• Member Since 29th Dec, 2013
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Darth Redbeard

We are coming Father Abraham, 300,000 more.



As Rainbow Dash arrives in Cloudsdale for her Wonderbolt tryout, she's beyond nervous. Will she pass or embarrass herself in front of her idols? Including the one that she loves.

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“Women should stick with staying home being housewives.”

.....that guy must be living in a world of pain
also i seriously hope there will be a sequel:moustache:

4943462 Check out Calm Winds fics, and you'll find out.

I plan on a sequel.

4943486 I love his stories! And yours too!

4946918 I'll get one started when I have time.

Short and sweet and i sense a set up for a sequel :raritywink:

Haha yep, you definitely got the douche part of my Rapidfire down pat :rainbowlaugh: Although i did notice you changed him up a little. My Rapidfire is a womanizer and a creepy flirt. Your Rapidfire seems to be more against women in general, it's quite a contrast. But that's a good thing. You wanted to use a character similar to mine, but you put a different twist on him :eeyup: It worked well.

The characters were good and i liked the Soarin Dashie interactions, however i felt like Soarin punching Rapidfire out was kind of sudden. Yeah, he deserved it, and yes, he gets punched in the face in my stories too :rainbowlaugh: but it seemed rather quick. I feel Soarin would have retorted verbally first before getting physical. That and Spitfire just sort of lets him punch out a teammate without batting an eye.

Aside from that moment there was nothing in the story that seemed off. It was well done, nice and small, filled with a little action, and cute all at the same time.

Nicely done.:eeyup:


haha thank you! (You're username and avatar are quite fitting along with my current story :rainbowkiss:)

4948038 you most likely do not want to know what he said.

4948042 Oh gosh, I just realised that! XD! What would Soarin's princess title be?


Princess of Pie :rainbowwild: couldn't help it


Princess of MANLINESS! :rainbowdetermined2:

Princess of MANLINESS


4948281 I wanna know!:raritydespair:

4949298 trust me, you don't. What you saw was all you get.

4949587 I feel so incomplete.:fluttershbad:

4953467 if you saw, you'd want him dead.

4953490 But...! We already want him dead, so no worries.:rainbowwild:

4953548 in Cal Winds, yeah. Not yet in mine.


Not yet in mine.


I will never stick at home.. I MUST BE DIFFERENT:rainbowdetermined2:

5047369 trust me. This guy will be in major pain in the main story I'm doing.

Good, if not get all the girls to beat him up :ajsmug: :twilightsmile:

5047456 a few might. The Imperial 3rd Army commander will not be very merciful.

Finally someone speaks my language of violencen:pinkiesad2: jk jk, but seriously no one it I feel like

5051294 I'm working on the Cloudsdale chapters at this moment.

*Fluttershy voice* Yay :yay:

5052492 well, it's an uphill fight and urban warfare. not going to be easy.

That sounds like it will be interesting, very interesting :trixieshiftright:

5056539 first full take on urban warfare. I hear about it, but never fought it.

Sequel please!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Get ready for the #Review. =]

Here is your #review from the Pleasant Commentator and Review Group! I hope you enjoy it!

5973733 thanks for taking the time and sorry that it wasn't the best.

OHMYGOSH part has no space >.> I want to know why you didn't put a space there I see it's must be a fast paste speaking part. Although it was short >.> and it was alright.

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