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Ever Since Fluttershy adopted him, Lightning Twister's new life couldn't be any better. He has a loving and caring mother, great friends, a special somepony, and a loving family. However his new life is in jeopardy when he becomes the target of a villain nopony ever thought they would see again. Can the main six protect Lightning as well as the rest of Equestria.

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Comments ( 116 )

Wow! I'm loving this story already. My new favorite!

Finally the story is here, great work remember to make more.

Oh, no.:twilightoops::pinkiegasp: If it is who I think it is, this a whole and terrible new low that he is going to. :fluttercry: Poor Lightning, I felt that dream was real to be honest. :fluttershysad: Instantly favoriting this, and look forward to more. :pinkiehappy: I saw a few grammatical errors, but not too big of ones though.

This cannot be good. :twilightoops:

How did he get into the dreamscape? And why is he after Lightning? Why do I know that neither of these questions will be answered until the chapters that reveal them are uploaded?!

3425389 Don't worry all will be revealed in good time. :raritywink: Also for someone reason your comment reminded me of the talking fish head from Spongebob. :rainbowlaugh:

3424709 No it can't :twilightoops:

3424486 Thank you very much. :twilightsmile:

3424463 Thank you very much my friend. Your right there is definitely trouble brewing. I also found some of the grammatical errors and fixed them as well as revised some confusing parts. If you can find anymore errors just send me a private message and I'll fix them right away. :twilightsmile:

3424462 Don't worry my friend the next chapter is already being made. :raritywink:

3424440 Thank you very much my friend. :twilightsmile:

3425686 Multiple rhetorical questions. That's why.

ive waited to long for this man

3426109 I hope I satisfied you with this first chapter. :twilightsmile:

I think I already know Sombra's game, (aside from being yet another piece of his own game of thrones) mess with Lightning you mess with Fluttershy, mess with Fluttershy in this manner she'll become wrathful and her element of Kindness may prove less effective if at all, this in turn compromises the use of the Elements of Harmony as a whole, jeopardizing the defense of Equestria and the Crystal Empire.

Comment posted by Magthere deleted Nov 1st, 2013

good start can't wait for more.

"I'm not strong enough to return yet, but I will be soon enough. And when I do return I will have my revenge and Equestria will be mine. Hahahahahaha!"

And I mustn’t forget about my makeup I want to look my best when I take over.

Creepy ending. :pinkiegasp: Reminds me of Freddy Krueger saying the he isn't strong enough yet to return. :twilightoops: 'He' is stooping to a whole new low and menacing act in invading the dreams of a sweet, innocent little colt like Lightning Twister. :flutterrage: Also, I like that Twilight didn't want to wake Spike up from his nap in the library. Very thoughtful and caring from her. :pinkiehappy: Ooh, looking forward to the next chapter.:twilightblush:

3429437 ...are you Sherlock Holmes' descendant? How the buck did you figure all that out?


No, I'm just a student of History and Political Science, a disciple of Sun Tzu, a fan of George RR Martin, and a follower of The Order of the Stick. In short I am well versed in "The Game of Thrones", the eternal struggle for that shadow on the wall, power. While Mr. Holmes was skilled in deducting clues for personal motivations and smaller scheming, his reasoning skills were not directed at grand imperial schemes, or the making and breaking of nation states.

Due to my studies and George RR Martin's A Song of Ice and Fire series I know how politicking and conquest work. Further I have developed the ability to notice trends and patterns and thinking on the grand strategic level. (Though my short term tactical level decisions could probably be better). Further thanks to The Order of the Stick I can generally spot common literary tropes before their applied, which while not granting me 100 percent accuracy in predictions does increase the probability they are accurate.

However don't count me as correct yet. The story has yet to fully develop.

Sombra i'm calling it now.:fluttershysad: love the story by the way.:heart:

Oh and Sombra you may want to research guerilla warfare and understand the futility of your plans before you execute your maniacal scheme. Raw power alone does not hold together Empires, only by winning over the hearts and minds of the people (Mind Control does not count) can an empire be truly sustained.

