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Fluttershy finds a young and scared Pegasus colt in a storm one night. Can she be the mother he so desperately needs?

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Interesting I will follow this story

So far this has a really cute story-line. Something to work on, though, try 'showing' a little more instead of 'telling'. For example:" He was a afraid she was going to drown him. " You could put instead " The widening of his eyes at the sight of the water gave Fluttershy the impression he was afraid of it. When he turned those fear filled orbs on her, it was like he was associating that fear of the water with her. 'He must think I'm going to drown him or something.' The yellow Pegasus's mental grasp of the situation lead to an idea. "Fine. I suppose I'll just have to take a bath with you.". "
:twilightsheepish: I've got this issue myself a bit.

I am glad you decided to post this also on Fimfiction.net. I loved this chapter, and although it is only three into the story, this is my favorite one so far. :pinkiehappy:

So... choppy. I'm sorry to say it. I love the idea, but wow...

*Clicks follow button*

i love it and i got a question when will it not be On Hiatus and more chapters of this story come out

2980241 I'm not to sure when I will update. I'm having trouble on what to write for the next chapter so until further notice this story is on hiatus.:fluttershysad:

2980757 ok and please don't ever forget about this story i love it

2913141 Huh I thought you were involved with this story seeing your stories but whatever. *grabs kraken release button* this will likely be needed later. This story is cute and needs to be continued

I hope you continue this story soon, it's so heartwarming. By the way, what song was Twilight humming to Lightning Twister when she was rocking him? :-)

3046164 Thank you for your kind words I appreciate them. :twilightsmile: If you read my story My Little Spike there will be a video of a song. That song is what Twilight was singing to Lightning Twister.

3046220 Okay, thanks. And also, who would you imagine as the voice of Lightning Twister? :pinkiehappy:

Adorable, but I see a bit of a plot hole. If Lightning's mom died giving birth to him, how did he recognize her appearance and the sound of her voice well enough to be upset by Twilight in the previous chapter? You made it sound as though Lightning had at least been around his mother enough to correlate her with Twilight.

3097272 Maybe there will be a further explanation in a later chapter more about Lightning's mom. Also my friend, another great and heartwarming chapter. Fluttershy is indeed best pony with great maternal instincts. :twilightblush::heart:

3097272 Lightning could have had a picture of his mother to look at.

... okay...
Pinkie Pie, take two!

i love it and yay finally chapter 4 is out and ok

3097272 Maybe he a caring nanny or aunt that he took to calling mommy?

3097755 Agreed, Fluttershy is best pony.

Comment posted by GunsNRoses365 deleted Aug 24th, 2013

3097272 Thank you I'm glad you enjoyed it. I promise the connection between Twilight and Lightning's mother will be revealed next chapter.

3097755 Thank you my friend for your kind words.

3098046 Haha I couldn't have said it better myself.

3098258 why did you not reply to my comment

3099430 I'm sorry I that I didn't I was busy at the moment. I thank you for your kind words and support of this story.

3100063 that ok and your welcome for the kind words and support for this story

Good to see this story is continued! I hope we don't see Lightning's awful father come back, I also like to see to some more interaction with Lightning and Twilight seeing how Twilight resembles his mother. :-)

3100964 Thank you for your kind words my friend. Don't worry you will see more interaction between Twilight and Lightning and you will soon will find out the connection between Twilight and Lightning's mother.

No offense but this sounds alot like a fic I've read before, My Little Hope: Caring is Magic

Comment posted by GunsNRoses365 deleted Sep 8th, 2013

i have a feeling his father is going to try and get him back.....
hmmmm

Had a feeling it was a picture of his mother that reminded him how much Twilight looked like her.

i love it :pinkiehappy: and your welcome for all the love and support of this story

Tear-jerking chapter yet again my friend.:fluttercry: Oh, I wish I could get my hands on that no good excuse for a father of his and wring his neck! :flutterrage: Also, it was sweet, yet sad that Twilight looked like Ligtning's mom. :fluttershysad: Another great chapter, but just one question, being I am a big fan of his, where was Spike though? :fluttershysad:

3113893 Thank you my friend for your knid words. As for spike he was in Canterlot for a few weeks helping Princess Celestia. But don't worry Lightning Twister will soon meet our friend Spike.:moustache::pinkiehappy:

.3113870 Thank you my friend. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :pinkiehappy:

3113546 Your feelings were wise my friend :twilightsmile:

3112825 If that happens there's going to be big trouble.:pinkiegasp:

3114210 Your welcome and i did enjoyed it :pinkiehappy:

... alright, good so far. Keep going

:pinkiehappy: This little colt now has a mother and 5 aunts.:twilightsmile:

I love this story.:heart:

3117822 Thank you I'm glad your enjoying this story. However it's only just begun.:pinkiehappy:

3117822 not to mention 3 fun little cousins:scootangel:

Good job in the story so far :twilightsmile: looking forward for your next update!

Twilight looked down at Twilight and said to him gently and sweetly

twilight just got mobius'd

Comment posted by GunsNRoses365 deleted Sep 5th, 2013

... Nice, but if my writer's intuition is right then something horrible is about to happen, and based off how cute it has been thus far, it's going to be gruesome.:unsuresweetie:

I love this story:heart:
3131326 I hope not but should the father appear he will first get yelled at by :flutterrage:, then have the stuffing bucked out of him by :ajsmug: and :rainbowdetermined2:, and finally with one letter from :twilightsmile: he will be sent to jail by :trollestia: for child abuse.

Other then that any challenges fluttermom has to face will be interesting. Though I hope they aren't gruesome or to horrible.

:heart: I love the new cover art by the way :heart:

:applecry: dah feelz ..... Oliver and Company was my favorite movie as a child, hearing this song with this story ... UG! -starts sobbing-

Very beautiful, heartwarming, and adorable chapter. I wish I was young again, just a child, and hugged by Fluttershy.:twilightblush:

3131315 Haha Thanks! I'm glad I could get some feels out of my audience. :pinkiehappy:

3131326 You never know I guess we'll have to wait and see. :twilightsmile:

3131403 Thank you my friend I'm glad your enjoying it. :pinkiehappy:

3131648 Thanks I'm glad you like the new cover and are enjoying this story. :pinkiehappy:

3131830 Thanks I'm glad I was able to tug some heartstrings with this chapter. Oliver and Company was one of my favorite childhood movies and I felt like Good Company would be a great song to show the love between Fluttershy and Lightning Twister. :twilightsmile:

3132384: Thank you my friend I'm glad your enjoying it. I'm sure Fluttershy would welcome you into a hug with open arms. :yay::twilightsmile:

3133442 Your welcome my friend and yeah i did enjoyed it :pinkiehappy:

3133442 I know she would. She is my favorite pony after all. :yay::twilightblush:

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