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"Friendship is an island that you retreat to. And you fall on the floor and laugh at all the ninnies who don't have enough brains to have your good taste." --Ray Bradbury

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Pinkie Pie's mind is out where the buses don't park any more. When her wacky-factor gets her in hot water with Applejack, someone close to Pinkie decides for an intervention. Pinkamena, Pinkie's evil side, wants a word.

Thanks to Rethkir for his proofreading. Go read his pony-words.
This story was deemed a Ruby By The Gem Hunters!
Approved by Twiight's Library!

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Good and Evil, those are just words invented by ponies
who wanted a reason to fight one another.

3385009
Colored text???
What sorcery be this!?!?!?!

3385054
You mean Friendship?

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I like your profile pic btw, have a night night.

little miss bonkers

That is now my new name for Pinkie Pie.

loonypalooza

I'm stealing liberating this in the name of the people.

this was very good,i have more to say but ill save everyone the time and me the embarrassment.
at least one crazy thinks this to be deep,sad and compelling.

sooo, pinkie has a split personality and her other half is a murderer that doesnt want to murder because she wants love...epic:pinkiehappy:

This almost made me cry..... :fluttercry:

Thanks for the kind words, folks. :pinkiecrazy: I Just wanted to write a story about everypony's favorite psycho-girl from a different angle. You know, behind her so I can duck when she swings.:pinkiehappy:

nice loved pinkies other dark and murderous yes but not crazy just tired. (I can really relate to that half better to have one self suffer then to have others feel that pain :pinkiecrazy:) any how's great story!

ABSOLUTELY. FANTASTIC.
The way that you portray Pinkamena is mind-blowing. I've never seen anyone else even come close to casting her like this, and I adore it. Truly, you have taken the embodiment of evil and shown us what the flipside of being said embodiment is like and the toll that it takes. :pinkiesad2:I really can't express in words just why I find your Pinkamena so fascinating, so I'll just say this:
Well done.

Thank you, BronyMaster 64. I figured by going the exact opposite route of having Pinkamena
splashing in a puddle of Pegasus giblets (which was what just about everyone else was doing)
and instead concentrate on what I saw was a mad creature with immense self-loathing, that I would crank out something worth looking at. I'm happy that you liked it that much.
And to maintain this comment thread's pinkamena head-trend, I give you :pinkiecrazy:.
Thanks again.

Aheh...just got done thanking you for the favoriteing. Thanks double for the kind words. It's cool that you think she's lovable in this story. (SQUEE:pinkiecrazy:SQUEE) I figured a non-blood-soaked Pinkamena would get attention.

As for me using her again? Mmm, well, I'm kinda-sorta using the Pinkamena-Dashie dynamic in Equus Mortis, but in a really off-hand, slant-wise kind of way.

If...and that's a big if....I can use Little Miss can't-be-sane later, this site will be the first to get it.

(And EQD said my story was unusable. Pah, I say.)

This is fantastic. Honestly, I'd love to leave some intricate and well written comment about this insightful perception of Pinkie Pie. But I can't think of anything to say other than mentioning your logical observations on Pinkie's mind and the beautiful, yet sad conclusion you drew from it.

Also, this moment

Once the smoke had cleared from Applejack’s explosion

I see what you did there.

3763649 I love getting comments on this or any of my stories. I really appreciate the feedback you have given me. It keeps me going, I guarantee you that. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for writing. :pinkiehappy:

Cool...don't know what to really add on that but...cool indeed.

3771002 Hey, it's nice that you commented, no matter how much you had to say. I'm glad you liked it.

a really simple yet interesting story idea and its not every day you get to read something that doesnt have Pinkamena killing everyone. Well done! :pinkiesmile:

3781825 Thank you very much. Yeah, I wanted to show my fave pink pony in a story that wasn't Cupcakes 2: electric boogaloo. I'm glad you like it.

You know i would like this story better if you didn't over use insulting terms when referring to pinkie i know she was frustrated but come on it got annoying no offense....still like it it just i got annoyed with the beginning part the rest of the story is good.

Great story! Very well written. You have a good handle on their emotions. I understood why Applejack was so angry, but at the same time, Pinkie didn't realize that she was hurting her. Now, we've all seen Pinkamena, but in no way does she seem like a villain, just very, very sad. I love stories that show a character's depth, especially when they act in a way that appears simple and shallow. I love seeing Pinkie as more than just a happy facade. This was part of the reason why Pinkie Pride was such a great episode. She actually feels bad when her crazy antics cause Dash to not be happy.

This story was very uplifting, but I do feel sad for Pinkamena. I hope she can be happy too. :pinkiesad2:

Is is just me, or does pinkiesad2 :pinkiesad2: look more like Pinkamena crying from tears of joy rather than sadness?

Just a couple things that need fixing:

“Speak of the idjit.”

