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Everypony has secrets, and Applejack is no different. Apple Bloom's looking for answers only her older sister can give, but Applejack doesn't want to talk. If her secrets came to light, she fears they could crush the filly who looks up to her with nothing short of admiration.

Cover image by latecustomer. Story inspired by image.

Featured on Equestria Daily on Nov. 11, 2012.

See also this song, which was featured on Equestria Daily on June 27 and inspired by this story.

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Comments ( 115 )

Incomplete? Looks pretty complete to me.

This is a nice tale; people can blame themselves for things that aren't their faults or are not their fault in the way they think. We are all our own fiercest and most merciless critics. All I can say is that Pa Apple would never have been able to live with himself if Applejack had died - he would probably have been satisfied with the exchange.

I'm not good at giving reviews so, you'll have to settle for: Awesome story, bro!
have a dovahfinn

1443933 Whoops. Forgot to change that.

1444505 Drat. Now I don't get to wonder how you'd add to something so well written. :twilightsmile:

That is all.

That picture draws you in...

Glad to see you put this up after all dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra2.png

1444768 Hey, thanks for reading it. :twilightsmile:

Thank you. This was a beautifully sad story.
This is what I needed to read today. I have finally decided to do my own story on AJ's past with her father.
It's inspiration is the song The Living Years by Mike and the Mechanics.

1445093 You mean I've inspired someone? :pinkiegasp:

Best. Day. EVAR!

Thank you for your comment. Good luck with your story! :twilightsmile:

I love this story!! :pinkiehappy:

Very nice story, it meshed well with the episodes.
I like the introduction that helps establish her inner conflict, and the theme of her brushing her hair, almost compulsively, as if she is trying to "cleanse" herself—it was very vivid.
On a technical note, the use of italics made it easier to follow the flashback sections and I appreciated that.

wow this incredibly good :fluttercry:

Such a sad story:fluttercry:
But a well writen one:twilightsmile:
Keep at it

I was going to study. Guess I'm going to shed a few manly tears instead.


Thanks everyone! :twilightsmile:

Excellent. Simply excellent.

1523700 I'm glad you enjoyed it. :twilightsmile:

MAH FEELS! Defenitly going in my favs :twilightsmile:

1549482 Yay feels! :twilightsmile: Thanks for the fave!

A person feelin' bad about oneself fer doin' the things they're not supposed ta do, tha's a shore sign of a good person.
Honesty begets responsibility, and those who follow responsibilities for themselves and others, we call them "dependable," sugarcube.


Faved and followed for the best pony :ajsmug:

The feels were unleashed.:eeyup:

I have a love-hate relationship with sad stories.
I love them because they have to be extremely well-written to get the reader to feel something, and this is very well written. Sad stories are always my favorite stories simply because they are always SO well written. Of course, with that...
I just feel sad and depressed the rest of the day. However, for some reason the bittersweet stories like MLD and this story here always get me the most. But sometimes I need a sad feel. I was overdue for one, then I read this.
Great work.

I wish we could learn what happened to Applejack's mom, like a sequel about her hair ribbons or something.

Amazing and heart warming and tear leaking goodness. I loved it to the core.

Definitely a slice of life alright.

1660721>>1660750>>1661059 Thanks! Glad I could deliver. :ajsmug:

1660978 They accepted this one my first try (with the suggestion that I cut two short sentences at the end, which I did). I was pretty surprised, actually.

Deserves its EQD feature! Nicely told and believable on all fronts.


‘Couse I’m ready!” Applejack paused and raised an eyebrow at him. “You mean the apples, not my cousin, right?” = should this be 'Course ? Hard to tell sometimes when AJ's dialogue is so often written phonetically.

1661794 It is 'Course, it's just the apostrophe tends to get lost in the quote mark: "'

-EDIT- Oh, wait. I see what you're saying. :derpytongue2:

-EDIT2- Fixed!

This reminds me of the start of Private Peaceful, if you've ever read that book.

1662201 I haven't. Who wrote it?

I'm at a loss of words with just how good this story is. I feel sad now :ajsleepy: , sad in a good way.

Holy shit this was on Equestria Daily!!!!

1662204 A book by a fellow named Michael Morpurgo, a lot or schools in Ireland do books by him.
One of Spielberg's latest movies, War Horse, is the film version of his book of the same name.

But anyway, Private Peaceful follows around 7-8 hours of World War I Pvt. Thomas "Tommo" Peaceful, reliving his memories of his life so far, from his childhood in his village in England to the last few months in the trenches.

The first few pages tell us how Tommo has never forgiven himself after his father's death. His dad was a woodcutter and he would go out with him sometimes. At age 5 when chasing butterflies he hears a noise coming behind him and sees a large oak tree crashing down. Scared stiff he freezes in place and his dad catches him and throws him. He wakes up to find his dad dead with his nose bleeding and his cold finger pointing towards Tommo. With this action he has blamed himself for the death. We can see as he was a small child it must have seemed as if he could have saved his father, or got out of the way.

Quite a good and enjoyable read, the feels will hit you at the end of the book!

WTF: What The Feels. :fluttershyouch:

... vikings dont cry... vikings dont cry... *wipes eyes with baby seal* DAWWWWWWWWWWW:fluttercry::fluttershbad::raritycry:

This is a wonderfully well written story. :raritycry::fluttercry::pinkiesad2: Sad but very well written.


Thanks! :twilightsmile:

Supremely Awesome!

Only four things summarize what this brought me to...

At first, I was like: :rainbowkiss: Yay, an AJ fic!
Then, I was like: :rainbowderp: Holy crap, flashback time.
Then, I was like: :pinkiegasp: Shit just got real.
Then, I was like: :fluttercry: DON'T CRY DON'T CRY DON'T CRY

If this doesn't get featured, I'm suing somebody.



Thanks for the comment. :twilightsmile:


I hate those laser beams of love. They make me feel all... happy! :twilightangry2:

It sounds a lot like her mother died of complications after birth. This is a sad story with a happy ending. I was getting the feels the whole story!:applecry:

1668679 Thanks! Glad I did my job well. :twilightsmile:

You know, it's funny. I had an idea extremely similar to this story a while ago, with the exact same title (I mention it here). I don't think I could have pulled this off any better, however. Marvelously done.

I picked up on something interesting--Big Mac is all talkative before Pa dies. Is this intentional? If so, I commend you. That really is some powerful stuff, and a new look at Mac I haven't seen (even if it is only hinted at).

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