The world had burst into flames around her. A dragoness fights despair and loss as she scribes a pattern onto the concrete floor of her bunker. A pattern that can take her to another world. A pattern that could be the end of her. But she has no choice. She has to complete it. So she can escape. So she can go to a new world.
Meanwhile, Spike is lost within a forest. He finds a surly, but grudgingly kind dragoness. She needs to get back to her world, though everything is lost.
Rated teen for violence and a little bit of blood and some hardcore philosophising.
Crossover from Hasai the Steel Dragon, an excellent story made by M. H. Glenn who will write better than I ever will. Knowledge of this crossover story is recommended. I'll endeavour to make the references minimal and fairly explanatory as with an original story, but sorry, I can't guarantee that you won't be lost.
Tags will be added when they become relevant. There's bleeding which I don't qualify as gore. The Teen tag should more than cover this. This has a bit of guns and edginess, if that's not your cup of tea, please know what you're in for if you read.
Hm... I'm afraid I'm unfamiliar with the crossover subject matter on this, but I'm usually pretty happy with something with Spike. The culture shock for the main character would be pretty vast by the time she gets to some other ponies... although if she's spent time with Spike, who manages to err on the side of less forceful than most ponies, maybe not. Maybe it's mostly about the shock that it's a dragon acting like this, instead of not being able to understand anyone acting like that?
Prepare for trouble!
Make it double!
To protect the world from devastation!
To unite all peoples within our nation!
To denounce the evils of truth and love!
To extend our reach to the stars above!
Jessie!
James!
Team Rocket, blast off at the speed of light!
Surrender now, or prepare to fight!
Meowth!
That's right!
pretty land with it hidden dangers and annoyances plus it abundant species of sentient of many personality and colors... with a big chance of panicking ponies most likely to occur. everypony knows who spike is in equastria princess celestia student sectary? I don't think she tolerate stupid actions or childish things or twilight being annoying invasive in the pursuit of knowledge.
I wonder if she would be surprise to see spike eat a rare gem?
:I think you’re a nice pony on the inside: is species supremacy racist kind of words isn't it? like what about everybody else? wow they got that kid on short leash to the real world at times poor innocent spike molded to pony society to well that he wouldn't fit anywhere else.
Oooo, new update... Cool
Surprisingly entertaining so far. I don't know the crossover source, but it seems like you've been weaving enough of the background in.
After so long... you end on a cliffhanger...
5565420 Sorry!
I enjoy it, please continue
About your AN: I don't know... I have one commentator that goes into great speills about every little thing I do... and the story only has about 100 views...
This is great, please continue :)
I read Hasai's
unfinishednovel years agowhen he was still actively writing it. I am pleased to see a sequel for it.(Edit: I dug up the last few chapters to find out that I had misremembered the end. He did finish the novel after all. I am still happy to see a sequel to it in this Steel Dragon/MLP:FiM crossover.)
Will this story be a confusing one?
5658213 I am unsure of what you mean by that. Is it confusing now?
5658213 it will only be confusing if you didn't read the steel dragon saga.
I shudder to think how bad she was before, if someone who goes on in her head about the folly of the races that aren't hers, decides that friendly strangers aren't worth taking the effort to talk to, and generally mildly looks down her nose at everyone she's met so far thinks she used to be condescending and arrogant.
what are all these gems where is the cow?
also
“The mayor was concerned for a while but I assured her you were friendly and you were too big as a dragon, so it’s all fine.” (cant help but feel that you were to big as a dragon is wrong, did you mean weren't?
5810166 Oops, thanks for that.
5809976 She was a regular little monster.
She filled up on soup? I could never do that. It's like Chinese food; sure, I might be sated for a minute, but in about 15 I'm going to want more, much less an hour or two later.
I think you meant thermite.
6283122 That I did, thanks.
EET LIIVES!! Hahahaahahahah- *cough cough cough* ahhh,*cough* Whew!
... And she spends all this time not saying a word, and screws it up at the end by wanting to have a parting touching phrase.
That's fine! It just means it's time for stuff to get interesting, I hope!
Update!
It's too bad that we didn't get a chance to see Twilight study and then activate Dahiric's circle.
Somehow, I really find myself disliking the protagonist in this one. Just really unsympathetic for some reason.
6771345 Yep, she's selfish, self-absorbed, self-entitled, etc. Very flawed.
6771354
Well, so long as it's intended. A lot of stories have this problem where they start making the viewpoint character dislikable without noticing it or without having a greater point to it that they're doing it for. My personal yardstick for this is that the line is crossed when I start wanting to punch the character more than I want to keep reading about them.
Also, I was vaguely surprised to see that the name of the story is actually the name of the character. It reads like it should be an adjective.
6771357 Hah, unfortunately it's the original author's name for the character so I agree with you on that! Dahiric has some redeeming qualities, but the way she's been brought up makes her hard to get along with. Doesn't help when she's in this sort of situation either.
6771365
Yeah, kind of a shame the story isn't about her father instead. He sounds like the type of guy who'd be a pleasure to watch do all this.
6771367 He would :P
keep up the good work. am glad to see an update. ^_^
I stumbled across Mr. Glenns' story some years ago while it was still being written. Since the website went down, I thought that was the end of the work. I also stumbled across this story during a random search for terms related to the original work (hoping for more). I have not read the entire work yet, but I am working on it.
The most unusual aspect of the original story that still sticks with me is the comment about things might have changed due to "a few drops of blood". Those lines haunted me for some time after reading them. Perhaps because we all wish that we could be something 'bigger and better', which I believe is why MLP:FIM is so popular.
This seems interesting. I haven't read the source yet, but I plan to.
Are you intending to return to this work at any time in the future?
8782115 Sorry for the late reply. Unfortunately, I've been working on a few things and I don't have definite dates/times for when I'll come back to this. Probably some time in the next month or two. Thanks for giving this a read!