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Steel Quill


A pony with too much time on his hooves and too much plot to work with, in more ways than one. Porn Pope (TM). Also on FA!

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I am hoping I did well.

Did well? DID WELL?!

Gosh darnnit this is one of the best Pinkie Pie ship-slash-clop fics that I have read and just the amount of detail in, not only on their bodies, but their emotions was pure raw talent. You good sir have a gift and I am going to favourite, like, and follow you to the ends of the earth!

>inb4 new stalker

I also thought this wouldn't do justice how much this story opened up my eyes on top-grade clop so I'm going to read your other clop fics, or fics for that matter to see how good you really are.

4461432 Hmm... its that good huh?? Im gonna give it a try then... not sure what to expect since the focus is pinkie-clop (i never read any clop on her cuz i dont think much of her unlike the other main six but...)

4461432 Well, thank you so much for the praise! :twilightsmile: By all means, feel free to view my other works and comment there as well. Comments serve as the fuel for inspiration, they say.

4461559

Oh believe me when I say that the focus is not Pinkie clop.

Jaw dropping.

4462074 Jaw dropping...good? bad? :rainbowlaugh: I'm assuming good

I love your work so much! You have such a great talent! Now I admit, I'm good... but not that good. Which I happen to find odd considering my family tree and ancestors are filled with artists (architects, writers, painters, etc.). To be honest, there is a small part of me that is jealous... and I don't usually carry jealousy towards anything. So consider that a compliment, friend. My fim fic I'm working on isn't doing that great (apparently). Do you think maybe sometime you could take a look at it?

4462625 thank you so much! Don't let jealousy sting at you though. There are far better writers than I out there. As for your story, message me a link to it and I could look it over, sure!

I really love your work. Its amazing! My family timeline is filled with writers, architects, painters, etc. but I don't write nearly as good as you. My work is good... but not as good as yours. I must be honest here... a small part of me is jealous. But no matter what, I'll always love your work. My fim fic isn't doing so good (apparently). Do you think maybe sometime you could take a look at it for me?

4462663. Sorry for the repeated message. This phone really sucks. Also, I might be a tad jealous, but consider it a compliment. Anywho, here is the link.

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/187964/the-heroes-of-equestria

4462734 No worries, I'll give it a read and PM you my thoughts.

love your work Quill, especially that you give time for the relationship to grow. Making sense that, they automatically would burst into passion. I can't wait for the next one. I hope for Apple Jack and soaring; it's a little wish fulfillment but, a girl can hope right.

BLOODY BUCKING BRILLIANT!!! This deserves, nay, DEMANDS a continuation or sequel. Here, have a mustache, you've more than earned it.:moustache:

4463252 Haha, A sequel? That'll take some doing, but I'm sure I could easily create one.

4463252 THE ULTIMATE AWARD

This was... absolutely wonderful. The build up was great and made the end result very believable, both characters were written well with excellent dialogue that could be both humorous or serious whenever they needed to, and that ending...oh god that was an amazingly written clop scene. Well done, you should be proud of your work.

4466354 Thank you very much. I'm glad you found the story so enjoyable :twilightsmile: Feel free to check out my other stories as well if you'd like!

Oh man where do i begin with this one?!? That was.. oh wow.

When one thinks of the name Pinkie Pie, multiple ideas come to the brim of one’s mind.

cute, funny, loud and a tad annoying but definitely not sexy or anything i would lust over...
*takes a deep breath*
this story here... your story changed all that (now i feel guilty for having this wierd boner for wierd pinks... *shakes head*)
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It’s not like Joe wasn’t experienced with mares. He’s had his fair few in his time in Canterlot, a mare here or there who wanted more than just the cream filling his donuts had.

Oh-hoh!!!! you magnificent bastard you!!! i saw what you did there!
BRAVO!!!
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All in all this is very well written and very entertaining. It didn't have any problems grammar wise or character wise (imo characterization was damn good) and the way you package all of this is really effin great!

What i really really loved about this story though is not the splendid characterization or even the clop... *eherm*, no it was how the story was masterfully set-up to make the story move - pinkie being single in the beginning of the story, her doubt over her selfworth and beauty <<<<these right here are what really got me.
The reason i say this is because among the main six, to me, pinkie's archertype is the leas attractive (though fun and good to be with pinkie is oftentimes loud and annoying). Having that element in the story added a realism to the reading experience i had and made me stop and think 'yeah, i can totally see this happening'.

The first clop i read on pinkie pie and one of the best one shots out there... definitely making a like and a fave.

Well done :3

4461568 you were right... it was goooo-ood

4463326

Yes... please?

For kitty-Chrissy

Holy crap that was amazing. all I can say :twilightsmile:

4467122 Yes please...? Do a sequel? :rainbowlaugh:

This ship, I like it ANOTHER. Seriously though this was fantastic. Now to go look through your other stories.

Or the odds of being able to predict how many times Pound and Carrot Cake would try to escape their pens.

I think you mean Pound and Pumpkin Cake, right? Otherwise, I have to question the Cake's family practices.

Aside from that, a wonderful story and smoking hot clop. Well done.

