Oooooh dearie me.

You know, Twi... it *is* entirely possible that this *actually* is something Rarity would consider perfectly normal... if consented to.

Though suggesting your other friends for this does indicate that you've unlocked a monster. Just imagine what could happen if you taught *her* the charm!

Why, all of Canterlot could be your indirect little servants.

If not all of Equestria itself....

Well, while it would be interesting to see other ponies under Twilight's control, I really hope this story will continue to focus mostly on her relationship with Applejack!

Really, this story is getting better and better with every chapter. I can't wait to read about AJ wearing that outfit Rarity made for her. Sounds like a very hot idea. And Twilight's reactions and thoughts are just perfect.

Rarity thinks mind controlling someone you like is normal? Makes you worry that she'll get up to no good herself; she's already had multiple problems with corrupting magic...

I knew Twilight's wording was wrong the moment I read it. Absolutely loving this. :)

And we have an enabler! Wonderful!

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No, she thinks Twilight mind controlling anyone she likes is normal. Anyone else, and she'd probably react the same way she originally acted when she found out what Twilight was doing with Applejack.

Remember, it isn't the computer's fault if you screw up the input and you really screwed up the input here Twi.

Oh man, if Twilight ever comes out the other side of this, she is going to hate herself.

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Arzoo does have a point. Like you noted, Rarity's already spun "it's okay for Twilight to magically enslave Applejack" into "it's okay for Twilight to magically enslave whoever she likes". Worse(?), she's even hinted that she wouldn't mind being enslaved by Twilight herself. It's entirely possible for her to decide that enslaving each other is the best way to establish a relationship in general. With how generous she is, she might show up one day with a list of best possible slaves for Twilight.

Or heck, if Rarity's convinced royalty has a right to enslave ponies they're attracted to, she could show up at Blueblood's doorstep and ask to be put under. Remember, her problem with Blue was that he treated her like a slave—if she doesn't consider that a problem anymore, there's not really anything still in the way of a relationship, right?

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Hmm... This is true. Twilight just told her "What you saw is normal." There's no telling what all about that she thinks is normal.
Though she did call Twilight "a very special person," gives the impression that she thinks only Twilight is allowed to do that.

Oh well, I suppose we'll see what comes of this in due time.

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It's true, she did say that. She didn't specify what it is that makes her special, though. Could be that indeed she only meant Twilight as a person.
On the other hand, this is the same mare who did this:

Honestly, I wouldn't be surprised at all if a little nudge to her brain is enough to make her think being enslaved by royalty is simply right—the kind of nudge Twilight just gave her...

Awwww yeah, Rarity chapter!
I love this wonderful little avalanche of conflict Twilight is getting herself into. The slow, steady escalation, the ever-more-tangled web of commands and charms that are building up into a truly intense chaotic mess.
Twilight is gonna have to start laying on some serious Lawyer-Speak right now, or things are about to spin completely out of her control. Why, she'll have to mind control just about everyone to keep things under wraps! Her friends, the Princesses.... I can't wait.

I also really love the stuff about Rarity and Applejack perceiving things as normal when they clearly aren't. The bit about Applejack carrying a normal conversation while Twilight goes full lewd on her, and then Rarity's nonchalant "it's normal for you to be enslaving people, why would that be weird?" bit. Awesome moments.

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Or heck, if Rarity's convinced royalty has a right to enslave ponies they're attracted to, she could show up at Blueblood's doorstep and ask to be put under. Remember, her problem with Blue was that he treated her like a slave—if she doesn't consider that a problem anymore, there's not really anything still in the way of a relationship, right?

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Now you've really done it, Twi.
Y'all done fucked it up real good!

EDIT: Actually, I just re-read the scene, and I think Rarity should be fine.
The exact quote was: "Everything is perfectly normal between Applejack and I, so you don't need to tell anyone about it."
So, Rarity should still react and think normally about any other person. She probably is justifying it in her mind as Twilight being a "special person", and therefore exempt from normal rules of conduct.

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Gosh, I can't believe you just reminded me of that freaking scene.
Now I kinda hope that some Rarity hoof-worship finds its way into FIMC...
If I could choose a prize, I'd want it to be that.^

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Well, yeah. That's entirely possible.
However, Rarity is also the one of Twilight's friends who would be first to jump at the idea of Twilight Sparkle the princess having special rights due to her status. She does note that repeatedly, such as during Twilight's Kingdom. And she doesn't need to tell anypony that Applejack is Twilight's enthralled loveslave, she just has to mention something like "Royalty is about taking command, is it not? I know your kind enslaves those he or she cares for, therefore, my prince, take what is yours!".

Who know..? It would be an intersting twist^^

5454016 As Twilight's still in her treehouse, we're not up to date with the end of Season 4. She's in fact pre-Princess at this point, and doesn't yet have her wings. Not royalty yet!

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One problem with hoof worship is the heavily anthro nature of these ponies - they have feet! There's a couple of images that inspired me to start this story, and each one will show up as an event in the story. I'm looking forward to it!

I suspect the charm tends to caster as well, but that is still a unknown.
I also suspect the charm tends to lean towards very, loving direction... wink wink nudge nudge say no more say no more! (i had to do that)

Gentle breeze guide you path a warm smile welcome you back.

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Ah, so she is! Going over the chapters again, even the word 'Unicorn' appears to have been used exactly one time, which is probably why my mind shifted gears to Alicorn Twilight.
Not that you should change the way you write, mind you! Lavender Unicorn Syndrome is a serious disease, after all. It's only a good thing you haven't caught it.

