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TittySparkles

TittySparkles is pretty based, writes great porn that I can rub one off to on a weekly basis, and she has no problem telling societies leftie rejects to fuck off. - Anonymous

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KingofSquirrelz
KingofSquirrelz #1 · Sep 20th, 2012 · · 1 · Sunshine and Rainbows ·
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Shit >.> YOU MAKING ME A KIDNAPPER
ASSHOLE
...
+1 and fave

Edit: Dam man, you really need to do somthing about the HUGE block text. and use "Quote"

MIKEANTHONY321
MIKEANTHONY321 #4 · Sep 20th, 2012 · · · Sunshine and Rainbows ·
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I like it. Am I a bad person? :fluttercry:

Dark Lightning
Dark Lightning #5 · Sep 20th, 2012 · · · Sunshine and Rainbows ·
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1307405:
You like it?
ponypic.com/?v=Zw6lV.gif
XD, but really now.....i don't care if you do.

Now this.......just by your user name I'm all: .....................Whoa

MIKEANTHONY321
MIKEANTHONY321 #8 · Sep 21st, 2012 · · · Sunshine and Rainbows ·
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1307467

I wasn't exactly telling YOU that I like it. I was saying to everyone that I like it, because this is the comments section. I'm supposed to give my comment.

Dark Lightning
Dark Lightning #9 · Sep 21st, 2012 · · · Sunshine and Rainbows ·
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1315343
And as I said, I didn't care, and I don't. :3

Qub3d
Qub3d #10 · Sep 22nd, 2012 · · · Sunshine and Rainbows ·
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*FLICK!* the lighter says breaking the silence of the basement. The lighter "says"??? Since when do... nevermind. :facehoof:

Luz
Luz #11 · Sep 22nd, 2012 · · · Sunshine and Rainbows ·
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Okay, here are some errors you got:

> You use asterisks (*) for dialogues
> Incorrect: *You’re not that bad looking. Shame you live out of province…*
> Correct: ''You're not that bad looking, shame you live out of province...''

> Space your dialogues

> Incorrect: *Might as well lurk 4chan for a bit…* you say to yourself as you take another drag from your smoke. You pull up the site and aim for the same board you always go for to find jailbait. Before you do, you rev up those proxies. Last thing you need is to get party van’d. You’ve been to jail on a few occasions for little things being overly drunk, theft, arson, and stuff in your young adult years; but you don’t know how you did it but so far you never got put in for rape or murder. Efficiently was something you prided yourself on. If a mistake was made, you would never make it again. As you’re going for the panel you notice something new. *Pony?* you say to yourself as a new tab greets you on the front page. You stare in confusion. Out of curiosity you open it up. *What the hell is this?* you say as colorful ponies litter the board. You start to recall hearing about this thing over on /b/, though you never followed it. Something about a show for little girls. Suddenly a thread catches your attention.

>Correct:

´´Might as well lurk 4chan for a bit.'' You say to yourself as you take another drag from your smoke.

You pull up the site and aim for the same board you always go for to find jailbait. Before you do, you rev up those proxies. Last thing you need is to get party van’d. You’ve been to jail on a few occasions for little things being overly drunk, theft, arson, and stuff in your young adult years; but you don’t know how you did it but so far, you never got put in for rape or murder. Efficiently was something you prided yourself on. If a mistake was made, you would never make it again. As you’re going for the panel you notice something new.

''Pony?'' you ask to yourself, as a new tab greets you on the front page. You stare in confusion. Out of curiosity you open it up.

''What the hell is this?'' you say as colorful ponies litter the board. You start to recall hearing about this thing over on /b/, though you never followed it. Something about a show for little girls. Suddenly a thread catches your attention.

>Space your paragraphs
>Incorrect:

You both stare in silence. *A-are you a diamond dog?* the horse asks you still looking at you upside down. *A what?* you say confused. The rainbow horse rolls over and stands up. Judging from her size her head comes up just below your gut. *A diamond dog. You know ugly creatures that live underground and hoard gems. Judging from the smell of this place I thought you were one.* She says without sounding like she care while moving her head and looking around. That hit a nerve. *So let me get this straight, you show up in my house and start calling me an ugly creature without even telling me who you are? I could ask what the hell you are. From what I’m seeing you’re a flying horse that looks like someone dropped a bucket of paint on you.* you snap at her. She stops looking around and gives you an angry glare. Suddenly she spreads her little blue wings and floats into the air. *What did you say to me!? I’m not a horse, I’m a Pegasus pony! PE-GA-SUS PON-Y!* She says pushing her face into yours. You can feel her mane brush against your face as she glares at you with saucer panned eyes. *Fine you’re not a horse, but that’s doesn’t tell me why or how you got here.* you say backing up. You see her face release from anger and she calms down. *I don’t know, I was practicing my routine so I could get into the Wonderbolts one day…I was going for a sonic rainboom and then an odd portal opened up and then I ended up here.* She says as she crosses her hooves and flaps her wings. She’s just as confused by this turn of events. *What’s a Wonderbolt?* you ask her not familiar by the word. Her jaw drops and she gives me a worried look. *How do you not know what a Wonderbolt is!? They’re only the greatest flyer in all of Equestria!* She says as her wings start flapping harder. Now you’re getting more confused by this. *Equestria? Isn’t that a place in South Africa?* you answer back while remembering a book you were reading earlier. *What the flying feather are you talking about? Equestria is a land ruled by the two royal sisters.* She says back to you.

