• Published 21st Jul 2013
  • 13,909 Views, 580 Comments

A Mother's Love - GunsNRoses365

Fluttershy finds a young and scared Pegasus colt in a storm one night. Can she be the mother he so desperately needs?

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A Sequel Is Confirmed

Hello my friends In the last Chapter I talked about doing a sequel to this story and now I can confirm that I will do one in the future. The story will feature one villain. I don't know when I will work on the sequel but I just wanted to let you know I will do one. With that said I wanted to thank everyone again for the love, support, and friendship. I'll see you all later.

Comments ( 23 )

ok and your welcome once again for the love, support, and friendship and see you later

I have one thing to say. Cover your eardrums, it'll be loud. *Ahem*

Yeesh, RD, calm down

Looking forward to it my friend. :pinkiehappy:

:yay: Yayyy! You're the best!

3290512 you're to ignorant for me to say anything Quick-Bolt. Oh, and yes, I'm back! Happy Halloween!

Comment posted by the space marine brony deleted Oct 28th, 2013

3475770 Well, both the story and Lightning Twister were inspired by "A New Home" :twilightsmile:

Story: 100% :yay:
Idea: 100% :raritystarry:
Spelling: 99.98% :twilightblush:
Romance: 100% :heart:
Scenes: 100% :pinkiehappy:
Cuteness: 100% :rainbowkiss:
Bonding: 100% :ajsmug:
Plot-Kick Bonus (in A Mothers Rage) : 9000 points :trollestia:
Love: 100% :scootangel::unsuresweetie::applecry:


Maybe it's just me. But as much as I'd like to enjoy the story, I just feel the characters are too stilted, and I feel their actions are told to us rather than actually shown.

The characters just don't feel... alive. They feel like they're just robots, saying their lines and going through the stiff motions.

A way to possibly fix it is to make the characters more animated, change up the way they speak so that their personalities come through more, or give us some more details in their thoughts or feeling. Honestly, I wish I could help more, but editing or revising isn't my strong suit.

Much better.

now this story was a real treat to read loved every sec...word of it looking forward to more from you good sir

stay classy:moustache:

You owe me a new laptop. My heart melted all over the keyboard.

6296702 ...? When did I read this more importantly why would I I'm not to pumped for OC things hmmmm...oh well what ever it was we were talking about your probably right and I hope I liked the story (\(*3*)/)

9030586 I was correcting the author's grammar.

Comment posted by Chadbunger deleted Apr 9th, 2019

Yes yes it would.

Ah, oldies but goodies. I very much often find myself coming back to this story to read it. Sure, it's age has definitely shown and there's a lot spelling and grammar issues, but there's so much love and heart put into it to make it that much of an enjoyable read :heart:

I have a question. Which season does this take place in?

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