I'm a recently returned writer and plan to release alot of stories again.
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Scootaloo's mother dies after a terrible storm, now the little filly feels alone, sad, pain, friendships will be loss and friendships will be gained.
editor/proofreader Never2muchpinkie
backup Editor RaylanKrios
(Just to let everyone know, this story takes place at lest a week after Twilight's kingdom)
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4847712 oh I will I shall work on the next chapter tommarow
I love it please update soon
Felt obligated to read because of the Sterm and drang about the title.
This is pretty sweet! I'm gonna fav and like.
........ Was this intentional?
It's "terrible," not "terrabo."
4848975 sorry got a hard time spelling things
4848751 ugh I'll fix it once I'm on my computer
I wish I had time to write all of these new stories you have coming out
You're off to a great start. Up until the end this actually feels like it could be an episode of the show.
I look forward to seeing how this turns out.
4849678 thx
4849760 If you need any proofreading help, just ask me.
4849678 A good episode for season 5.
4854312 Yup. They can easily handwave the fact that Scootaloo sees Twilight for Twilight Time. Just because Twilight is her teacher doesn't necessarily mean she'd want her as her foalsitter. Lots of kids tend to think their teacher doesn't have a life outside of school, and they usually get proven wrong.
4849810 yeah I thank I'll send you chapters to this story I want it to be somewhat good
okay, this is good, but grammar and sentence placing is kinda hard to follow. some sentences don't seem to end, but are an entirely new sentence.
i look forward to more, but i cannot favorite yet, for the grammar and i still need to see how you handle scoots' emotional trainwreck
4858994 chapter 2 is done my editor is getting to that prob be edited completely by monday or tusday
4860982 Chapter 1 is done. I'll try to get to chapter 2 today. I'd send it to you but I don't have time. My lunch break is about to end.
That must've been a really strong storm considering pegasi work with clouds, and Derpy could survive (slightly singed) bouncing up and down on a storm cloud.
4876298 yeah it was a really strong one, did ya like this chapter? did I get ya to cry at her death?
4876450 You did.
4876298 You mean this.
4876450
4880544 Yup.
bacon ? Shouldn't it say hay bacon? Ya know, so we don't have carnivore ponies
her face red from crying ? Shouldn't it be her eyes red from crying or her face soaked from crying?
other than that....
4887847 It's probably hay bacon. Pretty much everyone and their mothers has thought of it.
this chapter was so sad....
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4927265 It would have been better if you posted this on Sunday.
4927292 Fuck! Wasted opportunity.
4927295 so um wanna write a fic together? I'm crazy you're sane what could go wrong?
I'm not joking.
4927318 Pass. Got too many ideas I need to get out there. Thanks for the offer though.
4927326 well I tried
4927392
Found a funny typo for you to fix
I don't think Twilight picked up a "naked" anything and wiped Scootaloo's face with it!!!!!!!
*WolfishLOL*
4927844 lol
fixing it now
4927844
Wow! I was the one who edited the chapter. That was supposed to be napkin.
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*Chuckling* I have actually found grammar errors in printed books!!!!! and in games U might buy!
I enjoyed this, I also have a habit of being super critical which isn't always apreciated, so if you want my nitpicking let me know, if not I'll leave my remarks at overall good job.
4930895 thanks, glad you like it, I've slowed down my writing, so that its decent, if you want to nitpick go right ahead I don't mind
This is very promising. Can't wait for the next chapter. I may have a serious addiction to good scootaloo adoption stories and momma Twilight is usually great. I'll give this a fav so that I can follow it easily.
4932928 thanks I'll try to update soon
From the title and the summary, I get the impression you might be misusing the Tragedy tag.
Here on FiMFiction, it has a very specific meaning as is explained in the FAQ:
(The FiMFiction tag is taking about the "literary tragedy" meaning that's been around since ancient greek plays... not the "sad event" meaning that was cooked up by sensationalist journalists abusing the language less than 200 years ago.)
4933261 I thought tragedy was needed since a pony dies but guess I can remove it
Ok, the edited first chapter was perfect. However chapter 2&3 characters were out of character, the story was rushed and cut and everything was just a little off. This chapter felt like it should have been three different chapters one after another and the previous chapter felt forced. But that's just my opinion! The first chapter though rocked and I look foreword to seeing more of this story in the future
I just thought of something, where's Rainbow Dash? Please tell me she makes an appearance later one that explains why she hasn't been around to comfort Scoots .