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A mysterious enemy casts a dark spell, leaving the main six and Discord trapped in bodies which are not their own. With Twilight and Discord left as powerless earth ponies, it's up to Pinkie Pie the alicorn and Fluttershy the draconequus to save the day.
Edit: on hiatus for now due to a mixture of mental block and other projects, may come back to it eventually though 
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Haha, seems interesting. You just need to slow down with the pace. Focus more on describing their environment and emotions, not just dialogs. Try to not teleport them from scene to scene. You are doing good but take a look at C-poof story, and see the pacing there. Its sometimes hard to find perfect balance between not dragging the scenes too much and not going too fast but you will "get" that after writing and re-reading new chapters. I can already see that you write their characters well and Discord was very in character. He is a type that would even be amused by Armaggedon going outside and his reaction to a falling sky would be just to open an umbrella and sipping tea
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Beat me to the first comment CURSE YOU <3
anyway he has a small point of saying that it could have been a bit more detailed.
Nevertheless concept is good, the way the characters handle it seem reasonable and if I am correct in saying your first story? Congrats!
4/5 moustaches!
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I agree with Conred, dear author, especially with Discord. You did him amazingly well, as with the other characters. I'll keep a look out for this one! :D
I think this one looks promising. Please keep up the good work.
5198889 thanks for the feedback!
I'll try and work on pacing for my next chapter 
5198995 Four moustaches?
Yay! Thanks 
It is indeed my first story! I'll try and include more detail in my next chapter 
5199085 Aww, thank you!
I just love writing about these characters, especially Discord! 
I'll be doing a new chapter soon 
5200466 thanks! I'll be doing a new chapter soon
I am intrigued. Please continue.
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thanks! I will 
I really liked this for multiple reasons, though I wonder....Do you ship Twicord/Discolight? You seem to hint, maybe, at it? I like fluttercord myself. But don't worry, I'll still read!
But okay, I'm going to tell you the first thing I especially liked:
The sheep clouds. Not only is that funny when I picture it in my head, but I was worried the second I saw 'cloud' that it was going to be described as pink with chocolate milk rain. I always love anyone who comes up with their own magical events when it comes to Discord's chaos. Some don't seem to realize that he can literally do anything and doesn't do the same things over and over. He did pink clouds and chocolate milk rain once, and that's all the most people seem to remember. Keep making them original, I love it! Not only that, but Fluttershy's making sheep clouds--you're connecting her magic to her personality and likes. Excellent job.
Also, I love how despite the fact that all of them are completely out of their comfort zone (or should I say element? HAHAHA) they still get things done and do their best to be useful/helpful. Rarity tries to fly and look at the bubble (though I'm sure she also just likes having wings and showing the gorgeous things off, but she's also got a good heart so she meant to help too), Pinkie tries to see if she can teleport out, Rainbow tries to blast it...Fluttershy doesn't do much, but that's probably because she's too nervous about her powers to help, and of course Discord can't do much at the moment, and it's in-character for him to just sit back and watch all the glorious confusion and chaos. And Twilight. You did great showing her worth despite not having either thing--especially no horn, which is the very essence of her element, power, and passion--but she doesn't lose her TALENTS that aren't magic-related, or her strengths. You still show her leadership skills and her ability to handle tough situations. She's still a princess, and she doesn't need anything for that. The Mane Six are still friends who have a sense of justice and do their best to help and be useful, despite everything. Bravo showing that, bravo! I'm glad it's not "I can't do anything!" "Me neither!" Though it would be understandable and possibly funny to go that direction, or use it to build angst (which may be fun to do later), you still show that they haven't lost a sense of who they are.
Also, your pacing is really good here. :) It flowed super naturally.
This story feel like an actual episode, good work.
I should have expected that Fluttershy will use her powers to animate all kinds of object into animals, thats so in her character.
And im also kind of curious about the romance tag, in the beginning i was sure that Fluttershy transformation will be the main cause of the shipping since she basically learn how to be Discord but now i could see also some kind of admiration between Discord and Twilight. Pinkie is neutral for now although she could compete with Fluttershy in creating chaos by mistake
Or maybe you planning on doing a suprise like in Shounen Anime where it isnt clear which shipping is canon? Like for example in Naruto where basically Naruto/Sakura and Naruto/Hinata is still possible and probably not resloved until finale?
