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Darth Redbeard


Readying for the Polar Express

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Braeburn has arrived in Ponyville. Is this just a visit? Or is he planning on moving to Ponyville. And like always, a certain pink pony is there to greet him.

Written for a contest

Yeah, I know. Same Title as my SpikeBelle fic. I couldn't think of one, so I borrowed from one of my other fics.

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 39 )

Is this something I have to compete against!?! :rainbowderp: I'm doomed!

But really this story is awesome!! Nice work on it :D

4550375 I guess I never asked which contest this was for... The Supportive Commentary one?

4550388 then yes , I am doomed XD

4550390 never know. still two more chapters to go.

So cute!!!!

4550337 we're doomed! Oh well, good luck to both of you enemies mine. :twilightsmile:

4552816 thanks. and thanks for the advice

4552937 NP my friend, I'm glade to see that you took it. :twilightsmile:

4552951 I try to see the advice I get, and try to understand it.

4552816 Im so lucky to have the nicest enemies! :D Best of luck to you as well!!

4552816 4553009 I wish the both of you good luck. Remember, I still have two more chapters, so we have no idea what will happen.

4553022 Dankeschön :D Have fun with it

4553038 Oh I will :D I finally gots an Idea brewing! It's either going to be really good, or it's going to fall flat on its face!! Hard to tell at this point...

4553050 never know. I thought I would get a bunch of dislikes from some CheesePie supporters, but turns out, 9-1. not bad at all.

Great job... *laughs* Ben Kenobi. Any way you could teach me in the ways of the force?:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

4557162 I'll send a remote for you to practice. :rainbowlaugh:

Let's see, I'll also need one of those helmets, a training saber *continues to rant on without taking a breath* but good story though (sorry I have No replay button)

I'm kinda curious why there isn't a group dedicated to this ship

4563196 you're looking at the founder of that group.

Its a bit rushed and there are a few grammar issues. Like you want greet instead of great at the beginning. Besides that its a good story. You shall get Luna's stamp of approval when all grammar issues are fixed! :)

4570866 Chapter 2 is waiting for a small view.
Any major grammar issues, since I did this one with out a proofreader.

4570875 just change great to greet in the beginning and you get a stamp of approval.

4570902 fixed. would you rather wait till chapter's 2 and 3 are done before doing anything?

4570912 You can get the stamp in a bit. Im on my phone right now. And ill promote you in the group so you can put your story in the other folders. :)

4570917 I'd rather wait till the last two are finished. That way, it would be more worth it. If that's ok with you.

4570955 completed. Let me know of any more errors.

This is awesome. Very cute. I think their kid should be Appleleana Surprise Pie,

4649512 might be a while before that point,

what I have read the first chapter I see this perfect is going to be one of those read for gods sake kind of fanfic but I do love the couple that is presented in this story,pinkie pie and burburn would make a cute couple.that is all I have for now

I don't want to be a hater but this.story suck

4658094 heads up. Sequel is being planned.

This was funny and cute at the same time. Very good.

Hello!

I have reviewed your story in the Reviewer Cafe. I hope that you find this review to be at least somewhat helpful, and as always, thank you for the time, effort, and hard work you have put into the creation of this narrative. :twilightsmile:

https://www.fimfiction.net/group/211585/reviewers-cafe/thread/308771/reviews?page=9#comment/6344303

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