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neutralmilk


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Following the most recent Apple Family Reunion, Applejack finds herself alone in her room with much on her mind. With the star-filled sky as her only witness, she finally has a chance to open up to the two most important ponies in her life: her parents.


Story in Russian: Here!

Special thanks to:
Brony Assasin
Mr. Carnage
Silbern
professorriversong
And this song: Re: Stacks - Bon Iver.

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Comments ( 137 )

Comment.:ajsmug:

Edit:
Great story, the time put into it was well worth it.

Funny thing, I was wondering when the next time I would see or hear "taken aback" used. I didn't expect it to be in a fic. So cool.

Comment posted by Flintlock Spark deleted Feb 25th, 2013

A fantastic read! Nothing felt too drawn out or rushed. I love cheesecake! Great job, Milk!

2176150 Oi! Spoilers! Edit the second part there :derpytongue2:

2179836 There ye go :)

Ay, great story lad :eeyup:

Manly tears. :pinkiesad2:
They have been shed :raritycry: :raritydespair:

I don't always cry at stories.

But when I do it's at family fics :eeyup:

Please, feel free to comment, thumb up and fave! :pinkiehappy:

Awww. :fluttershysad: That ending just killed me. I don't know why, but . . . argghh. Take my feels. :applecry:

You have made me experience feels. Good job. this story gets a favorite.

2202013 Hey glad you liked it!! And thanks for the fave/ thumb :pinkiehappy:

2202025 I favorite stories that I think deserve them, and fics which elicit actual emotions from me are few and far between.:twilightsmile:

Applejack sad fics always make me cry Womanly Tears. :ajsleepy:

Y'know, up until "Apple Family Reunion," I hated the overabundance of "AJ's parents are dead" fanfics and fanart. Now that it's practically canon, I don't mind quite so much.

But man, that ending... The feels are strong in this one.

This honestly made me cry. The song was PERFECT for this. I lost family recently too, and I know these feels... :pinkiesad2:

2202090 Hey thanks! It took a long time to come up with a proper ending here :derpytongue2: Glad you liked it!

Oh my god...tears. TEARS literally shed during the reading of this oneshot! I'm totally faving this. Honestly, everything in this fic was perfect. Not a single line worth changing or anything! Completely and utterly perfect. Well done!

Oh I remember when my dad passed away. Still don't think I'm entirely over it... :pinkiesad2: :ajsleepy:

2202853 Likewise :pinkiesad2: I'd been thinking of him for months and had to do something to work some of these feels off. I'm glad you liked it though :twilightsmile:
2202845 Thank you very much! It's comments like this that make writing totally worthwhile :pinkiehappy:

Just curious, how did Applejack's parents die?

I have to say that this is a really well written fiction. The quote I base all of literature off of is a simple quote by Leo Tolstoy, "Art is not a handicraft, It is the shorthand of emotion". Your fiction portrays loss and the bitterness, anger and resentment after that loss.

It is fictions like yours that caused me to become a Brony and it is fictions like yours that will have me staying with this fandom.

Oh, this is lovely. Too many "Why did you have to die?" stories wallow in sorrow or in guilt, which we tell ourselves are Positive Emotions under the circumstances, and ignore the very real feelings of abandonment and resentment, which perhaps we'd rather not talk about. It's a delicate high wire, but you've walked it beautifully.

2202965 This is the greatest comment ever and it made my day :pinkiehappy: As for how they died, I honestly do not know. The point of the story is her emotions far more than the parents themselves. I imagine ti the way my Father passed (well for AJ's dad anyway), but it's mainly for the reader to decide.
2203208 Thank you very much for this! I love hearing praise like this :rainbowlaugh:

I think I might have been a pre reader/editor, but I forgot to give feedback... crap..

Well, Better late than never!

I really liked it, and I could feel the emotion going on through the story. It was a great idea and it pulled through well. Nice job :D

I will be disappoint if this is not featured

KillJoy sent me here and I'm glad he did.

