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I write stories, I hope I'm getting better as I go. Watch out for unfortunate go time and Home Alone, not my best works.

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Rainbow Dash is still trying to build up the nerve to ask Pinkie out when she gets roped into looking after her father for a day. Clyde Pie is a jokester like his daughter, but before he accepts Rainbow Dash as a potential daughter in law he's going to see if she can take a joke. See where Pinkie got her love of pranks from as Clyde puts on a face as stone as his crops.

Chapters (8)
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Oh man so awesome. Clyde is going to drive Dash up the wall in the best way possible:rainbowlaugh:

I've been waiting for someone to write this. :pinkiehappy:

While having a great premise, your story leaves much to be desired in terms of easiness to read. By that, I mean your grammar is awful.

Why must most great stories be flawed by such petty mistakes?

(Clyde is quick to be okay with Pinkie wanting to be with Dash. Considering he's basically Amish...)

I really like Clyde's characterization in this. He feels like the perfect kind of oxymoron that would be able to spawn a character like Pinkie Pie. I also really like the direction that this is going in plot wise as it seems very humorous. I hope that you continue this story and can't wait to read more.

:moustache: A very entertaining read; good job.

I love Clyde, hes a badflank

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Sigh, I thought somebody might say that. Be assured I'll be looking over this chapter again for grammar, but I'm still trying to figure out the correct grammar for stories.
And to everyone else, and cheese deluxe as well, thank you for the praise! I will try and keep this up in the next update!

Tracking. This better not die like half the fics I tracked.

Hey, so Chapter two is now up! I noticed I have more people tracking this story than I usually do, so if anybody is reading please tell me how this second chapter fares. Better, worse, same? Any part you like or dislike? I live to serve so please critique!

This is getting so hilarious. Can't wait to read more! :rainbowlaugh:

Hehe this story is absolutely hilarious! :rainbowlaugh: I love it so much. I can't wait to see it updated :pinkiehappy:

I couldn't stop laughing when Rainbow started dancing :rainbowlaugh:

Clyde Pie: THE Trolldad.

YOUR GRAMMAR. MY EYEEEEEES-

I think you get the point.

It's a good thing that Dash doesn't have any hands to lay on Pinkie.

No, I'm not getting over that!

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Fixed. I completely sympathize with you though, nothing takes me out of a story like that.
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Hey, you're still reading despite my terrible grammar! Hooray! (Well I guess that's going to be tougher now with the eyes and all, but still) To be honest, traditionally I write scripts where grammar is much less of a focus so stories are still pretty new to me. If its not too much to ask, are there any areas that you think have the most mistakes? Like is there a high concentration of errors in dialogue, punctuation, or something? If so please tell me and I'll try and focus on that.
And to everyone who commented, thanks! I will continue to try and achieve the same level of comedy as the fic continues!

Chapter 3 is up. Once again, please comment to tell me how the new chapter is in relation to the quality of the rest of the fic. I love feedback and people who give it.

Hehe Oh man Clyde is such a jerk to Rainbow Dash. It's so awesome. :rainbowlaugh: I can't wait to see how this shapes up. At least Rainbow Dash and Clyde seem to be enjoying each others company for a bit.

Hopefully Pinkie will get her confession figured out soon lol.:pinkiehappy:

Hey, so this story has been edited! Yeah! Expect the story to be edited before being posted from now on, so I'll probably be a bit slower.

I love this!! Classical trolldad story, amazing! :rainbowlaugh:

This is so wrong, putting Dashie through the wringer like this :rainbowlaugh:

Poor, poor Rainbow. I'm enjoying it, though, because I seem to find Rainbow most likable when she's being tortured. I think because it humbles her a bit? I'm not sure. Maybe I'm just a sadistic monster.

I also really like that you're doing some different and unique with Daddy Pie, making him poker-faced prankster. I do hope Pinkie gives him a good lecture or two when all is said and done, though, as Rainbow Dash really doesn't deserve this.

Chapter 5 is up! As always, please let me know if my quality of writing has slipped somehow.
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So wrong, and yet...

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Holy Guacamole! I'm starstruck!
Anywho, don't worry, karma will work it's magic in the end.

:rainbowlaugh: Poor Dash!! Thats some forced and unwanted makeover that I'm sure anyone like her would never want to be appart of.

Pinkie becoming scared of approching makeover Dash is also really adorible.:pinkiesmile:

Dammit. I actually laughed out loud at the ending with Gummy.

Poor Gummy. I want to give him some of my gummy bears.

Clyde: Finally a story about me!
Gummy: NOPE

seems familiar? Like Applejack and Derpy in the Last Roundup?

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Oh, pfft, "starstruck."

I owe you a good, long review for "Not So Random After All," by the way, but just haven't had time as of yet. Sorry about that. Will do so soon, though--I really love that story.

ANYWAYS! So, this chapter, Gummy clearly stole the show at the end. That was very, very funny. I'm really digging the ridiculous Gummy subplot.

Also, I am now wondering if Papa Pie is actually HELPING Rainbow to an extent. He made Rainbow all purty, he's gonna teach her how to bake a pie ... is ... is he going to set Rainbow up on a DATE with Pinkie? Like, "Here, take back your friend (and huge crush) ... oh, will you look at that! Rainbow's looking mighty fine right now, and she baked you a pie. Huh." And then he absents himself before the make-outs happen.