5211101 in general I'm very much a fluttercord shipper
still deciding where to go with this one though 
thanks all your feedback, I'm glad my pacing was better in this chapter and I was trying my best to keep everypony in character - to me that's the most important thing 
loving the "out of their element" pun 
I'll try and keep it up! 
5211217 when I started writing I was sure which ship I was going to include, now I don't know either haha
I think I'll just see where the story takes it 
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Haha, you can even go for a fourthsome as long as it make sense in narration
Im digging the story so far and Discord being chaotic and polyamorous is kind of in character for him, although im aware that making a polyamorous shipping is very hard to write and would require a lot of development. So its your call how do you imagine the ending of this story overall.
Pacing gone better. But I have one little nitpick at this story:
Granny Smith without an accent, really?
Overall, great story, I'm beyond intrigued
5213785 yeah, sorry about that
didn't really know how to write an accent into that phrase 
glad you're enjoying it anyway 
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I'm not great with accents either, but:
Will sound a lot more Granny Smith like, I think...
5216887 Okie dokie lokie!
think I've changed it 
well then, the chaos has only begun.
and pinkie will throw a party for the ages.
well that chaos was fun while it lasted.
cloud sheep and all.
now random voices that laugh for no good reason!
be gone and let them panic some more!
5217486 there will definitely be an increase in chaos
Pinkie needs to throw an alicorn party though 
5217509 don't worry, I'm sure there will be more panicking
And more cloud sheep 
5204877 You're welcome and that's good to hear.
I LOVE IT. HOW CAN ANYONE NOT?!?
Just when I thought it couldn't get cuter,
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5233204 Thank you
I try my best 
That ending!
5245066 I try my best
Oh no, not King Sombra. He is such a generic villain and too much overused in so many fanfics
He should be dead and even then he woudn't make such flawed plans. If he managed to take away Discord magic then he should have chosen one of his minions to have it. Not gamble by giving it to a random element bearer and hoping that she wouldnt learn how to use it...
It would be more fitting if this transmutation was caused by some strange occurance like for example nearby meteor which caused surges of magic. Or even better, some forces messing up with Tree of Harmony and causing elements to confuse eachother along with chaos. Or even possibly another draconequus causing chaos at Bad Lands. Celestia would inform them about Scorpan having troubles in Bad Lands and requesting aid. Then adventure would commence with them bonding when traveling there and adjusting to their new roles. Then finale with the bad draconequus( it would explain chaothic transmutation) or some other original villain (something that would explain motive of switching their powers).
I found this chapter hysterical. Though I am a bit surprised that Discord thought his powers would work so well with Fluttershy. Certainly he'd know that she wouldn't know how to use it?
It was so amusing though, no doubt about that. Dialogue was the best part for sure! You're quite good with it. And you're funny.
5245381 Sorry, wasn't sure which villain to choose
I haven't read that many fics so I didn't know he was overused 
in my story he doesn't have any minions which is why he didn't give them the powers, I think mostly he was hoping to make the main six feel uncomfortable and resentful by switching their species. Hope you continue to read anyway, I try my best with the plots and I'm sure I'll improve as I get more experience 
5246310 thanks
I'm glad you found it entertaining 
Mostly Discord was bluffing in the hope of making Fluttershy feel more confident 
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Don't worry im not skiping this xD
But Sombra is not really a type of villain who would try just to make someone uncomfortable. He is an mlp version of Sauron. He is a type of villain that just gather his army and strike. Someone who destroy his enemies, not trying to confuse them. He would still consider them a threat even after switching their powers. And only would feel sure of himself if they were enslaved/imprisoned/dead or he actually manage to take away Discord powers for himself.
He is pure evil and thats why he was the only one that got killed in cartoon show.
5248778 glad you'll keep reading
I'll try my best to keep him in character in future chapters then 
Pinkie, An ALICORN, uh oh...
DUN
DUN
DUUUUUUUN
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much shock, so dramatic 
Best chapter yet! You have the characters down PERFECTLY and I'm dying to know what Sweetie Belle was going to say. Discord was hilarious when he tried being nice and said they were useless, that was too perfect! And he was so proud of himself! Ha!
And then Fluttershy agreeing with Rainbow...it's so in tune with the actual show that it's playing in my head like an episode. Amazing job! So excited for more!
5335774 Who knows who Sweetie Belle ships?
glad you liked this chapter! 
keeping people in character is what's always most important to me really 
that and writing funny moments 
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You think that's something, I'm working on a story where she accidentally gets Discord's magic.
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Well, Fuck
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