YES! YEESSS!!!

JES JESSSSSS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

The teddy is still my favorite part. Truly a genius strike at dark psycho shit!

Good Read, Short and Dramatic.

CB

Yay, you posted it! Now, why the hell didn't I get a notification of this! And I favorited it yesterday, why do I have to fave it again! I-I was first...

Well, that's messed up and just plain cruel. Don't ever change, Kaidan, don't ever change. Your stories never cease to amaze me

Good work, my God.

Making me cry at the sadness and horror...

Well done.

- PRP

Beautiful

This is... like Cupcakes on drugs.

It's magnificent.

This is now my #1 torture fic. I wasn't this horrified by 120 days of Blueblood.

I take my hat off to you

Very well done Kaidan nice one on making Lyra kill Vinyl and Octavia as always your awesome! Keep it up! Your story's are fantastic!

3029858 Cupcakes overdoesed on sferoids!

YAHOOOO!

Here we go!

3030032>>3030047

You're back... And... Downvoting Kaidan?

~Skeeter The Lurker

3029685>>3029834
Bestätigt.

3029717 That makes the most sense ever. Twilight, always there to help!

Everyone here is sick. This is starting to get to the limit for me. Like my banner? I have it set to permentally be Lyra and Bon Bon.

i.imgur.com/uCCaUsy.jpg

3030055I guess she didn't read that blog post about making Kaidan mad.

3030131

Eh. She probably did. And got mad in return.

~Skeeter The Lurker

3030032

there is something legitimately wrong with you

3030239 Do you understand what the story we're commenting on is about? And downvoting it decides that Swirl has a problem? We just read a torture fic, nothing out of the ordinary.

3030266 What did I do wrong do deserve a face hoof?

heads home to plot her revenge

hehe, you said plot.

3030267

No, she has a problem because she's an autistic idiot on Skype
it has nothing to do with this

3030319 Oh. Oh, ok. Sorry, I suppose? I'm sorry for meddling?

3030326

it's okay baby i forgive you

Lyra whimpered and limped to the edge of her cage. She stuck her head out a spot where the bars were just wide enough to allow her access to Bon Bon’s pussy. She licked lazily at it.

This needs to have the Sex tag, too.

I can't even say anything witty about this. I'm still not sure if I'm still alive, I can't feel my heartbeat. Then again, I never could. Whatever.
I feel bad for Bon Bon.

Well, that was certainly... something. You do get bonus points for providing a legitimate reason for Bon Bon to flip out.
It is true that Bon Bon may have overreacted a little bit, but at least the why makes sense.

What happened to you writing fics like A Puppet to Her Fame?

What the

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This wasn't dark and tragic enough for you?

As much as I'd love to write something of that quality there are several factors conspiring against me:

1.) Poor physical, mental, and emotional health.
2.) Really shitty job killing my motivation to do anything that isn't playing violent video games.
3.) Having a cold for over a week. It feels like it's almost gone, but then again, it's felt that way for days...

I have stories planned that will surpass Puppet, but I refuse to write them half-assed and thus they sit in Google Docs unfinished until I have the mental focus and attention span to do it right.

In the meantime, clop and torture are too damn easy, and I have to write *something* or I'll lose my drive to write completely.

3030344
True enough, looking back, everything I've written since Puppet to her Fame has been mature sex gore, dark. Lol.

Well written but too ick for my tastes.

Kaiden you neonazi terrorist

3031008 Oh. Oh!

You know it's bad when that happened, especially with the topic you were talking about.

The way you made this story, it sounds like you hate Lyra. but otherwise great story

3031048
She's actually one of my top six ponies. I hate Bon Bon, she is evil, and Lyra deserves better. This fic proves it.

So this is what Lyra did to make her mad so yay gore

You make me sad.

Holy what the fuck.

...

*likes*

3031318
What do you expect from a mare who changes her voice with every episode she talks in?

Wow that was obscenely horrifying great job man.

>reads
Eh, can't say I'm even remotely affected. You did nothing to build up the characters, and relied on the so-called "shock value" of over-focusing on the gore. And the worst part? You even skimmed over that, and made it very much "tell" over "show."

wow, that was fuckin brutal. i'm gonna go eat some vital organs now.

This really didn't need the sex tag... This didn't need to be at all. Usually I enjoy things that are kinda fucked up but this... This goes in the box of shit that is NOT okay, right next to cupcakes and sweet apple massacre. Now I need to go coax my dick back out. Thanks for killing my good friend boner.

3030287 I think that Bon Bon sees revenge as her duty.

tee hee doody

That genital mutilation scene does remind me of chapter 3 of The Maretress

While it's not the best story, it's actually one of two stories on fimfiction that I found really disturbing (since I work in a neurobiology lab, it's not easy to horrify me), to the point it affected my headcannon for Bon Bon.
The other story is actually "A Puppet To Her Fame" (I've never looked at Octavia the same way again).

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A neurobiologist? Awesome! (Even if you don't have the fancy PH. D, you're still going to by My Little Neurobiologist from now on.)

I'm ... glad that you found my fiction so disturbing. Considering this are disturbing for being dark, and not for being "two girls one cup" disgusting, it's pretty awesome. There's just something about turning a pony into a pet... maybe next time it'll rely more on operant conditioning and less on slicing and dicing.

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PhD? Maybe in the future Btw, one day I'll have to write a story inspired by work in lab. This won't end well...

3066257
A pony wanders into a Neurobiology lab and gets dissected? What could go wrong.