This... This is really fucking good.

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But seriously, I am enjoying this story a lot, and can't wait for more updates!

I forget if you mentioned when this fic takes place but I'd love to see you do your own spin on a canon episode, after all why solve things through friendship when mind control can do it better?
Edit: Oh I saw your comment about this being before Princess Twilight, which is great because there is plenty of room for how you want things to go.

Hahahaha holy shit everything's going to Pony Hell I love it.

I'm interested to see when, or if, this all crashes down on Twilight.

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Indeed! I hadn't thought about that!
Well, foot worship is just as well, I'd just love to see Rarity bowing down no matter the anatomical details!

Ooh, visual inspiration? Awesome!
Just a guess, but is the uncropped version of your avatar one of them?

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Well, after all, what is more harmonious than perfect obedience?

5474814 Ding! We have a winner. It was the original inspiration for this whole tangle.

Definitely liking this so far, though Applejack's accent is a bit painful at times.

dyum this is getting good lol , just make twi have a brainwashed herm already lol.....

This is shaping up to be my favorite anthro clopfic.

I laughed really hard when Twilight was caught. And Rarity's reaction was spot-the-frig-on!

"What have you done to Applejack?! What are you - how could you-"

The whole scenario brought out the hilarity and awkwardness of being caught, forcing Twilight into a frenzied panic, and highlight Rarity's kindness and concern for her friends.

I gotta say, I never realized until now that I absolutely love Rarity. She has a kindness that's tender and motherly, and shows concern for ponies whenever it's needed.

But her reaction! And I love her reaction when she saw Twilight starting up the charm!

Rarity's hand written invitation to drop by the Boutique before the party had taken her by surprise, but nothing about the it suggested (that) anything (was) amiss.

I might be wrong about those, but it sounded incomplete without them.

OMG! She gets caught! Now she's had to charm Rarity to keep her secret safe!

... And did Rarity just almost ask to become a sex slave?

(remember, I'm posting my first reactions, as well as I can remember them)

How many people might she have to charm to clean up the mess?

We're quickly entering Lesson Zero territory.

Well, despite the fact that i've some personal problems with this, i can tolerate your choices.

Also, i have one question
Was how you pictured Rarity your own headcanon, or was it inspired... well, by one, i dare say, quite popular fic?

Rarity's eyes flashed from Applejack's nudity to the glow of Twilight's horn, and she gasped "You wouldn't dare."

This paragraph's the winner

Well. So far, I'm not dissapointed in the slightest, and i can guess this will be one of that hypnosis fics I'll able to enjoy to they fullest

Good day

P.S. my playlist clearly wants to help me with atmospehere
You're guilty all the same
Too sick to be ashamed

Hmmm…maybe Twilight should have ordered Rarity not to remember anything about what she discovered about what Twilight did to Applejack.

This just keeps getting more and more fun. Rarity's rationalizations were especially entertaining.

honestly you would think that celestia would have told her that if she encoutered something like this to call her right away? i blame celestia for being a poor teacher.

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Uhhh Celestia made herself forget that this charm even existed. How would she have known to warn Twilight?

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is u a fan of wings of fire? cause ur avatar looks like a Nightwing/Seawing hybrid. Please say yes

The panicked reflex couldn't be stopped. Almost before she knew what she was doing, Twilight's horn described the tiny precise movements of the charm and poured power forth.

Fluttering finger mind wipe much

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Might have been a good idea.

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Ohhhhhh. The Dragonets are coming. They're coming to save the day. They will fight for what is right. The Dragonets the Dragonets. Hooray!

"Applejack, this isn't for you. Rarity, please listen. You're not worried about what you've seen. Everything is perfectly normal between Applejack and I, so you don't need to tell anypony about it. You won't mention it to anypony, not even Applejack."

Seriously, Twilight, you need to take some basic programming classes. No decent computer programmer would ever do something as bad as that.

Letting her remember everything she saw and think it was normal, doing nothing to make her forget or otherwise repress those memories? Basic mind-control literal genie stuff here. You are a beginner, amateur. Clearly, you need more practice. Practice makes perfect :-).

Who needs the clop, just watching her mess-ups and trying to clean it up as it spirals out of control.

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The saw the knocking on the door and started to panic.

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Fair enough.

Really, though, what was I thinking? No computer programmer would make mistakes like that? Ha.

No computer programmer that wanted to survive college would make a mistake like that.
Someone that just wanted a job would find that code shipped and "well, bugs are just a part of computers".

Welcome to the story. And, I'm serious -- watching her deal with the messups was far more interesting than the clop for almost all of the story. And when you get to part 2, the plot thickens -- err, the rear end messups get ... I mean, the bleep hits the fan :-).

Rarity came into sight, descending the steps. Her outfit today was a shimmering, layered confection of white and lavender veils, and she clacked across the floor with effortless grace in her heels. "Twilight, darling, do come in, do," she greeted her.

Rarity gave her a puzzled look. "About you and Applejack? Why ever would I, dear? It's hardly worth mentioning."

Rarity nodded dazedly. "I'm not worried about anything I have seen. It was perfectly normal, I won't speak of it to anypony, not even Applejack."

Wording twilight wording 😂

I’m going to try to limit the constant Death Note comparisons, but I can’t promise I’ll succeed. It’s absolutely hilarious watching Twilight make basic mistakes because she has absolutely no idea what to do with her life.