The place? Exists.
The time? Is midnight.
The action? Yes.
The pony? Trixie.
Written because I realised I hadn't written a Trixie fic yet.
Rated due to very light references and coarseness.
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Eh, this was all right. A bit too meta for my tastes, and no, I don't like Trixie. I just found this and had time to kill.
Not worthy of the hate it's gotten already, as some thought has been put into it, and the further fact that it's not a trollfic, but nothing to be overly praised, either. Too bad.
I liked the obligatory twist ending, though. Good job.
~ TDG
3482967 Thanks for the honesty, I'm glad to at least get feedback on why you didn't like it.
Well that was...err...something.
Did the Kraang edit this story? Or Mojo Jojo perhaps?
Not downvoting, not upvoting...just gonna pretend I never saw this.
3483008 Er, beg pardon?
I'm afraid your references are lost on me, what about the story are you referring to?
Very meta. Very confusing. Very entertaining. I liked it!
Point of note:
Should be past tense.
....
I'm going to be honest.
I have no idea what I just read. It was weird enough to make me scratch my head, but not weird enough to actually be funny.
And it was decently written, but everybody just felt so completely out of character that it completely killed all off the jokes for me.
Trixie is arrogant and likes to talk about herself... but to the point of obstructing justice?
Twilight is such a rules obsessed dork, that she makes checklists for her checklists... and yet she hid an acquaintance she doesn't like that much from the cops?
And Celestia... Oh my god, Celestia. Not even Molestia would pull the things the Celestia in this fic did.
No. Just no.
I'm not going to down-vote the fic since it was a decent try, but it just didn't work for me.
Better luck next time.
(And just from the record, I came here from I Just Want A Comment. Just thought you might like to know that bit.)
3483257 Consarnit! Gotta fix that... EDIT: That's actually right, since Trixie is speaking to the judge at that point.
3483265 Yeah, I just started from weird and kept going until I was done.
Thanks for the comment by the way!
(Maybe I should plan out my stories before writing them...)
I have to wonder, readers objecting to things like the meta nature or the story telling and the general WTF tone of the whole thing, did these readers not see the Random tag on the story, right there at the top? This was, as promised, Random. Not a big fan of Random, more of a deadpan humor guy; but if inclined to taking a break and read something Random for a change one could do a lot worse than this.
It almost requires an outline to read this; I would dearly love to see the writer's outline. Taken for what it is, what it was advertised as, and what it's meant to be, this story is delightful.
3483302 Outline?
The heck is an outline?
Good effort. A little more planning, along with some editing, and this would have been golden. <w <.
3483518 Well thanks! That's pretty high praise for a silly little thing I cooked up in a sitting.
Just realized I'd missclicked dislike instead of like.
3483553 Hooray! And here I was feeling self-conscious.
I'm glad you enjoyed it!
This said it has sex in it.... I failed to find any sex or sexual references
3483745 It was tagged for the sexual reference.
Odd. And entertaining. Thats all I can really say.
3483525
Sometimes the best things are. : P Just because it took minimal time doesn't mean it isn't quality.
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Name of Story: Trixie Does a Thing at Midnight
Grammar score (out of ten): 7
Pros:
1) There was a nice amount of wit.
2) You've got Trixie pretty well down pat character-wise, at least I think so. She might be slightly more arrogant than usual, but it's Trixie.
3) I think I just blew chunks of brain to the milky way with this random silliness. Nice twist at the end.
Cons:
1) Your punctuation needs a bit of work.
2) There's a fair amount of repetition of words in there, careful of that.
3) I think I just blew chunks of brain to the milky way with this random silliness. It was hard to follow, at least at first.
Notes:
This was a pretty "challenging" read, in the end. I like challenging reads (The Warm Diary of Twilight Sparkle and Apotheosis are prime examples), but I really had to go over this at least three times to properly comprehend what was happening. Trixie's tale was recounted fairly well, I could hear Trixie telling it. At first, I thought that there was a lot of unnecessarily OOC moments, for everypony besides herself. However, this becomes a non-issue once you realise that she's just telling a silly tale for the cake twins. Actually, my mind now is imagining Pinkie in a Trixie suit, telling the story.
It was short, amusing and different from my usual reads for sure, but I still liked it. If you want, I can pm you a list of grammar errors for you to correct? I'm confident I could get you up to at least a 9.5/10. Just simple things like a missing space, dialogue punctuation and some small others. Nothing too major, although some of your sentences are a little long, too.
I hope you enjoy your review! Thank you for your continued efforts in reviewing my story, Keeper of the Crystal Heart.
P.S. Cheers for the watch
3527597 Thanks for the feedback!
In response to con 2, a fair bit of that was deliberate, 'stylistic suck' is the phrase that comes to mind for it.
Other than that, if you're willing to point out my flaws I'd be open to it.
You know, this is probably the strangest thing I've published on site, supplanting A Secret Thrice Unconnected.
And I'm already writing something stranger.
A review on behalf of Mondai Shunketsu of Writers of Equestrian Lore
Yo, you wanted a review, so I'm gonna give ya one. I don't feel like I need to point out any grammatical or spelling mistakes considering there's a group for that, so what I'm going to do is give this a Flash Quality review. So just like Flash Sentry, it'll be low maintenance and quick. But a review nonetheless.
The story itself was all right. The premise was good and the twist at the end tied everything together nicely, though there were occasions where I was confused due to the execution of the shift in scenery. I had to re-read a few lines to understand that the scene had abruptly changed. The Characters, yeah, I won't beat a dead horse, but they were a little off as far as characterization, but then again you had a random tag, so that fixes a lot of things. It was a humorous little tale, but it didn't yield anything beyond a mild chuckle from me. Still, don't let that discourage you. This fic was different for its kind, and I applaud you for that.
Total? Er, if I had to make one...
7/10. Like I mentioned, I won't point out grammar or syntax considering it's already been done and there is the Overly Extensive Editors Group, but to me, grammar plays a large part in the story execution. I can look past it, but it WILL be counted against you in a review. Ok, hope this helps!
3549452 Yeah, thanks for the review!
Honestly all I was shooting for here was a silly little thing to chuckle at, and getting a 7/10 is about as much as I could reasonably hope for.