All Starlight Glimmer wanted to do was fly her kite. Then friendship happened.
An entry in A Thousand Words Contest II
Reading by StraightToThePointStudio
I'm older than your average brony, but then I've always enjoyed cartoons. I'm an experienced reviewer, EqD pre-reader, and occasional author.
All Starlight Glimmer wanted to do was fly her kite. Then friendship happened.
An entry in A Thousand Words Contest II
Reading by StraightToThePointStudio
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Hahahahaha booo. I definitely think that was the best response.
As in, a thousand years later!
They couldn't figure out after all that she just wanted alone time with just her kite and her.
Love a bit of dumb wordplay
Ok I enjoyed that.
I swear I was expecting at least one of them to say they just annoyed her for the free trip, and wanted Twi to see if they could just ask next tme.
Being teleported across town can be catching.
they are lucky in Twilight's position I'd have sent: Rarity to Yakyakistan, Pinky to Griffonstone, Applejack to Mainhatten, Derppy to an optometrist, Rainbow to a lecture on insomnia, and Fluttershy to a rabbit sanctuary.
I was really wondering where you were going this, & then at the end you hit me with that?! Bravo lol!
I have two questions how is the swell event and why doesn't she remember that, is this a funny gag or are you hinting at something
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No, it's just a joke. How can she have described it in that much detail if she didn't remember it? Thus it's a paradox, and that suits Pinkie.
understandable reaction
ahaha, love it
hehe, very Starlight solution
ok this is great
so true
really agree with Rares here, that hat was awful! but yes, actually saying that to her would get one teleported across town
love how self-aware Pinkie is about this somehow
and yes this is perfectly Pinkie
if it were any earthpony but Pinkie, i would be afraid for them
ah so that’s where that part was going!
well done with this one, thank you for writing!
Enjoyable concept, but to quote Yahtzee Croshaw, intentionally annoying is still annoying. I can sympathize with Starlight, but the reductive characterization for almost everypony else gets grating after a bit. Plus, the ending tongue twister ends up feeling tacked on.
A lot of comedy is timing and pacing, and the word limit makes getting both right especially challenging here. You gave it a noble effort. Thank you for the entry.
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Here I thought this might be my strongest entry...
I will say comedy is probably the hardest thing to connect on. People generally agree more on what's dramatic or sad or scary than on what's funny. Personally, I don't mind something like a reductive characterization that might be grating over the course of thousands of words, but when the reader knows it's short, you can get away with more... or so I thought. I also have mixed feelings about Pinkie's tongue-twister being tacked on. If I ended on that line, the story would feel like a feghoot, but that's not the punchline. so there's more after it that relates to everything that's happened all along. But then none of the comedies I entered in write-offs ever did well, so I may just be an outlier in what tickles me.