You've won an all expense paid trip to the beautiful 'a winter resort', located on the pristine slopes of 'a mountain'. Seriously, you need a name for this place, constantly calling it 'winter resort' sounds completely terrible and makes it seem like it's just a 100% contrived plot device. I mean, it obviously is, but the reader isn't supposed to have that fact slapped in their face.
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You've won an all expense paid trip to the beautiful 'a winter resort', located on the pristine slopes of 'a mountain'.
Seriously, you need a name for this place, constantly calling it 'winter resort' sounds completely terrible and makes it seem like it's just a 100% contrived plot device. I mean, it obviously is, but the reader isn't supposed to have that fact slapped in their face.
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Silly Twilight, Sunrise on Mars is a kind of pinkish-purple.