I think that Twilight is being too much of a protective mother and with Spike's new found hormones he is trying to hard to get Rarity's attention. And we are still not completely sure what Rarity is think. Things are quickly setting up to be a massive train wreak.
I can already see the shit nearing the fan, the train out on the horizon, the light at the end of the tunnel... It's so beautiful. I love this story I really do, it had me when there was implied rarilight, I've only read one fic which even approached this right and then it fucked up in the worst of ways. Still this has promise. We have the hunky douche which every high maintenance girls falls for, the one sided love/protection, and the idiot caught in the middle with just a touch of too much teenaged angst. Honestly the punch line has written itself. Still... It is interesting to imagine what you would portrait Spike doing in this scenario. I can just imagine Sky's douchery reaching whole new heights, but the potential there is enough to anger me to near blind rage, yet rarity will still give the "bad boy" a chance at "changing" him. I like to laugh at these types of woman as they get married. But I digress. You've added a form of morally correct actions in this fic. Twilight hiding the letter, to us it would seem like she is just jealous of the gift for spike, another she is protecting him from a broken heart, those avid rarilight out there might even say that Spike doesn't deserve such a nice present. But there is one thing getting me. The amount of time it took Rarity to gather the suppies. I've ridden on too many trains. From head to caboose the longest it took me to reach the end at my slow 6 year old pace was 5 minutes and that was stopping and saying hi to most of the people on that train. Now spike had been reading a book, moving through quite a few chapters... That's what? 30~40 minutes? Yeah. Assuming that rarity is a bit of a prude here she wouldn't... Lay it out, but following logic, base instinct, and exposed plot... Well he must have come pretty damned close, if not gone all the way. Which brings me to the point that brings hell fire to earth. If... You know what... I think I'm gonna stop here. I still have two chapters to read, it's too late into the night to finish so expect more tommorw.
I think that Twilight is being too much of a protective mother and with Spike's new found hormones he is trying to hard to get Rarity's attention. And we are still not completely sure what Rarity is think. Things are quickly setting up to be a massive train wreak.
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I can already see the shit nearing the fan, the train out on the horizon, the light at the end of the tunnel... It's so beautiful. I love this story I really do, it had me when there was implied rarilight, I've only read one fic which even approached this right and then it fucked up in the worst of ways. Still this has promise. We have the hunky douche which every high maintenance girls falls for, the one sided love/protection, and the idiot caught in the middle with just a touch of too much teenaged angst. Honestly the punch line has written itself. Still... It is interesting to imagine what you would portrait Spike doing in this scenario. I can just imagine Sky's douchery reaching whole new heights, but the potential there is enough to anger me to near blind rage, yet rarity will still give the "bad boy" a chance at "changing" him. I like to laugh at these types of woman as they get married. But I digress. You've added a form of morally correct actions in this fic. Twilight hiding the letter, to us it would seem like she is just jealous of the gift for spike, another she is protecting him from a broken heart, those avid rarilight out there might even say that Spike doesn't deserve such a nice present. But there is one thing getting me. The amount of time it took Rarity to gather the suppies.
I've ridden on too many trains. From head to caboose the longest it took me to reach the end at my slow 6 year old pace was 5 minutes and that was stopping and saying hi to most of the people on that train. Now spike had been reading a book, moving through quite a few chapters... That's what? 30~40 minutes? Yeah. Assuming that rarity is a bit of a prude here she wouldn't... Lay it out, but following logic, base instinct, and exposed plot... Well he must have come pretty damned close, if not gone all the way. Which brings me to the point that brings hell fire to earth. If... You know what... I think I'm gonna stop here. I still have two chapters to read, it's too late into the night to finish so expect more tommorw.
Not sure but I think I sense a little love confliction in Twilight about her feelings towards spike.