While cleaning the library Spike finds a secret door that holds an ancient artifact. While investigating they accidentally trigger the device and they change bodies. They are stuck that way until the next day. If Rainbow Dash fails to bring back a special ingredient to make the device work, the change will be permanent. Trouble is she has Fluttershy's body and a long flight ahead of her. Meanwhile the rest of the Mane 6 must do each others jobs since none of them want the rest of the town knowing what happened.
Chapters (1)
@marley...
1. A solid story premise & follow-through; and no glaring grammar, spelling, &/or typo errors. That alone gives you a good score in my literary judgmental eyes.
2. A minor critique... Since you had multiple "chapters", you could have divided them up into separate posted Chapters for easier reading. There is nothing wrong with posting a Complete story in separate Chapter posts in one go.
3. A correction... Pinkie Pie, not Pinky Pie.
4. Overall, I would score your fan-fiction a solid 8 out of 10.
#2 next time
#3 oh crap!
Thanks for the read and the critique>>2639885
An enjoyable story. Keep up the good work. :)
Hmm... I like this. Makes me think of the Season 3 finale, but in a lot more detail (thought not the same switched bodies/cutie marks). At least you didn't make the whole damn thing a musical
You did a pretty decent job with this, though. Some grammar and spelling errors, but that kind of that can't be avoided (at least not completely). I grant this 5/5 Rarity's (I usually do Applejack, but since I already did AJ, I will do second-best pony).
