You have my attention.

You've DEFIDENTLY peaked my interest and intruistic desire.........

HIT ME WITH YA BEST SHOT!!!!!

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Oh wow. Thanks for everybody's positive response. This went way better than I ever imagined, and I wasn't even sure I could properly pull off a clopfic. I won't be writing too many clops in my fanfic writing career. Just a couple here and there whenever the mood suits me. But I am encouraged.

For the love of Celestia stop calling it his little boy part. Call it a penis or a phallus, but don't call it that It sounds so bad.

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Meh. I hate the anatomical words. They're so... doctor-y.

4020956 Virility, or just allude to what it is then.

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Yep to the first one, ditto on the second one.

For the first one: Let's face facts; Twilight has now seen Spike in teenage form. His growth spurt has come in. So now she's having feelings for Spike that is decidely not of a sister-brother feeling. Hell, her little fantasy in the shower is starting to show that. And also Twilight believes that Rarity's still stringing Spike on because of his crush on her, and frankly, it's pissing her off and being mad at Spike and Rarity for their actions. She has never experienced a crush before, so obviously her way to keep Spike for herself is to act as the protective older sibling.

And ditto: Spike just had his first ejac in that outhouse. And you have to know that he's starting to have grown-up thoughts about Rarity and himself. I think he's seeing it as how Rarity sees others, especially stallions. And he's jealous because he wants to be Rarity's man. Completely normal for him to be envious of basically any stallion that is giving Rarity more than just a wink and a glance. Puberty has come in, obviously. But a part of him also knows that Rarity probably can get any male she wants, so he wonders constantly as to why Rarity is still courteous and happy for him, even though Spike is obviously a dragon, not a stallion?

Based on the fact that right at the end, it looks like Rarity caught Twilight clopping in the shower, as well as we can see that Spike has secretly seen it too, and that Rarity knows that Spike has read her steamy novel and can get a little bit of an idea as to what Spike may be dreaming, the next chapter or two is gonna be confrotation city for all three of them.... IT's either gonna end up as a bit of a fight, or a threesome. I'm calling for it.

I'm absolutely in awe at the speed you guys read at. XD

Can't wait to see where this goes.

OMG THIS IS SO GOOD MORE PLZ also faved this story idk why but i really like spike shipping stories

4020956 I agree with the great Path_of_cloud. Saying little boy parts makes you sound like you're 3 yrs old.

After reading this chapter I'm guessing Rarity had sex with Sky Sparks on the train after knowing im for all of like an hour.

Please tell me this isn't gonna end up as a shit on Spike fic where Rarity and Twilight end up together.

4021441 I'm glad you agree with me. From the looks of things Rarity does hold a special place in her heart for Spike. Whether or not it is love we don't know for certain. And from the looks of it Twilight is getting aroused about Spike, while she probably still views him as her brother she appears to be okay with incest. Not only that but Spike is still pretty much confused about his puberty and we're not sure on Rarity's stands in everything. It's a safe bet that Sky will be a problem later on and it's probably not a good idea to stand in the way of what a pissed off, hormonal dragon wants. They will have to talk about this and the way things stand at the moment there is a good chance of it end with either somebody blowing their top or a massive three way fucking.

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I honestly don't know, either, that is suspicious as hell. I know it's not a murder mystery, but Rarity doesn't have an alibi....and we discover that Sky Sparks is just another hormonal, handsome stallion that has set eyes on Rarity as yet another conquest. (Thank you omipotent third person view )

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There's still a lot to sort through, my friend. Feelings are starting to show out. Plus we have to remember, both Twilight and Rarity (though Twilight has deeper feelings at first glance) have favorably taken a liking to Spike's new form. Plus there is still that present that Rarity made for Spike from chapter 2, I think. I know what you're thinking--"So what?! Rarity makes gifts for Spike all the time, just for being her assistant." Yes, that's true, but I also think that it's an obvious clue why this particular gift is so meticulously wrapped and signed. Rarity could have easily given Spike that present once on the train, or before when Twi and Spike agreed to join Rarity on her trip. Maybe I'm looking too hard into it, but to me, that's significant.

"Were I even in a better mood, I'm afraid I would still have to turn you down!" Rarity shouted. "Now I'm in a bit of a stormy mood, and I haven't had any fun since arriving at this soiree. I'm going to have to excuse myself and head back towards my cabin. Thank you for keeping my cart safe."

Yes! This is what she should have said the moment he opened his mouth several chapters ago. The fact that it actually took this long despite the way he was acting is just crazy. But at least the story is no longer forcing her to be ridiculously oblivious for the sake of dram-

"Very well," she said. "Tomorrow morning at the top of the west slope. Say ten o' clock?"

Why would she do that? Why, after everything he's done, would she go and do that? What's worse, I suspect I know where this is leading, and I really hope you don't take this story down that path.

