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"Friendship is an island that you retreat to. And you fall on the floor and laugh at all the ninnies who don't have enough brains to have your good taste." --Ray Bradbury

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Are puppies an easy source of love? The smart money says otherwise. But Queen Chrysalis isn't nearly as smart as she thinks she is. But she will soon learn a lot. Maybe.
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This is hilarious! :rainbowlaugh:

555166Thanks! I aim to please, even though I sometimes miss.:pinkiecrazy:

It looked so good on paper...

Why does everyone seem to think Chrysalis is a retard? Her plan was just as poorly thought out as NMM's, King Sombra's, Sunset Shimmer's and the Dazzling's plan, yet not everyone regards them as retards. What's with the changeling hate? :fluttercry:

5552700 Well, this is a comedy story, so everyone gets to be silly. For the record, I don't hate Chrysalis or her hive. I just wanted to write something silly after writing so much serious stuff recently.

Funny if completely and utterly stupid. Sorry brony...

She should've bought some Pomeranians. They're little bodies produce more love than any other dog and they're not that big of a hassle full size.

Princess Mucha Lucha and Prince Shiny Tin Foil

:rainbowlaugh:

Princess Mucha Lucha and Prince Shiny Tin Foil

Either Chrysalis isn't as smart as we think she is or this is a comedy.

So... 36 hungry disobediant german shepherds versus a single housecat... Yeah, that cat would be so fucked.

Also, in my experience with animals, cats piss more than dogs.

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I'll give you Nightmare Moon and Sunset, but what was so dumb about Sombra or the Dazzlings' plans? Sombra was defeated by factors beyond his control (Spike being around to be given the Crystal Heart after Sombra trapped Twilight, and Cadance being able to grab it before he got it); he didn't make any real mistakes I can think of offhand. The Dazzlings, meanwhile, had a fairly reasonable plan, and their loss was due to just getting overpowered.

Anyway, as to the story itself, it's funny, but the formatting is a bit off. I suppose it's not necessarily wrong to combine indentation with double spaced paragraphs, but it's generally preferable to do just one or the other. The bigger problem, though, is inconsistent indentation. The first paragraph and second paragraph, for example, are indented to different levels, with the second going farther to the right. Then the third shifts back to the first paragraph's indentation, which stays consistent until the sixth paragraph again suddenly is more indented. Different levels of indentation happen repeatedly throughout the story, and it gets a bit distracting. Also, for some reason there's a line break in the middle of the second paragraph that should probably be fixed.

Can't stop laughing! hahaha! need to stop laughing it hurts....!!! :rainbowlaugh: :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

Hello! Finished reviewing your story for the Goodfic Bin, and once again it looks like I'm accepting your story.

Decision is here!

When you look into the truth about puppy farms, you find that owning one is exactly something a supervillain would do.

Cats rule.

5552700 To me, Chryssi is the worst villain because she didn't do any research on her targets, and tipped off the Royal Guard. Plus she didn't realize that her own damn species can be symbiotes instead of parasites. The rest of them had plans that would have worked if not for Twilight discovering a spell or something.

5804302 Yeah, I've heard some ugly stuff about puppy farms, too.
Some cats rule. Ferrets are my favorite pets, but they are way too expensive for me to own nowadays.

Lost it at 'Toilet Spackle' and 'Rare Disease' :rainbowlaugh: definite like!

8066184 Thanks! I'm glad to see that this story can still entertain people.

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