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Love triangles, how do they work?

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I don't get why people downvote a good story.

1939978most likely troll's and idiots who don't like the pairing

In before Mallajong. :moustache::rainbowwild:

1940318 Afraid your too late... I sent it to him before it was published...

DAMN YOU INCOMPLETE TAG!! or maybe not....

well back to normal...i'll wait until its completed...sry personal rule :derpytongue2:

p.s: still have a thumb :p

Awesome story is awesome... Enough said :rainbowwild:

Okay, in the middle the quality just randomly goes down. Missed capitalized names, sentences that don't make sense, and Rainbow Dash's personality went way to far into fangirl. Aside from the ohmygosh, she never really speaks that fast. Usually she goes more for talking about how awesome they are. There's certainly a charm to it, and it is interesting. Spike likes both, and both seem to have feelings for Spike, so I can see this getting crazy and even heartbreaking. Still, certain things feel a little to unnatural.

Why is Rainbow labeled as infamous?

1941881 You don't become famous by pulling pranks and boasting about everything... Also, she once killed a chicken...

The plot is interesting and I would like to see where it goes.

And I thought Rainbow was a lesbian.....................................:twilightblush:

I like it. Have a :moustache:

The story is cute, although slightly OC. :twilightsmile:
I bucking adore anything SpikeDash :rainbowkiss:

Grammer and sentence structure needs a bit of work The errors I found, I self correct by copy pasting the story into my wordpad and going over it with a fine toothed comb. I wish to show you, but I have no idea how to go about that. :twilightsheepish:

I'll go and perform Seppuku if this has offended you in anyway. Please don't hate me kind sir.

1950918 Just send me a private message and I'll get underway with editing it. Hmm actually I haven't got any pre-readers or editors and you seem to know your stuff, so would you be interested in helping me out?

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God dammit...:facehoof: How did I mess that up...:rainbowlaugh:

I think phonetically sometimes and it just comes out like that, usually when I try to type fast, but that's just me

Hurry, another, please! :rainbowwild::moustache::raritystarry:

I say, this is a good chapter, can't wait for another chapter.

um... just one question.

ignoring the "hatching/birth day" issues (like Spike not showing knowledge about it) that I can't exactly argue either for or against, I would like to ask: why wasn't Rainbow at the party? she was bucking THERE not minutes before, talking to Twilight about Spike and what? happened not to hear anything about his party? I'm just saying...

still a great story though and can't wait for more!

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TBH, this story to more than is 12 weeks over due so I really just rushed the last 1000 words. Though if I re-read over the whole chapter again, I'm sure there's more than a few things I could add to make it more believable and uhh... believable...

Also, I work without pre readers and editors so that only adds to the time and lastly this chapter was split in half so I wouldn't have to prolong the second chapter any longer than I already have.

I guess getting back on subject,Spike forgetting his birthday is due to him stressing over more important matters, and for Rainbow? I guess she's doing Rainbow Dash stuff :rainbowdetermined2: and probably didn't even notice it was Spikes birthday in the first place. - My story canon (Or you can just call it lazy writing).

This is honestly a good story, just fix all the grammatical errors. BTW, i love your avatar...

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You just made my day! Thank you! :pinkiehappy: You should read the second chapter if you haven't already! Also, if you have, leave as much feedback on it as possible! It all helps.

:derpyderp2::derpyderp1: PLZ POST TEH NEXT CHAPTER! I NEED TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENSSSSS! :raritycry::rainbowlaugh::moustache::facehoof::facehoof::facehoof:

now that that brief outbreak is over. I love this story. keep up teh good work! :)

After the ever so brave though Spike would never admit it, Rainbow dash had reunited the pet with her owner she began to boast once more of her valiant deed. She flew high up into the air hovering over the mass of faces to make sure every pony in the crowd could hear her "Another pon... er Cat! Saved by none other than Ponyvilles

infamous

rainbow dash!" the smug blue Pegasus bellowed out as insurance that some pony had missed the rescue, or Celestia forbid, forgotten about her selfless act of generosity to save such an adorable and innocent creature.

Infamous means famous for doing some thing bad

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