie was my favorite, just the sudden realization Twilight went through there was so good. This was everything I was hoping for, and here's hoping Twilight's plan for Celestia works or at least doesn't fuck up too badly .
This is a (frighteningly) good clop so far (I'm halfway through chapter four), but will there be any awakened males? I (strangely) find myself hoping there will be one (or two) for or yet-to-be princess to order around.
Can't believe I'mm saying this, but I agree with Rainbow when she said she was curious about Celestia and how she sounded when she cummed. I now want to see that. May god have mercy.
6212798 Which last line? The last one of the chapter itself or the last one of the AN? I find them both pretty awesome.
It's gonna take me, like, two days to read this holy shit. 24K words.
MAXIMUM EXCITE.
We've got to stop reading this story... it's too late... we're all tumbling down, down, down...
I love how the first chapters started off so short... only a few thousand words each...
And now they're starting to double in length XD
4k, 6k for a long while... then 12k for a few, and now 24k... i will not complain if the final chapter is over 100k. Just so we're all clear.
Great chapter. Still hoping some of the other pairings we haven't seen yet get some time in the spotlight. Pinkie and Fluttershy have only been with Twilight and one other mare each. They need some more lovin' all around. Rainbow is only three fifths done to completion, Applejack has been with everyone except Fluttershy, and Rarity still hasn't had any Pie. I really hope my completionist OCD is satisfied before the end of this tale.
Oh, sweet cheesus that chapter, beautiful.
that Twilight is slowly going under in this she keeps fighting but will she win this fight?
or will she succumb in having more slaves?
When Twilight and gang goes to confront Celestia, Cadance will appear and everything goes south? rhetorical question here
Are you planning on doing sine alternate or multiple endings cause I see Twilight going mad with power but always staying one step back. I kind of wanna see her go all way. She's insane / evil she knows and doesn't care.
Well anywho keep up the good work friend
Hey Wintermist, did you see the latest episode? With Fluttershy saying it was nice to be the pet for once? You totally called that one huh?
a little sad Zecora wasn't there
You included a foot fetish for Rarity...
You included... A FOOT FETISH... For RARITY!
I love everything about this story. I love it so much, that I really don't have much else to say about it. Though I am personally hoping that Twilight does indeed have Celestia and Luna get it on before the end. Possibly giving Luna the dominant role over her sister for a change.
Anyways, same deal as always. I eagerly await the next chapter.
*PS: Can I please not be a triangle anymore? It's been really difficult to explain to my circle of friends.
6214529 Thats the role I think spike is going to play.
6216245 one out of two or two out of two.
anyway this won't end smoothly as we'd expect. and that's why I love it.
I really enjoyed writing this chapter. There's so much to explore when the other five are given their own chances to have it all their own way - under certain constraints, of course! I think some of them are more... repressed than others.
6212999 Watching Twilight screw things up despite her very best efforts is so fun.
6213227 By chapter 14, there haven't been any focused stallions yet. Not ruling it out for the rest of the story, though.
6213909 The train has no brakes, and the morality curve is getting really steep.
6214215 Got to screw them all?
6214551 I'm not planning a choose-your-adventure multiple ending for this one; I've always felt that a good story should know where it's going. That said, it might be fun to write a few quick flashes when it's all over about ways things could have panned out differently.
6215212 It just makes so much sense for her. She really gives me the feeling that she just wants to be looked after and cherished. And given a chance to unleash her kinky side.
6215590 I love Zecora. All the same, if she'd been there, I'd still be writing that chapter next month.
6216231 Cos you've atoned for your sin, you can be a circle again. Still, if you're not a triangle anymore, this conversation is a bit pointless.
6215590
Indeed. We need more Zecora.
Looking forward to seeing the confrontation with Celestia, and how Twilights plan will go south
6216890 Twilight IS a mare of science. It would be criminal for her not to thoroughly examine every possible combination. It must be done for scientific purposes.
Aw shit!
This basically sums up how I feel about this story. I love it so much!
My apologies, but I really have nothing interesting to say, but bravo.
This was an excellent, meaty chapter, and I'm feeling very satiated..
But still my mind still turns toward what lies on the horizon, and I eagerly await the confrontation.
6214529 Cadance will walk in, which means Twilight will have to focus her, which means she'll need to focus Shining, which means she'll need to focus the Royal Guard... Canterlot will be enthralled within the week.
6216245 I pretty much think the author sent Spike away so we didn't need to see a kid dealing with sexual situations. Or maybe his character isn't that interesting. Either way, she's doing exactly what they do in the show. Either he'll be focused just to stand in a closet for 3 hours during sexytimes, or decide to stay with the dragons for good.
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6214551 I really don't think Twilight will hold back in the end. What I noticed about Zecora was that she was a slave while the others were more like enthralled lovers. In this chapter, she was slipping ever closer to referring them as slaves or objects. Even if we don't see it within the story, I imagine Twilight will eventually slip over the edge. That is assuming she wins of course.
Personally I think she'll be alone with Celestia for about 2 seconds before the princess shouts "Awaken,". From there, she'll convince Twilight that she succeeded and send her home (after some fun of course). Twilight gets to keep her friends, Celestia can dominate them when she feels like it.
6218210 I hope she wins. Otherwise I don't know how i would feel about the ending. Plus I really want her to slip over the edge.
