• Published 16th Jun 2014
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The Sun Lied - UniqueSKD



Twilight discovers the awful truth about her mentor

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The Sun Lied

Author's Note:

Not an overly great story, but hope that you, reader, will enjoy it nonetheless. I am sorry for wasting your time otherwise.

- UniqueSKD

"Princess Celestia! Princess Celestia!"

The castle hallways echoed with the excited cries of the little purple filly as she darted through the corridors, narrowly missing a unicorn hoofmaiden mare as she swerved around a corner. Luckily, the hoofmaiden was carrying the expensive-looking plates and teacups with her magic, so she was able to levitate the tray in time for the filly to dash beneath it. "Sorry!", the little unicorn yelled over her shoulder, continuing on her way to the resting place of her mentor.

There was a reason for why Twilight was ever so excited today. As everypony knew, Celestia was responsible for raising the sun with her gifted powers, so as to bring forth the day for Equestria and the rest of the world. Her sister, Luna, used to be the one responsible for ushering in the coming of night, but ever since her mysterious disappearance, it fell to Celestia to assume control over the cycle, commanding both the sun and the moon, to bring forth the day and the night respectively.

It was from her very bedroom that Celestia was said to step out onto the balcony, her horn lit brightly with her magic, using the powers bestowed upon her by Mother Faust herself, to bring the mighty sun upon the world so that day could come. Twilight Sparkle had only ever seen the princess perform such a feat during the last harvest festival that was held last year, but she had always wanted to watch her mentor summon forth the sun alone for herself, with nopony else but her.

So when Twilight Sparkle was taken under Celestia's wing after demonstrating her raw magical powers in the entry exams for a privileged Canterlot academy for unicorns, the filly knew she'd have the opportunity to witness the princess perform her daily routine for herself, an experience all for her to enjoy, in the presence of her idol.

Stopping just outside of the princess's chambers, Twilight's attention was drawn to the windows, as rays of light began to dimly shine through. "Celestia must be raising the sun right now!", Twilight cried. "Oh, I hope I'm not too late!". Abandoning her usual courteous mannerisms for the royal alicorn, Twilight quickly pushed open the large fancy doors leading into Celestia's bedroom, the doors closing shut behind her as she entered her mentor's room, a great big smile on her face, eyes wide with excitement at the thought of finally witnessing her idol raising the sun, with only herself as the audience gathered to watch the miraculous event.

But to the filly's greatest confusion and surprise, she did not see Celestia outside on the balcony, as she had expected. Instead, the white majestic alicorn was, in fact, snoring quite loudly underneath the covers of her bed, sound asleep, unaware of her student staring at her in puzzlement, as the morning sun outside slowly rose and brought with it the new day. Twilight continued to stare at her mentor as she murmured something about 'banana's' and 'cake' in her sleep.

Twilight shifted her attention to the sunlight pouring in through the windows, the sun apparently having no difficulty whatsoever summoning itself without the aid of Celestia's legendary magics. There were many questions running through Twilight's mind right now, the majority of them demanding to know who was possibly raising the sun in Celestia's place. The first thing Twilight wanted to do was to wake up the alicorn and inquire the reason for the sun's rising without her there to guide it, but then another thought came to her, one which caused the little filly's heart to sink

What if...what if everything she had believed about Celestia's power to raise the sun...wasn't true? What if the great and mighty alicorn herself did not really summon the sun to bring forth the day?

What if her idol, the pony that she had looked up to, whom she had loved and trusted dearly, had lied? Not just to her, but to all of Equestria?

Not knowing what else to do, Twilight silently sneaked back out of the room, while Celestia rolled over in her sleep, giving Twilight a glimpse of her smiling face. Twilight turned her head away in disgust. All this time, her mentor was thought to have the power to raise the sun, and yet there she was, asleep in her own bed, smiling that smug look, no doubt thinking of everypony who believed her so-called gift as fools so easily tricked, gullible and willing to believe anything their ruler told them.