You might want to fix that.
"Noone" is not a word.
Sugarcube Corner, not Sugar Cube Corner.
Use indentations instead of spaces to start paragraphs.
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4014086 Thanks for the comments and the pics. Yeah, I wanted to show Ponydom's resident lunatic in something other than a splatterfest. The idea of an evil being wanting to reduce her own existence (and hence, her own misery) was too tempting to ignore. (This was my first fan-fiction. Noone is more surprised than I that I became a fimfic writer.)
Yeah, :pinkiesad2: does look like she's crying tears of joy.
As for AJ using the word "idjit", I've seen that slang-word used before, but I'll probably fix it.
Putting five spaces before I start paragraphs is something left over from my high school days. Noted, however.
"Noone" is not a word? :twilightoops::facehoof: (sigh) Doofy me.
Thanks again for the input. I seriously appreciate it.

Congratulations! This story has officially been deemed a Ruby by The Gem Hunters.

There isn't much I can say that hasn't already been said. A wonderfully unique portrayal of Pinkamena, without blood being everywhere.

4035032 WOW! And I mean it, too. This is wonderful news! Thanks very much for rating my story so highly. :pinkiecrazy::pinkiehappy:

4437743 Thank you. :pinkiecrazy::heart::pinkiesmile:, but she would never admit it.

Applejack pinkie isn't an idjit so screw you that makes you a horrible friend. if my friend got angry at me like that and insulted me i will be pretty sure they have lost a friend that day. its cruel and you shouldn't treat your friends like that no matter how annoyed you are at them you shouldn't use offensive language and insult their intelligence. But i get it this is suppose to portray applejack as a jerk who gets her kicks off calling anyone who she thinks is stupider then her a spaz or an idjit which are insults. So yeah i like this because it shows that neither aj or pinkie are in the wrong or right they both made mistakes. Thanks for portrayuing the darker side of the girls we need this.

“Do you know what the word autistic means?”
"For years you were as dull and as lifeless as the stones your parents farmed."

"Autism is a neurodevelopmental disorder characterized by impaired social interaction, verbal and non-verbal communication, and by restricted and repetitive behavior." -Wikipedia
Autism is not being "dull and lifeless". People on the autistic spectrum vary, but we are not universally "lifeless". You might get that impression from a low-functioning, nonverbal, apathetic, particularly antisocial autistic, but it still wouldn't be accurate and it still wouldn't apply to most autistics.
Sorry if that got ranty. It's just that misconceptions about autism and Asperger's make me feel like this: :applecry::fluttercry::raritycry:

4659372 i'm sorry if I seemed insensitive to autistics. I never intended to offend anyone. I was trying to make Pinkamena something other than a blood-soaked lunatic. I was also trying to point out the importance of self-awareness and how much of a burden it is once you have it. (Pinkamena knows exactly what she is and hates what she sees.) At least you were polite. If I ever write another
story with Autism in it, I'll do a lot more research.
(You have to admit that this story would not have worked with anyone other than Pinkie. Who else would have her Dark Half lecture her. Fluttershy?:yay:)

4663843 "Self-awareness" isn't something autistic people automatically lack, either.
Yes. Research is good and glorious. Just ask Twilight! :twilightsmile:
Rainbow could be lectured by her own arrogance/egocentrism, Applejack could be lectured for her occasional credulousness/superstitiousness (despite being Honesty), Fluttershy could be lectured on the contradiction in her anti-cruelty-ness and her love of "red in tooth and claw" nature (though she doesn't really have a dark side; Discord proved that), Rarity could be lectured on the fact that she's often selfish (despite being Generosity), and Twilight could be lectured on being occasionally inconsiderate to her friends despite being the Princess of Friendship.

4664064 You make good points for the other characters. I'm not going to write "What Our Dark Halves Are telling Us", but you have some pretty savvy ideas there.

4664603 Thank you. I may or may not have pulled shamelessly from what I've read of the Pony POV Series.

THE FEEEELLS!

Also this was a great story, never seen Pinkamena have feelings other than murder :)

4712201 Thanks!:pinkiecrazy: Pinkamena's homicidal antics is what made me a fimfic-writing
brony last October. However, I wanted to show her doing something constructive for a change.
I'm glad I entertained you.:pinkiehappy:

Interesting premise. Have a ribbon:
i.imgur.com/6MrWqNZ.png

4821764 See, Pinkamena? This is what happens when you DON'T eat ponies and help them instead.
(:pinkiecrazy:I'll be darned! Yay!)
Thank you very much!!

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You're very welcome :raritywink:

Comment posted by LunarGazer1500 deleted Aug 26th, 2014

Wow so good and original...you rock!:yay:

4907084 Thank you. Ahh, Pinkamena. I'm so glad you inspired me to write about you.

Great story.

Finally a great Pinkie story with a believable characterization.

Very well done. Have a Scootaloo. :scootangel:

5027473 Thanks very much. Have a crazy Pinkie.:pinkiecrazy:
I know you've heard this before, but I love your avatar name. (I wish I could love my Wi-Fi, but it cuts out on me every ten minutes.:twilightangry2:)
Anyhoo, I'm glad I was able to entertain you.

5027521

I wish I could love my Wi-Fi, but it cuts out on me every ten minutes.

I know your pain. My internet always has some issue. :applecry: Got to get that Twi-Fi connection.

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