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exsnaggerwes


I ship it. No exceptions.

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Trixie has been hiding something from her marefriend for quite some time. She fears that coming clean will result in the hatred of her best friend and partner.

Hopefully a one-shot shipfic starring Lyra Heartstrings and Trixie Lulamoon.
That doesn't mean there isn't a sequel in the works. I've played around with this idea for a while.

Once again, thanks to Phenrys for pre-reading and finding the cover image (and I'll gladly source it once I find out who the artist is).

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So, before I read:

"Secret" in the title

Romance tag

Sex tag

I'm calling futa.
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After reading:

...Huh. Unexpected, but well executed. There were several hints throughout that should've tipped me off, but I'm Mister Thickity Thick from Thicktown, Thickania, so I didn't catch them.

I liked it!

5033450 I saw your comment earlier and had to try so hard to bite m tongue :rainbowlaugh:
That was hilarious and inspiring, but futa's not my thing. I actually meant for the end to be a surprise, and purposely hinted at it anyway. Really those hints are what brought the story together for me.
Thank you for the favorite, too! :yay:

Thanks for letting me preread for you. This is a fun, and unexpected story. Keep up the good work.

There were several hints throughout that should've tipped me off, but I'm Mister Thickity Thick from Thicktown, Thickania, so I didn't catch them.

Love the doctor who reference. :twilightsmile:

5034225
Thanks, now I know to disregard this story and move on with my life.

I see completely naughty things with those chocolates... damn Trixie. :rainbowwild:

5034844 :rainbowlaugh:
Thanks for the favorite :pinkiehappy:

Hm. Didn't see this coming. Perhaps now Lyra can finally get some "Hands on" action. :pinkiehappy:

Goddamn, I expected Futa-Trixie.

Buuuuuuut, I wasn't disappointed, either way! Two of my top favorite background ponies in one fic? Hells yeah!

5035891 The Great and Powerful Trixie is NOT a background pony :trixieshiftleft: jk, but your taste in ponies is impeccable :yay:


5035737 damnit, now I have to do it, don't I? :facehoof:
thanks for the idea by the way. I love it, but not as much as I love a few other ideas that I'll probably use later.The sequel in question, if it isn't a clopfic, will probably be titled, "Pet Me"

5036021

Trixie is voluntarily a background pony. She's using the Background Pony spell so no one notices her when she's slowly gaining power to become the bestest pony there ever was.

And thank you, I assume you share my tastes, obviously :trixieshiftright:

5034485 Fallen was replying to another commenter. That's not a line from the story, FYI. :rainbowlaugh:

5036065 I assumed they were making another Doctor Who reference. I watch the show, but I don't write crossovers.

5036061 You are correct, and I like the idea that Trixie uses deceptive magic like that. I see it in a lot of other stories, too.

5036086 For some reason I thought the secret was going to be that her horn was fake and she was just that good of a magician. Good story, by the way! :pinkiehappy:

5036111 It makes me really happy to read all of these theories about Trixie. (apparently futa is popular). I'm glad that my twist wasn't so predictable too. :pinkiesmile:
Out of curiosity, how do you like the adjustment I made to her personality? Like making her not stuck up irl.

5036021 Hehehe. You are most welcome. :moustache:

5036201 An onstage/offstage persona makes more sense than a one-dimensional disposable showmare, really. I know some celebs can become remarkably self-centered and diva-esque, but Trixie's playing the small venues and travelling by herself in a cart, so I think it was a good choice to go with giving her some depth.

Actually, it reminds me of an early 1900's magician who had such a good stage presence that he pulled off pretending to be a Chinese man who needed translators to interact, until he accidentally got shot during one of his own tricks and spoke in English.

Wiki on Chung Ling Soo

Fun stuff!

GMD

5035737 :Hint:-:Hint:

5035891 I'm glad I wasn't the only one expecting that. The title just kind of makes that seem like that is what it would be.

~Crystalline Electrostatic~

5036776 It's fine. In fact, I like her actual secret better. And the only reason why that other guy and I thought that her secret was futa was because we have dirty minds.

~Crystalline Electrostatic~

I'll admit one of the reasons I read this was because no one had a comment spoiling Trixie's secret. :trollestia:

The secret is: revealed in the fic and you can read it your own self like I had too XD

But it was worth it, it was cute, also an interesting ship I dont think I've seen before.

5037578 Thank you :twilightsmile: The ship sailed itself. I'm glad you like it.

Huh. Unexpected. I was guessing the secret would be that the majority of Trixie's magic was pyrotechnic sleight of hand.

5036086

It's because of the show, illusion magic is just her thing, now :rainbowlaugh:


5036714
I've just read far too many things where now a "secret" that she'd feel that bad about would be she has a secret dick.

5036784

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kinda expected this

Maybe it was keywords, maybe it was 6th sense, maybe general like of this subject, but I was able to correctly guess "secret" pretty early. Like, second paragraph early. Sadly, there are hints off-story already, like groups. Still, a good one.

You know, for how obvious that idea is, I'm surprised that it isn't used more often. Well, "secret", not pairing with Lyra - that came out of nowhere.