Shutting the doors quietly behind herself Twilight began to make her way back to her own room in the castle, not going more than a few feet before her eyes began to tear up, droplets dripping down onto the lush carpet beneath her hooves, a feeling of betrayal and deceit washing over the poor filly, as she wandered with her head down, ears drooped, along the corridors of the royal palace that was home to the greatest liar in Equestrian history.

When Twilight finally reached her room, she closed the door behind her, and locked it tightly. She leaned her head against the wooden frame, eyes closed as she tried to stop her crying. Feeling a warmth caress her cheek, Twilight turned her head to see sunlight shining through her window. In a fit of anger, the filly stomped over to the window, and used her magic to draw the curtains, and did the same for the other windows, filling the room with darkness. Igniting her horn to create a small light to see her way, she threw herself onto her bed, and buried her face into a pillow as she bawled her eyes out, soaking the pillow with her tears, pummeling the pillow every few seconds furiously.

"How? How could you do this, Celestia!?", the filly's muffled voice yelled from her pillow, which she now brought to her face and held there. "How could you lie to everypony? How could you lie to all of Equestria? How could you lie to ME!?"

Outside her room, the day's morning had begun for the rest of the world, ponies here and there setting up their stalls and opening their shops, trotting about visiting friends or browsing wares displayed within shop windows, and not one of them knew about the awful truth that had been discovered up in the castle of Canterlot.

Comments ( 80 )

The shocking truth is that Celestia is actually the real Twilight, and the Twilight we know is a figment of the imagination of the real Twilight that was given life after Nightmare Moon won when she returned.

Good story, but the thing is that when Celestia doesn't raise the sun, like with Nightmare Moon... the sun doesn't rise.

"Rock-a-doodle" wasn't that great even when helmed by Don Bluth.

The show contraindicates this happening. It's... sad but lacks impact because it's so fast. There's no build. The bad things happen like a pileup of cars in an accident. She makes ansingle observation and concocts an elaborate explanation involving ancient lies and official denials. That's not a tragedy that's a conspiracy theory about reptilians.

I'm pretty sure the show tells this isn't how it works, and that she actually does raise the sun.
But nice, anyway.

4555303 GASP! THE SHOCKING TRUTH! XD

4555395 Meh. You still have a nice avatar. XD

I'm sorry, but this just doesn't work.

4555367 I don't care if anything I write is good or bad, friend. I just wrote this crap for...well, that reason. I'm not a good writer, and I won't pretend to be.

If your comment is trying to say this was bad writing, then you can just say it. I won't be offended. I wasn't expecting positive feedback for this anyway. If anyone here could write this tory better and give the idea justice, they are free to do so. I would be much happier knowing that an awful writing of mine gave someone the motivation to write it better and get the views they would deserve more than me.

I honestly mean that, too. So, I am deeply sorry for wasting your time. Please forgive me.

4555417 I know. But I wasn't trying to write a good story here. I just wanted to move some junk out of my head and stick it somewhere. And since when did anything I write ever work? XD I am awful at writing stories. I don't think I have one story worthy of being called 'good'. XD

Not that it matters to me, really. I'm awful at story writing, but at least I can say I tried. I am very sorry for wasting your time. I hope you bear no ill will or grudge against me.

The simple fact was: Celestia already raised the sun. She just went back to bed after.


...it takes a while for the light of the sun to reach Equestria.

:pinkiegasp:

4555422

I don't comment like that. I comment with the intent of helping the writer by pointing out the weak areas of a story. I want to encourage you.

You're a good fellow.

4555410 If you ask me, you should have made this into a wtf-random-comedy and made up some troll science reason for her not raising the sun.
As for my profile pic, I should have a really kawaii one coming up, if the sketch the artist gave me was any proof

4555475 Oh right. I am sorry.

Had a very late night last night. Been trying to turn someone's story chapter into an animation for them. Not thinking clearly.