Maybe I'm just nitpicking, but I think it's because I love the rest of the story. You're a great writer; the spelling and grammar are great, the dialogue is great and in-character, the descriptions are great, and everything just flows together very well. That's why I wish this entire thing with Sky had not been done, because it's pretty much the only weak link in the story. The problem is that it's a pretty large weak link.

Well thank you all for the words of the praise and the odd criticisms as well. I've never tried clop before, and then when I DO attempt one, this one turns out to be my most commented on and most voted upon, and you guys even put it into the popular box. ^_^
I guess I'm still a bit clumsy at this. I don't plan on making it a habit to write clop, although I do like touchy and thorny topics. I mostly try to write meaningful stories. Even in this clopfic, I try to put some meaning into it. It just feels weird getting all this traffic on a genre that I'm new at where my older stories seem barely noticed at all. I will try extra hard on the further chapters and make sure the story ends happily and remains entertaining throughout.

I don't think you have to worry about this story being noticed at least if you are concerned about how many viewer seeing it.

I added this to the Spike Fanfictions group, if you don't mind. I felt that it needs to be shown to a bigger audience.

This story's really good! Probably the first clopfic without sex in every chapter to keep my attention for this long, which is saying something! Good on ya! I'm loving it so far!

Ha! Look at the likes!

This is pretty legit.

4031328 Seeing how it was you who posted this story to the group, are you sure that this is a Spilight story or a Polyamory with a few parts of Spilight in it?

4031960 it's got Spilight in it; polyamory and spilight are confirmed on the description. Althought later on it may require reclassification.

Please, head on.

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Oh, so you're kind of like me in that you dislike when characters feel railroaded into certain actions?

Wow, you're going to hate the part where Sky Sparks shows up (if not every part he's in).

4033250 Partial Spilight in a completely poly story, got it.

Thank you for clarifying that so I DON'T READ IT

4036012 So why bother with this second comment?

4036095 Dude, just a joke, I've already read the story and the reply and was bored so I decided to reply to your comment and make it seem like I was an asshat.

4036267 Can't tell if sarcasm; it doesn't translate well over text.

Either way, a'ight.

4036296 Yeah true, its hard to correctly translate sarcasm over text...

I LOVE how the story is developing. First with spike learning about the joy that is mastrbation and now twilight embracing her feelings toward spike not so much as a little brother but as that of a man. Oh my Celestia i can't wait for thr next chapter! Bravo friend bravo!

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Nope, not gonna have to worry about that because I stopped reading after Ch2.

Wow. So many favorites for this one little story. Thanks.
I've considered all the criticisms as well as the praise. Some of them are certainly valid. Others, I feel, not so much, but I hope to use my experiences with this story to go back and improve my older stories.

Interesting chapter. Guess it's time for Twi and Rares to teach Spike about sex hmmm?

...I oddly foresee Spike gets some very interesting versions of "The Talk", complete with demonstrations and ha-er, claws on practice...

Hey Man I just wanted you to know that this store is great. Its starting to be compared to the scoot dairy's. I made this account to tell you how much I love it and everything that was hating on your hard work afew chapters ago they can go buck off because I like the way you build up the store (even if they had a point here and there). Keep up the good work man I hope you email or come out with a update very soon. your Biggest fun Neon Lights.

I swear, is it just me seeing the same group of Spike Fans in each comment section? We got DarkPhantom12, DanvailleBengal, John The Dragon, and even Path_Of_Cloud, a semi-popular writer. We should, like form like, the The Spike's Poetic Inquiry of Klastonic Ecstasy. S.P.I.K.E.

4037463 I swear, it gets better.

Oh man collector you've got to hurry and put out the next few chapters! Im dying over here man! I gotta know what happens next! Don't leave me hanging bro!

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Ha ha! Well okay.
I figure the story is about halfway done. Or perhaps 45%. I'm going to write in groups of two or three chapters and release them that way, so that I can make sure everything flows together the way I want them to.

4058653 and I will eagerly read each new chapter as they are released! Keep up the good work! Im rooting for ya!

4021236 Right now, a train wreak would be PREFERABLE to the apocalypse that is coming. We have a now teenage dragon, still fairly small and young by dragon standards, but a dragon none the less, getting horny, confused, and dangerously jealous. There have been several points where it is clear that a part of Spike would like nothing more than to reduce Sparky to a mere scorch mark on the ground/walls, or see if he can make a new coat for Rarity out of Sparks' hide.

