The Cutie Mark Crusaders experiment with a new spell.
Written for the Thousand Word Contest II, under the Experimental category!
Big thanks to ScarredVirtue for checking over this one for me!!
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That was fun!
Hahaha, Sweetie just accidentally called Apple Bloom an idiot and nopony noticed! That innocent little filly!
If it ain't one of Apple Bloom's potion antics, it's one of Sweetie Belle's spell shenanigans that causes the CMCs trouble. Fun short story overall. I liked how you color-coded the text so that we know which Crusader is speaking. I'm not sure how it looks on the site's Bright Mode though (I use Dark Mode specifically). The character dialogue is pretty solid too. Apple Bloom talks like an Apple and so on.
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Glad you thought so!
Truly wonderful, the mind of a child is.
Until that mind takes them a little too far.
this needs a sequel to it! Though i have to wonder what harm could their be in the trio having telepathy between themselves?
That was a good story.
But hey, as far as experimental things go for talented young unicorns, it's definitely better thought out than the likes of, say... Love Poison ever was... or the Want It Need It Spell, if you had someone in mind who can fix it, and is in a good place to do it... also for the fact they're only really affecting themselves here, small pranks aside... and the fact they were all up for it, being the great friends that they are.
Who knows, perhaps it'll become a bit of an inside joke on Sweetie not having the counterspell ready.
A nice little fun fic on "thoughts only" narration; it goes to show some of the story potential for possible shenanigans on "Twilight Time gains gone a bit rogue..." because I can't help but feel the fandom has somewhat missed out in that regard, among other potential aspects.
even if it was kind of also the show's fault her getting better at magic was more-or-less largely relegated to being a background detail with not much bearing on the plot; you could literally blink and miss the Accelero case
it's an interesting story. encourage you to vote
This is so innocent and fun!
This would probably be saddlebags because they're horses. At least I'm pretty sure that's what they did in the actual show and it's certainly what most writers do if they're paying enough attention to remember that the characters aren't humans.
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easy. Twi finds out. Everyone finds out. But no one can reverse it. Then their teacher is puzzling how to give them a test.
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Not gonna lie, that would make for a hilarious sequel idea
A dialogue only story. People never cease to amase me...
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Same.
Another one could be that, as Sweetie Belle tries to remove the spell, she accidentally twists/modifies it into becoming infectious. Fortunately, however, one of the conditions is that the person being infected either has to give informed consent about it, or at the very least would have genuinely given their full consent if they were properly informed. Well, either that, or the conditions mean that the person having to give their informed consent is (for all practical purposes) basically unavoidable.
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Aaaannnnddd just like that, Ponyville is going to be subjected to even bigger amounts of chaos from the CMC’s Shenanigans & Chicanery.
I bet starlight is proud that she got such a tricky spell working, nevermind the details lol
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I too had a thought pop to mind. SMILE would probably LOVE to recruit the CMC when they got older. I imagine having 3 members being able to send thoughts between em would make reporting things much much faster, esp if they have one of them working at the main office of smile itself.
This was a fun little adventure!
This is a really fun fic! Thank you for sharing your writing!
The long description is not very descriptive. It gives me as a potential reader very little information, not to mention copying the short description is just kinda lazy. I have not read this story, and I will not read it, simply because I have no idea what this story is about. All I know is that there is the CMC, and a spell that probably has something to do with minds based on title but that is just speculation on my part. That's not a lot of information. I have no idea whether it is some kind of mind swap spell, fusion spell, or a spell that makes really tall (I said mind involvement was only a speculation). The long description should have definitely been, you know, longer. And don't you dare tell me it's because of spoilers, there is a reason why books have a book blurb on the backside, you know. I am not asking for the plot twist, but for a description of the themes this story is about.
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Why are you booing me? I'm right. Copying the short description into the long one is kinda lazy.
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Because it would've just cost you such an unsurmountable, a truly gargantuan grand total of reading at most 55 words to figure out what was happening, and that's (generously) assuming the second line didn't immediately give it away?
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That's what the description is for... To summarise the plot... So you don't have to start reading it blind...
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The story is 1000 words long. Their description is more than enough to illustrate the plot of the fic. It's not a matter of 6-D's "laziness" it's a matter of your poor reading comprehension.
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The description is about 1% the size of the story. Would you prefer it be 10%? I could have an AI of Samuel L Jackson explain the concept to you if that helps as well. The current desc sets the main characters and the plot of the story quite obviously, alongside the title. It doesn’t need to wax poetic about the themes and implications of the story. It just needs to let you know that someone is doing something.
But… Apple Bloom and Sweetie Belle could have just told Scootaloo using regular words. These aren't really mental magic pranks.
I really liked this, definitely an interesting and unique concept!
hehe
aww good ol’ Scootaloo’s good ol’ Rainbow Dash obsession
that is, indeed, very awesome, and also raises questions about physics!
aww that is so Applejack
i mean she already knows the three are best friends so the natural conclusion is that Apple Bloom told Scootaloo at literally any point in the years they’ve known each other, but it is very CMC to not think of that, adorbs
ahaha love Sweetie Belle causing problems for Rarity
aww even Scootaloo should figure that out! also love that Rarity has three blue diamonds engraved on her door
ahaha
so true, Rarity sure loves fainting
aww Starlight! you shouldn’t be a bad influence on the children!
hehehe, great way to end it. super adorable all around, thank you for writing!
Cute idea, though there’s not much more to say. There are certainly potential complications down the road if it turns out Sweetie’s inexpert casting won’t be easily dispelled, but within the scope of the story as it is, there’s not much that the girls couldn’t accomplish with some walkie-talkies. (Which, to be fair, would still provide some shenanigans in Ponyville.)
All told, nice bit of fun, but nothing to really make it stand out. Still, thank you for the entry.
Happy CMC Day!
This would have been a super fun episode to watch if they had it in FIM. Bravo!