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This account is no longer in use. I'm leaving it up so people can read my stuff. If you need to contact me, send an email to dawnfade@gmail.com


Rainbow Dash is having trouble coming to terms with something about herself and seeks the help of her friends.

Contains ponies with non-hetero sexualities. You have been forewarned.

Chapters (9)
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Comments ( 230 )

Seems nice so far, keep it up

This outta be good

hmmmmmmmmmm, tracking techniques initiate
*presses tracking button*
this is turning out good, keep uploading new material

I really wish I had something useful to say, but I don't, so...

Great work so far! Can't wait for more!

more please!!!:rainbowkiss::rainbowwild:

4/5. I think Dash's vocabulary is a little larger than your fic implies, but eh.

Thank you, will post more soon :)
It's gotten a good reception on both Deviantart and FanFiction.net, so I think you will like it too.
Your tracking techniques are impressive! More on the way :)
Don't worry, plenty more coming.
Yeah, I wondered if I made her sound a bit stupid. But really, she seems like she would be more interested in sports and flying than expanding her vocabulary.

You said it was all written....any chance of more now?

I quite like the story. I think most of the cast is in character, but I get the feeling that Rainbow Dash is so in denial she can't see how to get out or is completely oblivious. The evidence in your story suggests the latter, which does not bode well for her intelligent. Still, this is a well-written piece of work, and I am eagerly looking forward to the rest of it.

Wow, I can relate to this story soooo much.
You did a really great job on the first chapter.
keep up the good work. :pinkiesmile:

Great story, Tracked :pinkiehappy:

I'm pacing it out over several days. I posted two chapters up front to get it started and see if it got interest.
Glad you're enjoying it. I would say that Rainbow Dash isn't thinking straight due to her confused emotional state.
You can relate to this? I'd love to hear about your experience! Plenty more of this story to go :)

82863 one can be interested in sports and such and still have a decent vocabulary. the words you used would actually be common for a weatherpony, or so i would think. 'quarantine a storm' or 'quarantine those clouds.' as for clarify, it's a common enough word.

also, i think Dash is a bit more knowledgeable than she lets on but her bull headedness gets ahead of her.

My only complaint is the names. Adam and steven don't really seem like pony names.

I agree with one of the other posters. Rainbowdash seems downright stupid. In the show, she doesn't find any of reading interesting, but she does have a decent vocabulary and doesn't regard twilight as somebody who knows everything.:rainbowhuh:

You both raise good points. However I can assure you that it gets better. If you haven't been put off this story by my portrayal of Rainbow Dash, the next chapter will be posted tomorrow.
Hahaha yes, I agree. I didn't bother changing them because it's such a small part of the story.

nice update...lets see whats going to happen next, shall we audience?

Huh. That wasn't a bad chapter, though RD went from "What is wrong with me?" To "I like mares and am scared about it" really quickly, a bit too quickly in my opinion. Everything else seemed fine, and I'm glad to see a fic in which Pinkie is both sane and not the answer to everything.

can't waif for more. how regularly are you going to update the story because I need more!:rainbowwild:

Updates will resume after Christmas :)

Much better than the previous chapters. Rainbow seems less blond cheerleader intelligence, and now seems to be something more fitting. Intelligent, but a bit lazy.

MOAAAAR!!!! :rainbowwild:

Much better than the previous chapters. Rainbow seems less blond cheerleader intelligence, and now seems to be something more fitting. Intelligent, but a bit lazy.

It is after Christmas now...update:fluttershysad::fluttershysad:?

It is after Christmas now...update:fluttershysad::fluttershysad:?

It's still Christmas here in Australia. Tell you what, if I'm still awake in a couple of hours I'll post the next chapter.

oooooh, :)
happy hearths warming everypony

Interesting story. I'm to tired to really go all out in my comment, but I like what's here so far.

If I should go with something, then I advice you to show a bit more of how the world perceives colt cuddlers and fillyfoolers. As it is, it's hard to really figure out why Dash is so worried about it, since we don't know what "your average pony" thinks of such things.

Also: "You're a lot smarter than you look, Soarin".
That's not a compliment. Might want to change it for something where Dash doesn't insult a famous Wonderbolt ;). (It's a comment that's perfectly fine among good friends and family, but not really something you'd say to an acquaintance.)

I hope Rainbow gets with Twilight.

I agree!

yah i think this is twidash i hope

It improves each chapter.

Bi Soarin':rainbowhuh:

I can go with that:rainbowwild::rainbowkiss:

Soarin' just got 200% cooler

I may not be the best judge of stories but this is amazingly awesome in my opinion. You sir, belong in my favoroutes list. :rainbowkiss:


There aren't any brakes on the shipping train? I'm confused :rainbowhuh:

Lol, shipping train.

An unexpected turn of events! :pinkiegasp:


Ok... So, Rainbow suddenly decides she likes girls, and because of that she can't stop herself from acting as an idiot around her friend and starts repeatedly kissing her?

That's... Pretty odd behaviour no matter how confused she might feel right now. Mind you, if this fic had "cloppy" intentions I could have understood it, but as it is, it's just weird. Dash might not be a paragon of self control, but this was just pathetic. (And about as far away from "cool" as you could ever get.)

Just my opinions of course, you write it however you feel is best.

There *are* brakes, it's just that the poor guy who's supposed to run along the roof to engage them fell off about three twists ago! :pinkiehappy:

theres no brakes on the shipping train?
so this is going to continue like forever?
until like chapter 1000000000 or something?

The way this story transitions into Applejack's story is reminiscent of Stephen King's It :D

I wouldn't say she 'suddenly' likes mares, the first chapter makes it clear she's been slowly realizing it for a while. As for her apparent lack of self-control, I based that on a situation my gay friend unthinkingly created with me. I won't get into details, but I firmly believe that some people, when in a certain situation, can lose control of their actions and do some pretty uncharacteristic things.
Hahaha the bronies on DeviantArt would like me to somehow continue it, but I must say it only goes for eight chapters. If it makes you feel better, they liked the ending. Hopefully the folks here will too :)
That's actually one of my favourite books of all time ;)

Hey, it is kind of similar to Steven King's flashback sequences! ...There should be an It/MLP crossover. Someone should do that.

But about the actual story...
I'm quite enjoying it so far! I'm not sure how I feel about there being bigots in Eguestria, but I suppose if there are villainous embodiments of chaos, there can be other bad things, too. And no, the shipping train has no brakes. And it's going downhill. Fast.

Hmm... an It/MLP crossover... would I get horribly sued for that?
Also I'm happy you're enjoying the story :)

I can see it now.

7 friends; Rainbow Dash, Pinkie Pie, Twilight Sparkle, Rarity, Applejack, Fluttershy, and, uh, Spike face off against an ancient monster feeding off the populace of Ponyville!

that's it, Rainbow is going to get her own harem now, isn't she?

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