• Member Since 26th Nov, 2012
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*Slight AU*
(In this story all school-aged ponies are babies)
Rainbow Dash has stumbled upon a box. In it contain a stuffed monkey toy, a blanket, a note, and a baby inside.
Rainbow Dash takes the box back home but will she be able to raise a baby on her? Hopefully with the help of her friends, Rainbow Dash can learn what being mother is all about.

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 194 )

rainbow Dash

Might want to fix the uncapitalised 'Rainbow' in the description.

i like the concept hope to see more.:rainbowlaugh:

It's a great idea, but, to be honest, it seems a bit... rushed.

Interesting. I debated doing this story myself as it seems so obvious, but I took the fact no one had done it as a sign it would get a bad press from the get go. Due to the obviousness of it, and ripping off MLD which seems frowned upon. Good story though, I am going to track it.

Few spelling mistakes mind:
After tanking her and telling her that she would visit tomorrow
Tanking instead of thanking.
"Your just like me when I was your age kid."
Your instead of you're

Sure there were more, but I can't see them now. A few punctuation issues as well, missing comma's, and incorrect spacing after full stops.

i would agree rushed and it needs to be profread but i still like the story.:raritystarry:

Alt. Title: My Little Scootaloo: A Sort Of, Kind Of Spin-Off Of My Little Dashie...?

A My Little Dashie spin off without being another bland My Little [x]. This story has promise...
:yay:

I like it, but one thing... The dogs name is Wynona. After the country singer

Very good I enjoyed the first chapter and I hope to see more soon.

Awesome story, but rushed!
Gotta give the reader the FEELS! :flutterrage: The feels :fluttershysad:

"What the hay is that."

Queeeeeestion maaaaarks... Quuueeeeeestion maaaarks!

Other than that it was quite enjoyable.

I am quite intreged with the story do go on :moustache:

Good new chapter, though like people have said, it feels a bit rushed. You could do with slowing down a lot and detailing more of the events that occur. I.e. changing Scootaloo, feeding her could be added to. Not to mention instead of just saying they had a fun morning, you could have put in some cute scenes that show us that, and would lengthen your story beautifully.

But hey, I'm still enjoying it regardless!

Also still a few typo's here and there, I.e. " Up until now she thought babies were cut" I assume you mean cute, unless Rainbow Dash is referencing Cupcakes...

Very improved from the first chapter I was hoping someone would make a fanfic based on that comic.:rainbowkiss:

jmb

There is a comic from beavernator, fairly sure that is the name, that starts like this. Think it was called 'Scootaloo's perfect day', though it might be off. Look it up on Deviant Art

Comment posted by brad70505 deleted Dec 11th, 2012

Up until now she thought babies were cut but she was never one for taking care of one.

Yes, cuuuut! :pinkiecrazy:

1782469 That comic was an inspiration for the story along with the cover art.

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You could be a problem... Try not to do too much "cuuuut"ing, okay? I don't want to have to write your name down.

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What are you talking about officer? There are no electric carving knives in my pocket!

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Oh, the irony of that statement... You haven't a clue who I am do you? You haven't heard of Kira before, have you?

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Umm.. Errr... Ummm... Nope, not at all. :facehoof:

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I am an unorthodox justice. I can kill a person simply by writing their name down in a notebook called the "Death Note". I can also make the time and events of the death of that person. My plans for this world are to rid it of all criminals and vile humans. You are a vile human. This is just a warning, though. I already killed Ryuzaki (also known as L), the world's best detective. He hunted me, so I hunted back. Besides him, millions of criminals have also died. Although the original Kira was killed by Near, I carry on his legacy. The world will be pure once more and I will become the god of this new world.

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Death Note + Electric Carving Knife = Cut up Death Note. But I suppose you can write pretty fast.

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Even if it's just a scrap of paper from the note, I can use it to it's full power. Even the smallest shred. I simply have to deploy a decoy or something that I own't reveal.

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Tell me, can you write on ashes?

In the letter...

"I can take care of myself for reasons I'd rather not say."

Is it supposed to be "I can't take care of her myself"?

Proofreading is your friend. DO IT! *waves meter long ruler about*

*busts out the ruler again* Proofread, edit, THEN post.

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Cute story but some fluff would be nice. Descriptions for example or more of them. Also assuming where did they get the baby instead of guessing that she is her cousin from out of town or something seems scripted? But still keep going.

Sorry I mean at least one of them should assume she is her cousin or something logical before going into shock :twilightsheepish:

I wish the chapters were longer but I am really liking this story. please keep it up.

Your writing/chapters keep getting better and better.:pinkiehappy::rainbowkiss:

Great addition to the story, your skills are improving, though the pacing is still a bit fast in places.

Just thought I'd say this; Twilight wouldn't be around when the CMC were babies, they were like 8 when she first came to ponyville :3

Also, don't take this the wrong way, but If you got yourself a pre-reader, the story would be much better.

So feaking adorable... Great chapter and have a happy holidays.:pinkiesmile:

I sense strong feels in this fic:eeyup:

Damn
Right in the feels:fluttercry:
Good job man good job:pinkiesad2:

Programs, if you think this gives you feels you have no idea what I have coming up.

Comment posted by SolidFerret deleted Dec 25th, 2012

The begining has 2 mistakes

5 Months later but Dash says it has been 2 months since she found her.

Also: Lifting her wing p, she was Scootaloo sleeping
should be Lifting her wing, she saw Scootaloo sleeping.

1851778 Yeah it was originally two months later but I realized that it was more in the summer in the first chapters. Typo

It's still a cute story though, keep going. :rainbowwild:1851794

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