2204407 Killjoy is a good man. And has a great taste in fics :derpytongue2:

This was honestly one of the greatest fics I've ever read. The emotions were so real :fluttercry:
:heart::heart::heart::heart::heart:/ :heart::heart::heart::heart::heart:

:heart: Simply precious. My heart is melted into slush. :fluttercry:
I think I caught a small thing: "Jealously began to muster its way," you mean jealousy?
Also, you use a little too many adverbs. All the 'ly's can get annoying, so try to strengthen your verbs so you don't need as many.
But that doesn't mean it wasn't a good story. It was touching and charming and I enjoyed it very, very much. :twilightsmile:

I'm all sad now.....perfect.....now I can write. :pinkiecrazy:

Thank you for writing such a wonderful fic. I am so touched that you wrote it in memory of your late father. I betcha he's real proud of you for writing this. :pinkiesmile:

For any hardships that come along, just remember: "In the end, it'll always be ok. If it ain't ok, then it ain't the end."

Toodledoo,

Quillin Words

Oh my gosh...what a magical story. Thank you for this. Thank you.

You know a fic is damn good when it has zero thumbs down. Not even the typical "Welp let's keep deh baluns heer durr hurr thumbdown" whelp could possibly dislike something so sweet and heartfelt.

Hats off.

2204819 Corrected and thanks for the feedback! I agree, my writing style could use a bit of work with the adverbs. And I intend to write future fics with that in mind. This one meant far too much for me to try a whole new style, however. Thanks again, and I'm glad you liked it!
2205169 And thanks for keeping it without any thumbs down :pinkiehappy:

That was a truly amazing story, done quite well. Made me go and listen to this

Now, I've been described as emotionless by my friends, but this fic just proved them wrong! This is freaking awesome! I loved the ending! :pinkiesmile:

2179836

it had to more than just a breeze

I'm thinking it should be

it had to be more than just a breeze

Besides that, it was a beautiful story. MUSTACHES! :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

Moustaches in your honor, my dear friend. :moustache:

Ashes to ashes, dust to dust. It may be morbid, but it's true. :ajsleepy:

This isn't the first fic I've seen that explores how Applejack copes with her dead parents, but I will say this is probably one of the best. Applejack's frustration really shines through, especially since what she's frustrated about is something far beyond her control. She can keep asking "Why this?" and "Why that?" until she's blue in the face, but in the end, there really is no answer.

Life throws us all for a loop sometimes, AJ. You just gotta keep bucking and hang in there. But, I think you already know that. :ajsmug:

This was very well done! The first Apple family parents fic I've read, and it was very moving. :)

2206751 Thanks a lot! It took a while and a lot of work, but I'm glad it was this worth it :derpytongue2:
2205989 memecrunch.com/image/4fa16e2d1861336971000f0a.jpg HEY THANKS
2206221 MOUSTACHES ARE AWESOME :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache: Thanks for reading, btw :pinkiehappy:

2202090 It's not just "practically canon", it is canon - Sibsy confirmed on her Twitter that the stars are her dead parents.:fluttershysad:

....Anyone else reminded of The Lion King with that?

You know, the only things that manage to make me cry are consistent panic attacks, the scene in the first pokemon movie where ash gets turned to stone, and sad pony fics. Seriously, I watched Bambi when I was six and I was just looking around at my entire class crying, including the teacher and I was just like 'dafuq, it's a deer'. And this made me cry... DAMN YOU AND YOUR TALENT

I read nearly only sad fics here. Not once has one almost made me tear up:fluttercry:. This is a true masterpiece!:pinkiehappy:

So sweet! I loved it. But...
:ajsmug: As long as I have Applebloom, I don't need anypony else.
:eeyup::fluttershysad::duck::rainbowderp::twilightsheepish::pinkiegasp: What are we, chopped liver?
:ajsmug: Eeyup.

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That was beautiful, author, beautiful. A well-written bit of heartfelt emotion beating the reader over the head like a sledgehammer driving in a railway spike.

Perfection.

Your father wouldn't care the slightest that this story was about cartoon ponies. He would sense your love for him written behind every word, and know how much he meant for you. He would be proud, my friend. He would be very proud.

That was an amazing read. I only saw one teensy mistake.

Its a cutie mark - not a cutiemark

Other than that, an wonderful, heartfelt read.

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