But as much as I appreciate help and advice when given, I honestly really really REALLY don't need any for this story. This story was just nonsense I typed up fresh from my head. If I wanted to really make it remotely as close to a good story as I will ever be oh-so-lucky to get, I'd have spent time on it, but as it says, this was just written in under an hour (actually, five minutes flat)

But your feedback will be given attention, because if you spent time being nice enough to give it, I'd be a massive dickhead McScrooge not to return the favor and listen to what you have to say. I owe you that much at the very least.

I am sorry for not putting something better up, but ideas do not come so easily for me, especially when I am unable to find inspiration so easily. Britain is a hellhole at times, and the WORST place imaginable for finding inspiration.

Could be worse, though. If I lived near London, I'd be killed the first day. XD You look at something even the slightest bit wrong, and you're f**ked. XD Ah, the 'wonders' of being British, crumpets and tea, lads. Chin chin! XD

At least we rock the porno mustache look. XD

4555493 The artist never got back to me, the ignorant S.O.B XD

Was probably too busy with your avatar. XD Never mind. I think I am better off drawing my own, in my own horrible drawing style. XD

I'm so pathetic...XD

Would you mind if I took this idea and ran off somewhere else with it? Like, I'm not technically stealing it, I came up with it on my own as well, but now that you actually wrote about it I would feel bad using it without talking to you first.:twilightsheepish:

4555518 Dude, I said somewhere here that if ANYONE thinks they can use this idea and write it with the justice my idea probably deserves, they are absolutely free to do so. I could have probably done much more with this idea, maybe even make it brilliant, but I didn't cause' I am tired from working on an animation all night long.

Please. I would be insulted if you didn't take the idea. But promise that you'll put more effort and time into your writing than I did. All credit you get for your story will be yours entirely. I ask for nothing in return.

DOUBLE THUMBS UP!

I loved the story! It was half adorable and half sad, but it was still cute and a very nice use of words! Way to go, my good man! :twilightsmile:

4555514 You're a better artist than me, by miles.
And the artist said she's been really busy or something, so that's most likely the reason why.
If you want, I can give you some artists that take requests?

Duh duh daaaaaaaaaaaa!!!!!! Celestia lied, man! Game over, man!Game over!

4555544 You are kind, but I made no real effort with this story. With the utmost regret, I have to be honest, and decline your compliment. But please know it was much appreciated.

Maybe if my next story is mildly better than this, you can give me that compliment then, eh? XD

Now I feel terrible for what I've said to you. I hope you do not resent me in any way, or were offended, as it was not my intention to be rude or ignorant of your kindness. If you are upset in any way from my comment, please accept my sincere apologies.

4555303 Well, maybe they move on their own, but the sisters are powerful enough to move them, or stop them. Maybe it was a natural cycle, but then Nightmare Moon stopped the cycle.

4555535 I certainly will. When I actually do finish something (which, admittedly, is rare), I put as much effort into it as possible.

4555560 You're a very good writer, it's just that you totally rushed this one. Nobody, and I mean NOBODY, can write a good story in one hour.

4555560 Then... I'd love to read one of your better ones... I guess...

The sun lied, it wasn't actually there to begin with. For what is real within a dream where fear can reign?
Poor little filly, so young, so innocent, and oh so vulnerable.
You've believed in her for she was your truth.
With her you've felt comfort and in her guidance you stride forth knowing her will is right.
She always is. She has to be.
But what if that truth was a lie? Will your world crumble knowing its foundation to be hallow?
That is your greatest fear little filly and within the realm of dreams this can be your reality.
- Nightmare Moon

The things I think of when I can see it happening.:facehoof:
4555422
You're a good writer, you just wrote this too quickly.:pinkiesmile:

4555661 Just so you know, I'm not asking or begging you to read any of my other stories, unless you willingly want to. I have my flaws, but I will NEVER beg people to read my stories or view my Youtube channel. I have to earn my views and followers/subscribers. If I had to beg for them, there'd be no point to me even trying to do anything on the internet.