Trixie's behaviour after revealing secret is a bit stereotyped. Keyword: empath. She should've known.

5041513 that grouping thing wasn't my fault :facehoof: and it wasn't even added that long ago. I intended for it to be a twist in the first draft, but when it came to making the story interesting, I cut out a lot of useless dialogue and added in the "subtle" hints at the reveal. I said it 5033518 in a different way.

The pairing made itself. Trixie gets a lot of abuse from opinions and being the type of character she is. I wanted the friend or significant other she revealed herself to to be understanding about the matter, or possibly excitable by the matter. That's why it had to be Lyra. Though I REALLY wanted to ship her with Spike

As for the stereotype thing, thank you for pointing that out. I'm going to try to work on that. :raritywink:

That was interesting. I couldn't help but look at some of the comments before reading the story, and it's kinda funny looking at where people went with their guesses before reading (namely, the gutter). I need more one-shot romance stories in my life.

5041969

Trixie... well, it was obvious that anyone who would challenge would be publicly "executed". And they were. Noone else was. I would've enjoyed the show. Well, I did, but I mean were I to see it in person. Really, Modest and Average-powered Trixie wouldn't attract the crowd. I don't see issue with her behaviour.

I wanted the friend or significant other she revealed herself to to be understanding about the matter, or possibly excitable by the matter. That's why it had to be Lyra.

I see inner logic now. Still, unexpected.

Though I REALLY wanted to ship her with Spike

*Chockes* There would've been blood, it might've been yours.

It's not that stereotypes are bad. Well, they usually are, but wrong stereotypes are misleading and/or boring. What I don't like in this one: too usual and too improbable in my opinion.

Trixie x Lyra??
That's new. Just for the ship alone, I favorited this story.

The cover image's artist is apparently "zev", but as far as I can tell all 'original' sources of that person's MLP art (two deviantArts and a tumblr) have been wiped/removed. I don't know if actual derpibooru links are allowed here (I know people embed images from there all the time) but the highest quality one I was able to find was image number 68067 there.

Edit: Wait, I just noticed that one has pinecones in the candy box. As far as I can tell, the pinecone one is the original and the cookie one is an edit, I don't know whether it's by the original artist or not.

5045085 Thanks! If you want, you can send the link to the pinecone one in a PM. I'll stick with what I have here, but it's really sad that those accounts are gone. I don't see that a lot, but when I do it gets to me.

Okay, I kinda got it pretty quickly, but I've been thinking about this for a bit anyway. I always figured Trixie's stage persona was that; a persona that might have gotten a bit out of hand. I liked you using that. :) And her and Lyra? Interesting! A very nice, sweet and wonderful ending, too. Nice job with this!

Man...they are gonna do it like there's no tomorrow.

5034225 I dont remember thicktown, thickina

5036111 interesting concept

5036201 i suspected it right away but wasnt sure
not making her snobbish makes sense regardless

ok changeling shape shifting sign me up I am on board with this . and with rarity O yes I am defiantly on board.
ok all kidding aside this along with your other story is vary good you are showing a ton of talent. do keep up the good work.

5140626 Thanks! :yay:
I'm surprised you read all of my stuff in just a day. I'll try to have a new chapter out this weekend, but I'm trying to write two other one-shots first. It may not be updated as fast as it was before.

5141343 for me to sit down and go threw a 500k word story is about 6 hours I just love to read and if it any thing with mlp I am all over it. :duck:

5141398 I could recommend a few stories that will satisfy your voracious reading if you like. You've probably already read most of the ones I've seen, but I've got a few people sending me recommendations as well, so it's not just one source. Celestia Sleeps In is a good one so far, and I'm almost finished with it.

5141553 I have added it to my list ty for the link.
I am really looking for any of the cross over links to (five score divided by fore) I have several now but I know I am missing a copal also.
but my #1 story on this site is lighting dust dust on the wing by sparkle brony.
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/199452/dust-on-the-wind
there is just something about that story that just grabbed my hart and is not going to let go.

5141606 yeah, Sparky can write some of the best tragedy I've ever read. Phenrys could too, with Dr. Ray's and Irony's backstory. I've already got the gist of where their stories are going and they've both made me cry like a baby.

I have a few favorite authors on this site though, and Phenrys and Sparky are just two of them. It's really hard to pick a real favorite, but TwistedSpectrum and his editors are really high up on the list for me. I could name a few, but I'm basically following all of my favorites (along with a few others) so I don't have to link them here lol.

If you're looking for Five Score side stories, they're all in the group Five Score Multiplied by More. There are a lot of them, so you've got catching up to do if you want to read all of them. Personally, I just take recommendations and new ones.

5141780 yes I am in that group and I am sorry to say most of the versions there are just silly. as to twisted spectrum I follow him vary close. I think I have some ware around 75 story's booked marked
I also follow spectrum on so furry as he has a copal story's there and xd-385 on sf also xd-385 is on here as
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/204535/the-price-of-failure I am not sure way but he has stopped posting on here but is still posting on sf.

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