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Shahrazad


What are you doing wasting time reading a bio? Go read good stories. Isn't that what you're here for?

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What starts as a simple wager before Hearts and Hooves day turns into something much greater than Rainbow Dash ever expected. But everypony has a past, and that past can come back to haunt you at the worst times.

This story is dedicated to anyone who had their heart broken...and found the strength to move on anyway.

Chapters (8)
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Comments ( 69 )

Ooh la la! This looks like yet another interesting SoarinDash story, with rebound? Following. :rainbowkiss:

lookin' gooood so far! Totally following this :yay:

That was beautiful. So vivid. And they were doing it in front of the foals. lawl. :rainbowwild:

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Thank you, I try to "paint a picture with words." And to be clear, they weren't "doing it" they might have just been nuzzling each other a bit.
:trixieshiftleft:
:trixieshiftright:
or maybe something a bit more.

maybe...maybe not....:pinkiegasp:

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Of course by "it" I meant kissing. :twilightblush:

But if Pinkie hadn't walked in...:rainbowkiss:

While I didn't enjoy your rendition of Soarin.... I felt that he was far too moody and it kind of ruined the fic. That and I don't feel Dash was written perfectly either.

That being said, I do think it was a good fic. It flowed well and was fairly entertaining. I'm disappointed at the lack of conclusion to Twilights studies, but things like Pinkie Pie were done exceptionally well. The Pink flows well with you. In the end though I feel as if it was lacking a certain something.... I'm not sure, but it doesn't feel like the story has concluded, but rather it's just beginning. I think you could extend this out a little bit and make it still entertaining. Maybe let us in on more of Spitfire and Twilights thoughts.

In Summary
Good Story, Fairly average characterization (easily the weak point) but the stuff with Pinkie was great. If this was a continuous fic, the feeling of wanting more would be amazing. 6/10 (With 5 being average and not 7)

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thanks, these are the sorts of comments that REALLY help me.

I wanted to keep the story focused and that didn't leave much room for Dashie, but I already wrote a fic about her so I didn't feel like I cheated her. I actually did have a scene with Twilight trying to get a date and failing horribly, but it just didn't move the story forward and I felt like it was already long enough what with the flashbacks and all so it hit the cutting room floor. It's so hard to write everything I want to say and still be concise. I'm sorry if you feel like it should keep going, I don't plan on writing another chapter to this one any time soon (but I'm not out of ideas just yet so I hope you stick around!).

And yes, scenes with the pink one make my brain itch. She's so hard to write well, but if done poorly its just...:pinkiesick:

It's... Complete?!
Rainbow Dash: MY LIFE IS RUINED!!
You should totally make a sequel!
Overall, awesome. Enough information to not flood the story, but to be just right. Nothing important to change in grammar and spelling, and overall...
I give you 10 Dashes! :rainbowkiss: :rainbowkiss: :rainbowkiss: :rainbowkiss: :rainbowkiss: :rainbowkiss: :rainbowkiss: :rainbowkiss: :rainbowkiss: :rainbowkiss: :D
Pleaseohpleaseohplease make a sequel...:raritydespair:

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ANOTHER one?

hmmm...:applejackunsure: must be the romance tag that brings all the ponies to this story. :twilightsheepish:

I am currently writing a new story which I hope to post in the next day or two, and I am working on the next TWO stories after that, its been poni poni poni for me all day every day 1000+ words a day. :ajsleepy:

But since the crowd is asking for it...maybe after those get posted? I reread this story and now that I think about it there might be ONE more chapter...maybe :scootangel:

Huzzah, another good Soarindash fic (a thing this place desperately lacks). You seem to be aware of things I like and keep drawing me in.

Pros: It seems realistic. Not all 'WUV YOU' in the first few minutes and the character develop their relationship well for such a short story.

The bad: I feel this is a bit short. There's a lot going on and not much space. While short stories are fantastic, you can't have so many things happening otherwise you loose the 'meat' of your story. While some bits are good I really think this story could have benefited from another chapter just to spread things out a little.

Secondly, Soarin moodiness killed the story a little, still good, but I felt it was a tad overdone. This also fits into what I said above, you probably could have condensed his moochy-ness a bit and still gotten the same effect.

But at the end of the day, this is your story so don't let me tell you how to write them.

Overall, I enjoyed reading it and that's what really matters.
Keep this up and I might have another author to add to my watch lists.

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ok, the crowd hath spoken. I'm definitely going to do another chapter to this story at some point, but I have...lemme count...5 more stories already in various stages of completion (read: not even close to done) and I STILL have a few ideas floating around in my head.