6218210 That's the idea.
I'd say a Theory that if Twilight uses the elements of harmony while
using the charm will overpower it so it will end up going overwhelming
and throwing one big rainbow over all Equestria.
6218457 EVERYONE IS FOCUSED NOW! I like that theory
Wow, you aren't kidding when you say this one got away from you.
I highly recommend breaking it up into two or even three chapters. Have one chapter be the meeting and playing with Fluttershy, have a second be the first part of the orgy, and the third be the orgy finale. I couldn't read it all in one sitting (which is partially my fault, due to my crap attention span).
Other than the length, this is an excellent and sexy addition to the story. I now wait with eager anticipation to see Celestia focused and Twilight become Empress of Fuckery.
well, that was a nice "party" ^^ You know what I like most about the story? Twilight slowly giving in more and more to charms temptation and admitting that she does^^ Havent this sort of "aware corruption" before and I really love it^^ Now, lets see how she fares against Celestia^^
P.S.: One question. Will there be a bonus chap where she charms Cadance? I would REALLY love to see that happening^^
6220657 I have to admit, I was in two minds about breaking it up when I realised just how long it was going to end up. In the end, I didn't because it's all the same day/scene and I didn't have many good, clean breakpoints to use, but I think it's the high water mark as far as chapter length goes.
Bravo!
Is it bad I got a little misty-eyed at the collar? It's just something about seeing a good pet collared that just makes me sentimental I guess.
So how many more chapters are you planning?
"It was going to come in useful later. But one step at a time." Useful -> Handy.
The plot (actual plot) was great in this chapter! The clop however, felt very unnatural. Maybe it was to encompass the group as a whole, but I didn't find the second half of the chapter anywhere near to the standards you set in your earlier writings. Still good mind you, but it seems less about the mind control and more about actual domination.
Guess what, everypony?
It's happening now.
> "I love presents! I love giving presents, and getting presents, and being around people when they get presents! Presents make everyone happier!"
That combined with Pinkie's love of parties and large consumption of food is very similar to Hobbits
That pretty much sums this chapter up for me.
Also, earmuffs. Honestly, I never would have thought of that.
Rarity putting Rainbow Dash in her place is awesome.
As someone who owns a dog who loves playing with the ball, this is pretty accurate, when a dog wants to get the ball, they will chase it until the ends of the Earth.
Agreed.
You did that on f*cking purpose!
Yes.
Because Twilight isn't COMPLETELY sex obsessed.
Indeed.
Well, she's confident if nothing else.
Wow. You sugar coated that so much that Sugar Coat would be proud.
Only Pinkie Pie.
This is what I like about Fluttershy, she may be shy, insecure and introverted, but she has the heart of a lion, and sometimes, she's the strongest of the Mane 6, which makes moments like this all the more glorious.
I like this. I REALLY like this, it shows that this is more than just a clopfic, this is a DAMN good fic, Twilight's aware that if she screws this up, in hot water doesn't even BEGIN to describe how much trouble she'd be in. The stakes are real.
She has a point. However, she can't raise the Sun, and she has very little experience in politics and just charming the politicians to leave her alone is just unrealistic.
However, there are 2 words you can't defend against if you're already charmed. "Twilight, Awaken."
Well, sometimes the right solution is the simplest.
Jokes aside, that's, not that bad an idea.
Considering she'd probably react to you as a threat, not that good an idea.
Ouch ,point taken.
Well, you can, but, details.
Can't say I did either. Not that I'm complaining.
Either way, you're not gonna hear any complaints from them OR us.
She has a point.
Rainbow, that's not a bad thing. I will blatantly admit I came here for the clop. But I'm staying for the story.
Oh this is gonna be fun.
Ah.
It's less what YOU'RE going to do, and more who SHE'S going to do. In this case, you.
And it is HOT!
Vegeta? What does the scouter say about her ego level?
It's over nine thousaaaaand!
Well, you never said she couldn't... Also, gotta fuck 'em all! Mind Control! (Ha ha, pokemon jokes.)
I REALLY like this, besides, she has a point, and Pinkie would NEVER intentionally make somepony unhappy.
Yep.
That's a real bummer for Pinkie. I mean she was really excited for her turn, she said it multiple times too, and with an unexpected choice, she didn't have her turn but instead chose the happiness of her friends over the happiness of herself. Beautiful. I laughed a LOT during this chapter, it was amazing! Possibly one of the best chapters I've ever read in any story. This is going in my favorites bookmark for Chrome. Well done!
After all, Rarity has only been told not to be horrified by Twilight's actions - her revulsion to anyone else doing the same thing is still completely natural.
I missed that bit on the first read.
So, at this point I'm waiting for the confrontation with Celestia. Twilight goes in confident and ready, but the moment Celestia sees her, she just has one word to say.
"Awaken"
I see that you were trying to avoid the human term "Morse code", but surely the Equestrian equivalent would be… "Horse code".
Awwww shit! The world is ending!
Earmuffs?
Earplugs?
I'm sure I'll have more to say after I finish reading this, but ... holy bleep.
One of the most powerful spells Twilight has come across, with magical protections and safeguards up the wazoo, probably has some way to penetrate magical deafness, and ... the down to earth farm pony says "earmuffs".
I'll let you in on a secret: Next time (ha! Like at my age it will happen) I do an RPG session in the modern day, the villain will be using a spell like this, and the key point for the players will be to realize earmuffs. Modern day noise canceling earmuffs.