4555780 I know that, I was just saying... :moustache:

4555787 Alright. My bad. Just checking, was all.

4555274 Geez. That's too deep for how I'm feeling right now. Brilliant.

4555508

Good old England. I wish I could visit.

Are you still doing "Changeling" chapters? I've been away from YouTube.

Eh, Celestia had the sun rise on snooze. She already rose it, just went back to sleep.:trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright::moustache::trollestia:

4555921 I stopped the story reading quite a while ago. I got a message from someone saying what I was doing was retarded and that your story deserved a much better reader.

Part of me suspects it might have been that one guy I argued with in one of your blogs, but I won't point fingers.

I liked it, Unique, but I feel almost as if you've wasted a TON of potential here. It's a great premise, and I think that you could have written a truly great story if you had put more time into it, instead of just trying to squeeze in under an hour.

Don't waste fantastic story ideas. I personally despise waste. I'd rather see you say "I tried to write this one in under an hour, but it just got away from me and I couldn't stop!" and then end up reading some epic story with Twilight confronting Celestia, Celestia trying to explain herself, or maybe even the public in general learning the truth.

I think this might have worked a lot better if it had turned out Celestia had worked out how to raise the sun without her direct attention, and for Twilight to never find out and go on thinking her mentor was a fraud.

4555948 I don't know what's wrong with me. I feel like I am losing interest in writing, which I probably am.

I have only two stories - TWO stories - that I am proud of. 'At the Bottom of the Bottle' and 'The Stoning of the Heretic'. They got lucky with their views, and it was a huge honor for them to be in the Popular Section. Had they been put in the Featured section, I'd have deleted them in a heartbeat.

I guess I am lacking ideas, or maybe I have good ideas, but a poor way of executing them. I am not a smart person. I mean, just because I succeeded my schools with high grades and marks, doesn't mean I am overly intelligent, after all.

Maybe I just need more time to think. I want to do a few stories now and then, for fun, but I want people to actually enjoy reading them, and I want to be doing stories that I know I will finish because I want to finish them.

4556228 I think you're going to get a lot of views if you put the time and effort in that I didn't

Oh, that is kinda cute. Poor Twilight. I can't help but wonder what her next action would be, ignoring her outright or attempts to inform the public of lies and treachery? Or is Celestia just so good she does it in her sleep?

Really cute x3

4556198 Don't get me wrong, I enjoyed this story. It's just that it could have, should have had more meat on the bone.

It's a one hour story. It's not going to get a hugely positive response, but I still think you did a good job within the parameters that you set for yourself.

4556331 I have set up a new story that i will get around to doing some time later on this week. I aim to make this new story one that redeems my stupidity here.

Don't get me wrong, I understand that this took a short time to make -and considering it only took you an our or so, the words that you use are quite gripping. But I think this is a poor way to use such good skill and talent in writing, for instance, try writing a story with more meaning, and an embracing story line! :pinkiesmile:

4556405 I have been tired all day after staying up late trying to get an animation done for my YouTube channel. It may have had a part in the crappy quality of my story. I only hope the next story I do will earn me everyone's forgiveness. I really do want to give the best I can for my viewers with what little talent I have.

Story writing is hard without something to really inspire you, or motivate you.

I bet, when you cast the same spell at the same time every day for thousands of years, You get to be pretty good at it, good enough to say, cast it while asleep, by muscle memory alone.

4555933

Ahh.

I got a surprise reading of "The Discarded Son" which was cool.

:trollestia: Twilight I can raise the sun in my sleep.
:facehoof: Why didn't I think of that?

So um... Wait. What does her cutie mark mean I wonder? Celestia's?

It just seems... odd.

Either way good writing. Just wish there was more interaction with Celestia herself on the matter.

4557895 I mean, I really did enjoy the reading, honestly, but after getting that message, I started feeling bad. I also starting listening to myself doing the readings, and I just...didn't like my voice. I began believing that it wasn't doing your story justice, so...yeah.

But you have my thanks for letting me do it for that long at least. So, thank you.

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