Due to information from more recent episodes, this story should be viewed as an alternative to the Wonderbolts in the show. The Wonderbolts in this story are half athlete and half rock star rather than a public relations arm of the Equestrian military. Rainbow Dash is trying out for the Wonderbolts where she will compete against nine other ponies from across Equestria for a spot on the team. Her friends in Ponyville try to cope with what her winning or losing will mean. Dash meets an old nemesis at the tryouts and it isn't a competitor. Does he hold a grudge? She also meets an old friend that she will have to beat, a new roommate and strange pony that might be better than she is. And then there are the rest of the competitors who have there own special qualities. Will Rainbow Dash make the team and if she does, is it what she really wants?
Some chapters are funny and some are not, in fact some are pretty rough emotionally. Several relationships are explored and develop over the course of the story.
This has become a very long story indeed and I hope to wrap it up soon.
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Over all a very well written story! I cannot wait for the next chapter. I always love to hear other peoples opinions on what would make a good alternate ending.
2645175 You don't have to wait long. I'm uploading more right now. Hope to get about 7 in tonight
2645206 cool thanks. Imma have a really long night tonight.
Oh Facehoof.
Flutterspy.
Double face hoof when 1 facehoof is not enough for the mane 6's stupidity
I LOVE THIS!
Hurry up with the next chapter!
But seriously, I really like this story. I can't believe it doesn't have more likes.
The number of likes on this story do it no justice whatsoever.
This is by far the best Rainbow Dash-Wonderbolt story I've read. All the characters are believable and have a purpose, and it has been fun following the story thus far.
Also, how the heck are you getting the updates out so fast?
I want to see how this will finish up. Please continue.
2662560 Thank you very much for your kind words. The updates are fast right now because it's been written for quite some time, some pre-season 2 and all pre-season 3. All I have been doing is editing and posting. After the next few chapters it will definitely slow down as the final chapters are only rough drafts. No spoilers but they will deal with a lot of things only mentioned so far. You'll be seeing more of the Mane 6 and their interactions with some of Dash's new friends.
Sorry, but aren't the ponies' tails just hair?
Otherwise, how could Rarity have cut hers off?
Whatever, this story is still brilliant. I am waiting for the next updates with bated breath.
2675887 Yes and no. There is a flesh and bone tail in there but it is much shorter than the surrounding hair. The way Rarity cut hers is pretty accurate as to length of the actual tail. A full size real horse's tail might be around 18" even though the hair might reach the ground.
Rainbow's a boy?
Aside from that, another great chapter. You really seem to understand how the characters should develop. Continue, please.
2689314 Wow that sentence didn't even make sense. I think part of another sentence got stuck in there somehow. There was another one too. I think I was doing some cut and paste about Weathervane and messed it up. Fixed.
Whew, finally finished wading through that. I really like this story, although I feel that you probably should divide into two and make your chapters for the post-tryouts period a separate sequel story, but that's largely up to you.
The only other major criticism is for a problem I see fairly often with some other writers. You occasionally let your verb tenses slip. Like most writers (including myself) you write your narrative using past-tense for your verbs, which is pretty much the norm. However, you occasionally slip into present tense. You might want to read through your future chapters as you post them and look out for this and go back through your previous ones when you have time.
2776282 I thought I got them all but I may have missed some. I sometimes write in a strange way. A rough draft is almost like a script, complete with stage directions and is in present tense, and dialogue which is more or less complete. I then go back and re-write the whole thing. I'll go back and correct anything I find. Thanks for pointing it out and for the fav.
Did you ever watch the "Sky dancers" show that was on in 2005 (or earlier) that show and the old TNMNT was my life.
Gonna B....Wanna B...Kinda...BRILLIANT!
That naming scheme is just a goldmine for laughs. I can imagine the Rich Family working their way up from Kinda to Sorta, Almost, Maybe, Finally, Truly Rich.
You also have an interesting take on Mayor Mare. It's a rare thing to see her characterized as even a mildly...I wanna say corrupt, but that comes off a little too strong for what she did, so I'll go with canny...politician. It's refreshing.
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Thanks for the comment on the naming thing. I threw the part in about the Mayor as being a little on the money grubbing side after the 'Over a Barrel' episode. In general though, a politician wants money flowing into the community. It's good for the citizens and happy citizens are likely to keep the same leader. I think that you may have been right about turning this into a second story. There's almost enough material to double it's size.
We need a picture of the big wall
Fantastic story!
I LOVE this!
I just wish this story gets more views and interest! It deserves it!
I simply cannot wait for the next chapter!
Oh boy...
...This isn't gonna end well.
If they think two proposal's are bad go to shane dawsons channel and look at his mail bag.
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proposals reach 23 by end of chapter. I imagine celebs get some pretty strange s*!t from time to time. Anyway, the next chapter is sort of fun and then it's back to Cloudsdale for Dash. She's going to get in a lot of flight time until Firewing and Frost come to visit the following week.
3183604 Dang irresponsible pegasi! :))
Except for the fact that they named one of the main characters Applejack and then (when she shrank) went on to nickname her Appletini. That said, it's been brought up with the cider episode that, in most countries outside of America, cider is a blanket name for hard cider and it's only really in America that the distinction of hard cider as an alcoholic variety exists. That said, when push comes to shove, I wouldn't worry too much about it. Equines in the real world aren't supposed to throw up (see Applebuck Season), so ponies on the show are frequently doing things that should by physically impossible for real world ponies. It's whatever suits the plot really.
I love this, take all the time you need :D
Well this is a great story and needs ALOT more recognition on here! Although the waits are long its damn worth it considering the quality and length of each chapter
Yay, Keep up the good work. This story really doesn't get the attention it deserves.
I feel like all this money planning is set up for problems for the near future.
Anyway, keep up the good work.
As I said last time, this doesn't get as much love as it should. How this isn't splatted all over Fimfiction i'll never know...
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Thank you very much. RD is really blundering along isn't she? She does run into some trouble but I'm not going to touch on it too much as there are a few much more interesting things I want to do before wrapping this up. With Season Four over this story is quickly becoming dated and there are several more chapters to go.
It depends on how little we're talking. Is she filly-sized or pocket-sized?
This story needs ALOT of recognition
4475487 Thanks very much. Even though I don't have a lot of readers I do appreciate all of you. I never intended it to get this big. I was told in a forum that I should have sex in it. I think I might redo the description box to read 'contains massive amounts of demented sex' just to watch the view count jump.
4478808 the sad thing is that would probably work xD