Flash Sentry and Rainbow Dash, a couple?Who would have seen this coming?
Not Rainbow Dash. She was just taking a nap when she heard Twilight Sparkle and flash Sentry break up. She saw it coming, but she can't help but feel bad for the handsome lad. Did she, the element of loyalty, really just think he was handsome?
Either way, she decides to at least talk to him to make sure he's okay. What happens next, she could never in her wildest dreams believe would happen.
A little Romance fic I came up after reading a new cannon I found. Just a little practice of my own writing skills before I get to work on my Silver Spoons sequel. Success or 1000 likes is optional, although constructive criticism is welcomed.
Chapters (1)
More like Ass Entry.
Going to be honest. I don't like Flashlight, it just seems wrong to me atleast. Though for some reason you can see Flash as a piece of clothing where it looks better on someone else than the one it was intended for (to some people atleast). Needs a little fixing up with some spelling but other than that, it seems like a good story.
I'll give you a thumbs up for now.
But as for relationships go, usually the person who you are trying to break up with will not be in the best of moods which is understandable and it should have took a bit more time to get through with them. Starting out friends is natural but planning it like these two might seem like they're rushing it.
4420253 Dude, don't knock it till you try it.
Flash 'n' Dash?
4420714 is that good or bad?
4420735 It's just me saying to not diss this story till you read it. Interesting take, though.
4420745 thank you, came up with it after I heard the new cannon thanks to the mixed up life of brad. I just wished most people thought that way, but oh well. Oh with my other stories then.
4420714
I've entered enough asses to know how I feel about them.
Welp, I must congratulate you. You're the first person ever to kill two of my OTPs in one fell swoop. (FYI, the second one is RainbowXSoarin')
Still, I'm not going to dislike, simply because I find hilarious that Flash is now dating Scootaloo's surrogate sister when my headcanon is that Flash and Scoots are siblings
Is it first or third person?
4421416 thanks a bunch. Would you seriously consider being a proof-reader of mine?
4421535 So just reading through the chapter before you post it and pointing out mistakes? Sure why not
4421575 alright, and in return, I'll edit for you when you need someone. PM me after you've read the silver spoons
I love it
Heh I didn't even think of this ship but I'm liking it
wonderful job 
4422179 thank you, that's means a lot for all the dislikes I've gotten. Now can you convince your friends to read it?
4422229 I'll sure as sugar try
I like it. I never thought I'd like a Flash x Rainbow fic, but I did. Good show!You deserve this:
To be brutally honest, Here is your grade.
Doesn't she care about her friends feelings first? But hey, what do I know about the element of loyalty?
I'm scared.
Description: Fail
Story: It could be about 20% cooler.If I were to read it but that discription made me doubt it
Idea: Good
But, I will now explain the failure in description. So you can see why I didn't read it.
"Flash Sentry and Rainbow Dash, a couple?"Predictable but good.
"Who would have seen this coming?" Me.
"Not Rainbow Dash." Really.
"She was just taking a nap when she heard Twilight Sparkle and flash Sentry break up."Coincidence....I THINK NOT!
"She saw it coming, but she can't help but feel bad for the handsome lad."OBJECTION! This is a clear contradiction. If Rainbow Dash as the element of loyalty would to tell her "friend" that she noticed tension in there relationship and would have told her.
"Did she, the element of loyalty, really just think he was handsome?" Sense? Does this make sense to you? What does the her element have to do with her thinking he's handsome? Or is she saying she better than him because she is the element of loyalty?
"Either way, she decides to at least talk to him to make sure he's okay." That's the element of disloyalty for you. What about twilight?
"What happens next, she could never in her wildest dreams believe would happen."Sex.*cough*
"A little Romance fic I came up after reading a new cannon I found." No comment.
"Just a little practice of my own writing skills before I get to work on my Silver Spoons sequel."
"Success or 1000 likes is optional, although constructive criticism is welcomed." Challenge accepted.
This is my review. These were only from the description. I should know, that a description can turn people away from a story. So, all this from a description fail. It's sad. But, fixable. Do with it what you will.
Xblade out.