I dunno! All I can say is, I'm enjoying the journey, and you'd BEST deliver some good RainbowPie at the end as the two of them have been apart for almost the entire story. :pinkiesad2:

In other news, I really, really like the dynamic that Clyde has with both Rarity and Sweetie Belle. I think Rarity's family and Pinkie's family being old friends isn't something that's been done before, and I think it's a neat idea. Especially like Sweetie and Clyde together. Aww.

Minor critiques: There's some stuff that isn't capitalized that should be, some confusion of "you're" and "your," and the such. Nothing a good editor couldn't fix right up, though, and it hasn't distracted from my enjoyment of the story.

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Not So Random After All? I would love a review for that, especially if you liked it even with the atrocious self-editing! Also, thanks for the input, and there will be some RainbowPie at some point.

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I aim to please. (Also, starstruck twice over!)

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If you think that's adorable, just wait!

Poor Pinkie. :pinkiesad2: that's got to be really hard. Well at least she has Rainbow Dash to make her feel better :raritywink:

Aw man, I wanna see Gummy's epic journey across town!

As always, I think your great strength is humor. Not only is this story consistently funny, it's funny in different ways, ranging from the wry to the zany and mad-cap. In particular, I enjoyed:

"you walk into town smelling like France rolled up into a pegasus."

"Rainbow Dash looked like a homeless pony, and not an exactly bright one either."

"She felt her right eyelid shiver; Mr. Cake was going to yell again."

Also, when PINKIE PIE thinks you're acting weird, you know you've hit rock bottom.

This was both funny and "d'awww":

"What she needed was a pony currently cursing a pile of mud across town."

I like how when Pinkie's well-being is at state, Clyde immediately drops the pranking and is all, "It's time to get serious. Time to bring in the pegasus."

Since you asked, I wouldn't say that there's been a drop in quality in this chapter, but the pacing did seem rather too fast to me. I wonder if it wouldn't have worked better if you'd split this into two different chapters and expanded the "Rainbow bakes a pie" and "Clyde leaves Rainbow to cheer up Pinkie" sections.

Looking forward to the next chapter! :twilightsmile:

It was so awesome...so very very awesome. Great story!

Hmm an epilogue huh? Bring it!

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Thanks! And also thanks for your constant support during the story. You definitely gav me a reason to keep writing this.
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I shall.

Trolldad extreme. Simply epic :rainbowlaugh:

hahaa, I feel so sorry for Applejack now xD
This story was a blast! I enjoyed every minute of it :rainbowkiss:

Applejack will have a heartattack. I am most pleased:rainbowlaugh:

"Rainbow could see it all crumble, and that was when she snapped.

Specifically, she snapped back from all the pressure being put on her, clouding her judgement."

This was Rainbow's Crowning Moment of Awesome, and I loved it. Nicely played. I felt like this chapter was a bit fast-paced, too, but not as fast-paced as the previous chapter.

I enjoy the dynamic between Clyde, Pinkie, and Rainbow here--it's nice that Clyde and Rainbow made up. I was amused by the reference to the extended theme song (and having it be a poem that Twilight wrote) as well as Rainbow getting pay-back against Applejack. Those were both nice touches. I do wonder if the prank against Twilight was a bit mean for Pinkie's tastes--she made a big deal in "Griffon the Brush-Off" about only doing pranks where everyone ended up laughing.

Also, one small thing:

"It was now Pinkie's turn to speak. 'Hah, no silly! Clyde just helped us teach you a lesson ...'" Shouldn't Pinkie be calling him Dad or Daddy instead of Clyde?

Overall, this was a really nice, light-hearted read. More comedy than romance, but there's nothing wrong with that. Plus, Clyde Pie finally gets to have a personality! :pinkiehappy:

309643 Thank you, I will definitely be using "simply epic" to describe myself from now on.

309837 Ahh, Applejack had it coming. Also, you don't know how much I enjoy that comment.

311050 :rainbowlaugh:, we'll see.

313686 I actually think that the prank here wasn't completely fun and games. Saying something is as easy as Pinkie Pie, Twilight should know better (She didn't mean it, but she still said it.). I feel like Rainbow would do something for her in her honour, so she called up Clyde.

I fixed the Clyde part, and thank you for your comments. They were always a blast and helpful, and that goes out to everyone who commented at all. I couldn't have done it without you guys.

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It makes more sense to me if I think of it as more of a Dash prank than as a Pinkie prank. Rainbow's a bit more mean-spirited than Pinkie is.

Hah! that was funny and it's nice to see a different take on Pinkie's family, and a neat twist on the start of a PinkieDash relationship.

Interdasting. Sounds like an actual episode, except for the lesbians.
Must read later.

Clyde- Element of Not Impressed.

Did I see a Mormon joke in there? I liked it!

This is hilarious! I love Clyde!

Haha! The last lines of Clyde were hilarious! I've always imagined that Dash couldn't help but stare at Pinkie's rump during a conversation. The humor is hilarious and if there were any grammar mistakes, I didn't see them, nor would I really mind.

Oh if only we could see AJ get pranked by Clude and Dash with this. It would be comedy gold!

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