*sigh* well it's almost time for me to write my 1000+ words or so tonight, maybe I'll work on this one...:scootangel:

Oh boy. Oh boy oh boy oh boy. Fleur's got something properly dodgy going on there, and I have a sneaking suspicion that it's gonna involve Dash at some point... I love it! :rainbowdetermined2:

Looking forward to your next chapter already!

Fleur, you cunning little bitch :ajbemused:

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So you might have noticed I posted a new chapter :twilightsheepish:. I started writing another chapter to Sweet N' Spicy and before you know it, I had 25k words written. This would be back in Feb. :rainbowderp: It took me a long time to find an editor. Now that I have I am happy with the results.:pinkiehappy:

Long story short: Sweet N' Spicy is finished, there will be no more delays unless my internets go down :pinkiecrazy: (knock on wood). Expect another chapter on Saturday!

A SoarinDash fic? That's featured?! I must look at this specimen immediately.

That was like a witch hunt for filly-foolers. Some friends!

Totally saw all that coming, but then again, we were kinda MEANT to see that coming, so... X3

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4:00pm yesterday: Hmm, friends should be here in 2 min. Gotta post the next chapter of Sweet N' Spicy then hang out and eat pizza. Should be a good day.

midnight: *friends leave* *zzzzz*

This morning: :yay: Sunday morning with nothing to do, time for ponies! ??? Why does my social alert show 38 new messages? *read* What do you mean featured? That would mean... :pinkiegasp:

Well, I don't see it up in the featured box now. But even if it was there for a nanosecond, I'm flattered, thank you everypony. I do hope you enjoy the story. Next chapter should be posted next Saturday... :raritywink:

:pinkiegasp: That was awesome! Soarin' still cares!
I bet Fleur had something to do with the whole newspaper thing though... :rainbowwild:

Soarin attack! I'm not sure I like his tone! :rainbowderp:

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Obvi. Although Now I'm curious as to what exactly they discussed in that hotel room, other then the whole filly-fooling thing. But that doesn't change the fact that Soarin's been an ass all chapter. He's got some serious 'splaining to do.

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Right you are. I thought about having a whole scene where she gets a journalist to post the story but seeing the aftermath with Spitfire and Fleetfoot was more fun.

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Oh I think you're going to like the next chapter in that case.

I'm gonna be a super busy next weekend but I'm going to figure out a way to post the next chapter on Saturday. Can't leave the bronies hangin'!

2600131 Yes, I think the way you did it was so much better! :rainbowlaugh:

~Oh mai~

That was certainly... Shocking. Ish. I suppose we should have known Spitty would figure it out.

I love a steamy secret relationship, as brief as it was here. :rainbowwild: Took me a while to wrap my head around that situation with the flashbacks and all.!

That or she saw the hickeys.

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ha your probably right, or dash is a screamer?

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I'm glad you liked it. Next chapter should wrap everything up.

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Well there was lots of screaming in the hotel room, that's what happens during a heated argument. :pinkiehappy:

2633498 no i mean sh is a screamer... if you know what i mean

... But... Vinyl never said who it was she kissed, so how is that revenge? :rainbowhuh: (I mean, never implied that it Fleur was a filly-fooler, so how is that revenge? Are they counting on Photo Finish to tell someone, or... ? )

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She's dedicated the song to Fleur. It isn't the same as outright saying it, but when it comes to rumors sometimes that's all you have to do. Celebrities are particularly vulnerable to that sort of thing.

Spicy cab driver? What are you getting at? :rainbowkiss:

2668213 ... Ba-derp. I blame Brian. Too tired to think properly. :twilightblush:

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:rainbowderp: Oh my no, it's not an auto carriage. The stallion pulling it isn't the one speaking. That would be: :rainbowdetermined2: somepony else. I guess I didn't make that clear, I'll keep that in mind now that I'm editing my next story.

Ever seen a pony do a crotch cross chop?

2668416 Oh yeah, I forgot that vehicles worked that way in Equestria, like horse-drawn carriages. I was thinking of a car. I thought that dash was cross-dressing as the cabby, lol. :rainbowlaugh:

And they had their doubts about her....

Oh how sweet revenge is :scootangel: great story, soarindash is awesome and you've made it 20% cooler for me :pinkiehappy:

Wait....Is Dash Dating Soarin Yet or not I skip a couple paragraphs :moustache:

This is 1 of the Best Soarin Dash I have ever read:rainbowwild:

Wow. What great friends Rainbow has! :facehoof:

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