This was a fantastic fic that I enjoyed reading start to finish, and arguably one of the best clopfics I have ever read. I'm regrettably not all that up-to-date with current fan-favourite ships, but the Donut Joe x Pinkie Pie ship is new to me, at least... Though it honestly wouldn't surprise me if this is something that is quite popular. I think that you nailed the characters on the head... most of the time. There was one moment that made me go :fluttershyouch: and it didn't quite feel right.. I can't remember the line, or how far into the story it was, but it was a Pinkie Pie bit, and it just didn't ring quite true with her character. Other than that, fantastic job. Your writing style is fantastic. It's immersive, and it makes me feel like I'm actually there, which is something I love to see in a story.

The only real bone I have to pick with this story might be the way that they began the sex scene. (This could have been the moment I mentioned before, or it could have been something else, I don't know) But I don't think that Pinkie Pie, would have done that when she still had doubts about weather or not Joe actually liked her in that way. Yes, it was approached with caution, but I personally think maybe not enough, and it maybe got into it a little too quickly.

Overall, a great fic that's worth reading, which has most of the elements in it tied together nicely, with just a couple minor issues.

I rate this fic :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:.5 /10
Enough to earn you a like and a fave, Great job :raritywink:

4470119 Ahh, thank you for spotting that, I must've missed it! XD It's fixed now. Thank you for reading!

I enjoyed this.

The first half or more was a little slow in that It felt a little detail heavy in places and maybe a few to many info dumps for my taste, though I this info did help move the story along.

Might be an idea to try getting more of this information through character interactions just to make things a tad more dynamic (things like Pinkie mulling over all her friend's relationships for instance would probably be slightly more interesting to read if she was discussing with someone else. Something to keep in mind for future fics). Kind of a show vs. tell thing. There's lots of telling early on.

About the halfway mark though, your attention to detail really pays off and and it's pretty much all golden with the scenes playing out quite well and being easy to follow with terms that made plenty of sense.

I did think it ended rather abruptly. Granted you don't need to cover a lot after the climax (or multiple climaxes in this case :trollestia:), but I felt it could have used another paragraph or more of Pinkie and Joe being a little lovey-dovey. :twilightblush:

As mentioned though, on the whole i enjoyed it and did read it start to finish. Definitely a solid romance that does well establishing the relation between the characters before things get hot and heavy. Good job. :twilightsmile:

Sweet Celestia, haven't read it yet but i just noticed the word count!:pinkiegasp:

4479557 What can I say? A good story has to be told however long it may be :raritywink:

You asked me what I liked about this story and the honest answer is the whole thing. It was very well written and the way the characters behaved was believable. The clop was tasteful and well written. Compared to this I really need to step up my own writing. Well done. I'd love to see this style of writing done for pretty much all characters.

Oh Look out we got a clop, how Freaking original... Give the man a cookie and b:yay:tch slap his mama because we got ourselves a winner! Men and women, come one, come all if you're horny for some genuine, 100%, bestiality baby! or um Anthro sex!... F:yay:ck I don't know what... I don't know what I feel, maybe uncomfortable, intrigue... maybe? It felt like if Christopher Walken read me Dr. Sues while using sexual undertones throughout, it was just odd from me...
Um... kisses... dashie kisses... :rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss:
I guess... I don't know! I'm Out!
(P.S. Love my sarcasm) :derpytongue2:

4484280 You uh...feeling alright there, pal? :rainbowlaugh:

4484410 Maybe I'm not sure... I'll call my lawyer and find out... LOL :derpytongue2:

You asked for what I thought, so:

Slow buildup, but buildup to relationships is a good thing. You gave the characters personality that held true through the story and you made good use of descriptive elements. Perhaps a bit of over-describing in a a few spots, but I'd prefer to have too much detail than too little.

The climactic encounter was also well paced and detailed. I'm also glad you didn't neglect to have them still express aspects of their personalities in the encounter. So often a clop scene is written without regard to the personalities of the participants, which can make it feel disconnected from the story. Congrats on avoiding that pothole here.

Overall, just a nice read. Good job. :twilightsmile:

And everypony already knew about Twilight’s on again, off again flings with Flash Sentry

eh.... :unsuresweetie:
but still, i enjoyed the story.

Holy fuck....I'll be right back, I think I need to reboot my brain.

4513540 Is that good? Did I do good?

4513687 ok im back, and yes, a brain reboot is good, it means my brain temporarily died of EPIC overload.

4513687 well written story i loved it:pinkiehappy: 10/10 :trollestia::moustache::derpytongue2:

As a butt lover, I give this 11/10 stars. The plot was amazing... :rainbowkiss: and the story was too... :raritywink:

4529661 Thank you very much for your praise :pinkiehappy:

I love Pinkie Pie x Donut Joe stories. There isn't enough of them. Anyway, excellent job.:pinkiehappy:

Aye if you didn't know already this got featured on EQAD! Great job and keep up the good work (and if you can show some of the other mane 6 in your stories, that'd be great!)

Well that hit the spot

Um... I'm kinda disturbed that Pinkie Pie has breasts.
Ponies don't have them, not the ones from the show.

4719462 That's why the story is tagged as anthro, aka, anthropomorphic.

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