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After Twilight heals a bond almost broken by the Crusaders, Apple Bloom, Sweetie Belle and Scootaloo decide to do something for Twilight.

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Aw.. another sweet and heartwarming story as always my friend. Twilight is indeed a great peacemaker and friend. :twilightblush::pinkiehappy:

Pretty good short but sweet heartwarming story. There are a few spelling errors and the fight and dialogue feel like they could be expanded, but this is still good. :twilightsmile:

Woah, where;d this come from... Nope, not one of my normal writers. Forgot I joined a group. Last one of these I read was Twilight's Best Day Ever. Recommend it. Compare it too this one. Less Scootaloo though.

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Not bad :twilightsmile:

You're flying is going to get better

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Okay, this touch my heart strings.

I liked this story. The plot was really simple, but very, very effective. It was just a simple misunderstanding, but it worked, because the CMC were still in character and it didn't feel all that forced. It felt like it was natural and I liked that. I would have liked a little more expansion in the fight, going into details what exactly happened.

The ending was sweet and cute. I really liked it. There were a few spelling and grammar errors that I saw, but that will only get better with time.

I wish it could have been a little longer. I would have liked to have seen more details with the parachuting project and more depth in the fight between them. But it was still a nice, short, sweet little story and I enjoyed it. It was enjoyable and I thank you for letting me review it. I hope to see more from you in the future. Take care. :pinkiehappy:

The story's good. The cover art is adorable. :yay:

3620193 Why would you recommend a suicidal story from a story so happy? Why you do this to me? Whyyyyyyyy?!?:applecry::pinkiesad2::fluttercry::raritydespair::raritycry:

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To be honest, I haven't the slightest clue. This was two years ago, mind you. But I can tell you, when I wrote it I was hoping to get that response. Two years later I'm just as amused. Sorry that it's at your expense, however.

I love this story I love seeing Twilight interact with the cmc she's both a teacher and a mother figure to them!:twilightsmile::heart:

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