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In spring, Fluttershy takes a leap of faith and reveals long hidden feelings to a close friend, leading to a short, passionate affair. But come winter, she discovers what of love lasts when affairs end.

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...Dear Celestia's engraved name... This second chapter... That was Beautiful... Simply BEAUTIFUL!

Seriously, I cannot express how amazing that flight scene played out. It makes me wish So Much that more stories would do this, to allow Fluttershy to see the beauty that Rainbow Dash sees in these high skies, the greatest of the out and open world. Just as Rainbow Dash needs to slow down, be more down to earth, and kind, Fluttershy needs to be more open, more outgoing, and experience the thrills that is the pegasus nature of the open beautiful skies.

So many pictures came into my head from reading this chapter. Fluttershy may be afraid of heights, but just as her friends are with her when it comes to scary times, Rainbow Dash can be with her when out in the open skies, to let her know that no matter how high she goes, Rainbow Dash will not let her fall.

The pictures fit so well, I'll even show them below.

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And of course, this: (Which I can't seem to find the source for...)
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Take to the skies, Fluttershy. There's so much beauty to it that you're missing...

5270831 I agree, that scene was beautiful and it also gave some possible forshadowing to how this will end.

I am not a big fan of romance stories, but this one I have to admit is pretty good, keep up the good work!

W-wait so...that's the end? :fluttershysad: ..well, as the moral of this story says, all good things must come to an end..
It was a beautiful story. More heartbreaking than I would of preferred, but it had a realistic, refreshing dash of melancholy reality that made it worth my read.
Thanks for the wonderful story, it's already added to my favorites :twilightsmile:

Goodness, this was such a wonderful story.

Was this for the Flutterdash contest with only one entry?

The story does have some really nice elements. However they come apart a little easy for my taste.
The plot seems run along preset rails, the events appear simplified to fit the tracks.
Why doesn't Dash break it off for exactly the same reason with her other partners in your other stories?
While the writing is good and most of the content too, the point you seemingly try to make isn't valid in my eyes.

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I'm talking about the implication that a relationship between Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash would be just a flash in the pan, an affair.
Flutterdash is one of the pairings where a true and lasting emotional bond is most believable.
Regarding communication, support and trust both of them could hardly find a better match.
The way they just shrug it off feels unsatisfying. It seems to suggest there never was a deep connection in the first place.

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So do you think every FlutterDash fic has to end with them together happily ever after and everything working out? I only ask out of curiosity.

5285740 It feels like most fanfics that involve Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy drifting apart use the Wonderbolts as a reason, and from what I'm seeing, this story does the same thing. The problem I see with them drifting apart because of this, is that it isn't just something that would drift her apart from Fluttershy, but drift her from all of her friends. But we never see her friends objecting to her joining the Wonderbolts and instead are fully supportive. Even being in the same team for the Equestria games, Fluttershy was fully supportive of Rainbow Dash being on the winning team, because it was what she liked doing. But in the end, Rainbow Dash chooses her friends over the Wonderbolts, because they are more important to her in the end.

As Wonderbolt Academy suggests, the possibility of Rainbow Dash quitting her dreams as a Wonderbolt can indeed happen if the pieces are set together. But the Wonderbolts being the primary reason for them drifting apart doesn't sound very plausible since they've gone over this conflict from time and time again. (Heck, we're not even sure if being a Wonderbolt member means she'll have to leave Ponyville to stay in it.)

Of course, there can never be a happily ever after. There will always be more conflicts out there, but this story seems to end on a conflict they settled once before.

This had a surprisingly bittersweet ending but I'm still gonna need a sequel where RD comes back and they just pick up where they left off.

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I guess I messed up then, because I'd meant to show that they began to naturally drift back to their normal relationship already, not for any particular reason, just because passion naturally dissipates over time, as this was meant to be a romance based more on desire than on love (which is what would inevitably end, not any FlutterDash pairing in general). Rainbow Dash becoming a Wonderbolt wasn't supposed to be the reason their relationship ended, but simply the marker of their relationship's end. Like a final nail in a coffin, except not nearly as terrible, because by the end Fluttershy hadn't lost anything, only gained new memories and experiences.

But oh well. Thanks for reading.

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That's what I got out of the story; life happened, and they were better for it, even if it didn't last.

Too many adjectives and externalities! But good!

Again, as she had so many times before, Fluttershy walked deep into Whitetail Woods. She walked along the same well-trodden path, but the path was different now. For the first time, it had been marked by hooves other than her own. Rainbow Dash had walked it as many times as Fluttershy had that year, and it would bear signs of her presence for many seasons to come.

Oh, god, my heart. This is the very picture of my life after love.

The regret and the longing and the disappointment were gone, and replaced with memories of time not wasted, and songs not unsung, and sweet nothings not unspoken.

This is the very picture of my life after love. Well done, author! This short, sweet story beautifully and oh so truly describes how wonderful bright-burning passion is, and how even a relationship that doesn't last can still completely change one's life and leave behind nothing but happy memories. I've long wanted a story that captures those feelings: that gratefulness for the experience and the memories; that total absence of regret or ill will; that, as you put it, "natural drift back" to the relationship as it was before it grew romantic. . . . I know all of those so well. Thank you so much for writing this. I'm kind of wondering if you're writing from personal experience, just because of how close to my own this hits.

This was sweet and sad.

Hmm...this story seems cute, I'll keep reading.:pinkiehappy:

I never thought I'll say this in my lifetime but...d'aww.that was such a cute story and I hope that the next chapters will be as cute or cuter than this. You gained yourself a follower and a like my good sir:moustache:. PS, longest comment I posted.

:pinkiesad2:this...this is beautiful.

This does not happen often, but I'm adding this to my favorites. What a deliciously good story you have here and I might check out more of your work in the very near future.

That was an amazing story!:heart:

She dug into the snow and sat down, tucking her hooves beneath her and folding her wings at her side. In the ground, some small remnant of the warmth she and Rainbow had shared there must have remained, as she began to feel less cold.

Fluttershy drew into herself, and the cold fell away, and the snow melted, and the trees bloomed, and the clouds were swept away. Night fell, and she rested her head on Rainbow Dash’s chest and listened to her lover’s slow, sleeping breath, and wind passed over them and they pulled each other closer. And Fluttershy knew the scene and the clearing and the spring would forever be hers.

Please tell me you didn't forget a tag.

Wow, that was both wonderful and damn sad. The beginning chapters were so happy, the seasons epitomized their whirlwind romance, only for it to crash and burn.

I'm assuming Fluttershy didn't just let hypothermia take her away in the end while she went through the memories of when she was happiest, though that is definitely one viable interpretation.

Yep, very conflicted, on one hand, really well done and a great short romance story, on the other hand, that ending makes me not want to read through it ever again. :ajsleepy:

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