We have the most powerful unicorn in all of Equestria, the Element of Magic herself, getting angry with, jealous of, AND aroused by, one of her best friends.She keeps going from stressed out about her homework for the princess, to angry with Rarity for leading Spike on, to jealous of Rarity because she want some of that hot new dragon too, then to being depressed because she got jealous and did something fairly stupid, and now also finding herself wanting to tap that curvy, alabaster backside herself. The poor girl has enough manic depressive sexual tension that I am afraid she is going to explode and then just kidnap and ravage someone. The only question is will it be a pony, a drake, or both. And to top it off, we now have proof that Sky Sparks really is nothing more than douchbag playboy. Toss this in with the fact that Twilight is both one of Rarity's best friends, and totally wanting some of that marshmellow flank herself, and I don't see her taking Sparky doing something stupid well. Given his status of dumbass playboy, that stupid stunt is going to be inevitable. The only question is how stupid it is going to be. Sparky upsets Rarity enough, Twilight and Spike will put the fear of Luna into him. Should he actually hurt Rarity? Twilight will prove that she is clearly more dangerous than a dragon. Spike might kill you horribly or even eat you alive, but magic is more terrifyingly flexible. And there are so many fates worse than death...

Finally we have the Element of Generosity, Lady Rarity. She is clearly the only one here with an adult (if limited) outlook on sex and sexuality. Spike walks in with a raging dragon pride that he is clearly trying to hide from her? She ignores it and pretends she didn't see it. Rarity is curious just how much Spike actually knows about sex, she swallows her pride and embarrassment and ASKS. And upon learning that Spike doesn't even have a remote clue what the hell is going on, she reassures Spike to make him feel better. Spike asks her where he stands, even asking compared to the grand playboy that is Sky Sparks, and she tells Spike the truth. Yes she is attracted to the new Spike, but also to Sparky. She dances about the topic of where Spike stands with her, but Spike is also fairly immature with regards to these things. I cant blame her too much for that, because she may not have decided that for herself yet, let alone been able to figure out what to say to the teenager who clearly has a thing for her but has no idea about what a real relationship would involve. She does however make up for this by telling Spike that he doesn't need to compare to Sparky, nor use him as someone to measure himself against. Then Rarity runs into Twilight, who clearly lied about only wanting to rest in her room. A Twilight that seems really drunk and smells like her only thoughts are who she wants to jump first. Twilight gets bitchy and snappy with Rarity, and Rarity shrugs it off like a lady. And still proves herself to be generous by offering ways to help Twilight. Including what appear to be hints that Rarity would have helped relieve Twilight's stress herself. Rarity possibly bisexual? She never did say whom she took to her bed, only that it was a limited number...

So, we have two characters heading towards respective breakdowns and poor Rarity caught right in the middle of it all as the only voice of reason. The question becomes how much damage will the other two cause before Rarity can help resolve the staggering amount of UST between the trio. And more terrifying, especially for Sparky, is how upset will Rarity become once Sparky has his "I am going to do something stupid" moment. Because while a lady may be above directly seeking revenge, there is nothing to say that she wont decide to NOT stop the other two . She might even reward the pair afterward...

All in all, I am rather enjoying myself. I'm laughing my backside off during some moments. Yeah I know its not a comedy but I cant help it. Twilight: "Well I am using Rarity's gift and finally relieving some of this tension. Wait did Spike just come in? You know, I could REALLY go for some dragon dick right now. Uh... That thought should really disturb me, but for some reason I like it. Oh wait Spike is here, he is watching me get myself off. Well shit. What now? Use magic and make a dragon-shaped dildo to finish the job? Yeah sounds good" I almost fell out of my chair. And then, Spike's only comment on the whole thing? Spike: "Hey I am bigger than that Twilight!" At that point I did fall. A well spun tale indeed. Best part is while I am laughing at how this can all go wrong so very fast, I can still see how this can go sexily right for the trio. And not all the terrible things that can go wrong are mutually exclusive from the sexy parts going right...

Oh gee. Thanks for the vote of confidence and the, uh, interesting prognosis on where you think the story is heading.

Ok first Twilight is starting to clop to images of spike:awkward lvl1
Spike see's Twilight clopping: Awkward lvl2
Twilight see's spike watching: Awkward lvl 4
Twilight Continues to clop regardless: Awkward lvl 9
Twilight moans spikes name and squirts spike: Awkward Lvl 15
Spike consumes said squirted juice: Awkward LVL 20
Rarity see's this action: AWKWARD LEVEL 60, MAX LEVEL REACHED
REACHING CRITICAL MASS: Pressure release required, Best method, Release Chapter 6 Valve

*shudders with frustrated patience*

Okay. New chapter's coming a bit slow. But it is coming.

4090968 oh Thank Celestia! Confirmation!

Oh shit son, the crap is on the ceiling now.

I hope that beyond most Spilight moments. I was about to ignore this story until you get to this chapter. I like the Spilight and in the earlier chapters virtually all spararity. Lucky that all read.

I hope to update soon.

Sorry if it sounds weird is that I use a translator.

Update: Okay. Sorry for the looooong wait, guys. Not only do I have a job that takes long hours, but I must've reworked the opening scene at least four times. I think I've found a groove, though, so the rest should come easy.
Heh heh. Come easy.
I'll try to get the next chapter out within a week.
Anywho, wasn't that a smashing season finale?