4420253
I figured why not read your story it might not be as trashy. Your story: is fair and leave it at that. And Payten Hoofing...really?
Just no.
4422376
So, you do reviews now?
4422490 Yes
more like crush them into the ground. Into what they are really worth.
4422498
I see... I guess that means that this was trash?
4422505 Very much so.
4422452 YOU'RE one to fucking talk, you bloody damned wanker. YOU of all people have NO FUCKING RIGHT to go around judging this shit, bad as it may be, when you deleted at least 1/3 of all the comments on one of your fics for not praising it 100%. You have no taste, no class, no skill, no tact, even compared to US, and you use outdated memes that nobody finds funny or clever. And when someone like YOU, who goes fucking nuts if everyone doesn't 100% praise him on everything he does and makes idiotic statements like "what could possibly be wrong with it did you even read it" reviews a fic, POORLY might I add, and acts like he has some fucking CREDIBILITY?
No sir, fuck you.
4422376 my, don't you know your discription a an how to put on a good show. I don't suppose I could talk you into editing for me. I would love to have a friend like you on my side.
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4422420 very funny, Dark. But was this towards me, or Flash Dash?
4422591
It's towards the person whose comment it replies to.
4422420
no u
4422452
4422540 now now, I thank you for your support, and from the sound of it I'm glad you liked it. But if wants to point out what's wrong wit my story, that's fine. I might listen to everything someone says, but it is important to listen to others points of views.
4422540 Well, people change believe it or not. I do have the right to review. It's my right as much as my duty. Rage won't help convey your point. Maybe I listen if you calm down and talk with reason. If your referring to my "first" story. Which I have written 2 stories after that which I didn't delete comments. I can change bro. Can you accept that. Probably not.
<------Meh
4422580 Sir, please, I implore, you, don't use him. He will hurt you more than he'll help. May I recommend someone else, like Mondai Shunketsu or, hell, me. My father's even a college English professor.
4422376 Nigga you dumb.
4422590 Have you read my new story. Probably not.
4422619 Technically you do have a write to review, but since you suck at writing and taking criticism. So it seems
FUCKING MASSIVELYslightly hypocritical for you to just suddenly up and start reviewing fics.As stated before; nigga you dumb.
4422613 I'm an american and I have the right to express my option. I shall not be silenced.
4422619 You haven't changed a BIT! You're still a whiny comment deleting douchetard! You act like a condescending motherfucker to EVERYONE! And I referred to your first AND third story, I WOULD have mentioned the second but if I DID it would take a novel to fill up the tales of your hypocrisy and stupidity!
And for the record, your new story is shittier than a guy who ate three Taco Bell meals.
4422613 I thank you for that, but he dosnt trouble me. I don't suppose your up for a co-editor friendship? Just read my Silver Spoons story, and PM me when you're done
4422655 FUCK YOUR AMERICAN STATUS, you can speak freely, but YOU STILL HAVE FUCKING CONSEQUENCES.
4422642
You mean the rape fic? Because that doesn't help your cause.
4422630 yeah, alright then. From how's he acting, I choice to ingnore him. If he keeps it up, I will deleat his comments.
Although, dose this mean you would like to be editing friends?
4422649 I'm trying to change and Who said I can't take criticism. That is a lie.
4422679 My schedule is busy with school and that, but I might be able to get another guy. I have a few Skype chats of guys who can help you massively if you listen to them (and I thank your for maintaining a non aggressive attitude).
4422656 Says the crazy catguy.
4422679 I'd actually advise against deleting comments. It only ever leads to more trouble on this site.
4422680 far enough. Your right in some parts, but have you ever considered listening to what people have to say. Perhaps instead of being angry and trolling people, you could learn from them, and improve yourself as a writter and perhaps a person as well?
4422697 I'd agree with you, but it's xblade.
Deleting his comments save IQ points.
4422697 I agree. Don't do what I did please. Don't delete comments. They come back to bite you in the ass, plus the butthurt and the etc.
4422705 I will if it gets out of hand, but idont mind someone tellingly why they didn't like my story. To me, those 15 or so dislikes arn't something to be ashamed of, they're 15 reasons how to do better next time.