3438130 His plans will be revealed in time. :raritywink:

3438066 Thank you my friend. :twilightsmile:

3437249 Actualy the ending line was inspired by Freddy as well as the idea of invading dreams and the title of the story itself. Robert Englund is one of my favorite horror movie actors. I'm also glad that you like the idea of Twilight not waking spike. I wanted to make one sweet moment in the chapter. My next chapter will be a little dark but hopefully much more of a heartwarming chapter. :twilightsmile:

3436924 Your comment made me laugh! :rainbowlaugh:

3436804 Thank You very much. :twilightsmile:

"I'm not strong enough to return yet, but I will be soon enough. And when I do return I will have my revenge and Equestria will be mine. Hahahahahaha!"


3439812 indeed, I think Robert Englund is a legend of the horror franchise, and I don't care about the new actor who played Freddy in the 2009 remake of A Nightmare on Elm Street, because in my opinion no one can play Freddy like Robert could. :rainbowdetermined2: Also, I loved the Spike moment, because it does show that Twilight does care about him. :heart:

3440951 You and me both my friend Robert will forever be Freddy, :rainbowdetermined2: and indeed that moment does show that Twilight cares. Personally I think Twilight cares for Spike more than anything in the world, I just wish the show would show that a little more. :fluttershysad:

I am unworthy to read this great story (pores gasoline in eyes and lights them on fire with a lighter) its that good man bravo good sir bravo

Fantastic! Keep going! :pinkiehappy:

I wonder what King Sombra is up to. Is he planning to weaken Lightning mentally so he can possess him, or is he planning to enshroud all the foals of Ponyville in this never-ending nightmare? Got I hope it is neither, because it would mean not having a great twist. But so far so good.

If anyone could help with Lightning's nightmares, Princess Luna can. :pinkiehappy: I just hope she and every pony else can get down to the bottom of it before it's too late. :fluttershysad:

I wonder why Sombra is after equestrian now. I guess it would make sense if the crystal heart is too powerful for him to ever have a hope of taking over there, but it's a bit of a turn around for him to giving up on the empire. Other than that and one other thing this is making a good bit of sense. He grows strong from fear (the fear of a child, and Lightning no less), and this could probably be how he started his takeover of the empire. Only two things at this point, 1: why is he after the country ruled by the same ponies who have already shown their superior strength, and 2: why just specifically Lightning? Surely there are other easily scared ponies in equestrian? (especially ones not as close to Luna and Celestia)

3445959 I hope she can too. :fluttershysad:

3443571 Thank you my friend :twilightsmile:

3442528 Don't worry his pan will be revealed soon enough :raritywink:

3441432 Thank you my friend I will :twilightsmile:

3441305 Haha thank you very much my friend. :twilightsmile:

hmm.... i feel as if king sombra might captuer scootaloo good chapter tho

*Cries uncontrollably* :fluttercry:
Dammit! How come the second I start reading your stories I cry? You're just that good, I guess. Keep up the great work.
*Goes to the bathroom to grab some toilet paper and wipes his eyes.*


You leave Lightning Twister alone, you fiend! :twilightangry2: :flutterrage:

Seriously though, excellent chapter. :pinkiehappy: Looking forward to what comes next.

Please sir can I have some moar

And so, the plot thickens...from eating so much cake:trollestia:

:pinkiegasp: That evil being scares me, and I don't like how he says that Lightning Twister will be the downfall of not only his family but all of Equestria. :twilightoops::fluttershysad:

You know what? From now on, whenever I read this story, I'll have a box of tissues next to me...as well as some mean words to say about Sombra. *says random curse words to decribe him*

I've been waiting for this :yay:

Also, evil nightmares! *Dun Dun Duuuuun!*

Not good. :pinkiegasp: :pinkiegasp: :pinkiegasp: This is not good. HOW DARE THAT SOMBRA!!! :flutterrage: :flutterrage: :flutterrage:

...... i feel depressed now.....
it hurts.... :raritydespair:

Aw, one of the side effects of sleep deprivation, irritability, easy to divide and conquer when you have your victim lashing out at those around him, even if slightly.

Sombra has played his hand well.

And so Sombra makes his move.

Brace yourselves,.. summer vacation may have just started in Equestria, but Winter is Coming...


" I want to stay home and get some rest.", I'm pretty sure there needs to be a you in there.:twilightblush: Good story none the less.:moustache::moustache::moustache: Have a few spike-staches.

its good its good don't lose this momentum you build.

Oh, man, I got Goosebumps! :twilightoops:

:pinkiegasp: Oh no! :twilightoops: Oh, gosh, I'm scared for Lightning so bad right now. That no good excuse for a king! :flutterrage:

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