>Correct:

You both stare in silence. ''Are you a diamond dog?'' The horse asks you still looking at you upside down. ''What?'' you say confused. The rainbow horse rolls over and stands up. Judging from her size, her head comes up just below your gut.

''A diamond dog. You know ugly creatures that live underground and hoard gems. Judging from the smell of this place I thought you were one.'' She says without sounding like she care while moving her head and looking around. That hit a nerve.

''So let me get this straight, you show up in my house and start calling me an ugly creature without even telling me who you are? I could ask what the hell you are. From what I’m seeing you’re a flying horse that looks like someone dropped a bucket of paint on you.'' you snap at her.

She stops looking around and gives you an angry glare. Suddenly she spreads her little blue wings and floats into the air. ''What did you say about me? I’m not a horse, I’m a Pegasus pony! PE-GA-SUS PON-Y!'' She says pushing her face into yours. You can feel her mane brush against your face as she glares at you with saucer panned eyes. ''

Fine you’re not a horse, but that’s doesn’t tell me why or how you got here.'' you say backing up.

You see her face release from anger and she calms down. ''I don’t know, I was practicing my routine so I could get into the Wonderbolts one day…I was going for a sonic rainboom and then an odd portal opened up and then I ended up here.'' She says as she crosses her hooves and flaps her wings. She’s just as confused by this turn of events.

''What’s a Wonderbolt?'' you ask her not familiar by the word. Her jaw drops and she gives me a worried look.

''How do you not know what a Wonderbolt is!? They’re only the greatest flyers in all of Equestria!'' She says as her wings start flapping harder. Now you’re getting more confused by this.

''Equestria? Isn’t that a place in South Africa?'' you answer back while remembering a book you were reading earlier.

''What the flying feather are you talking about? Equestria is a land ruled by the two royal sisters.'' She says back to you.

>Extra Mistakes:
>Indent Paragraphs
>Comma uses
>Dialogue Spacing and Usage

If you need more help, here are some options:
1. Get an Editor
2. Get an Proof- Reader
3. Use Microsoft Word as your Editor
4. PM me

-|DJ Blitz|, TWE's Med Tempered-

MIKEANTHONY321
MIKEANTHONY321 #13 · Sep 23rd, 2012 · · · Sunshine and Rainbows ·
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1320520

I respect you very much. You're just the kind of person this website needs! :pinkiehappy::rainbowkiss:

Inspectah Dash
Inspectah Dash #15 · Sep 23rd, 2012 · · · Sunshine and Rainbows ·
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Does your keyboard have no quotation mark key?

Inspectah Dash
Inspectah Dash #16 · Sep 23rd, 2012 · · · Sunshine and Rainbows ·
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AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH! A RAPE FIC? WHAT THE FUCK?!?!?! God, if only I could thumbs-down this a thousand times. :flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage:

BrendanandJohn
BrendanandJohn #17 · Sep 23rd, 2012 · · · Sunshine and Rainbows ·
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Alright, let's take a look at this story.

Oh, good lord, the title and you username make me very scared. Coupled with that sad looking Rainbow Dash as a cover picture really puts a knot in my stomach.

I digress however, surely coincidence. Let's get this show on the road.

You're nothing but another human living in the world you're forced to deal with.

As opposed to something else?

Over time you wanted something thrilling and took the idea of kidnapping women for enjoyment. Overtime it got boring, but on one fateful day, something new happens to you....

What... I don't know if this is what people do for enjoyment. It's not exciting, it's fucked up. Right from the get go, you make the making it very difficult to like the main character. Wait, it's me, I'm kidnapping women for enjoyment. I'm an asshole.

And "Overtime"? What, am I getting payed double time for kidnapping people? Also, it gets boring? If this was something you did, toying with other human lives, how does it simply get boring? I'm starting to hope that this event that happens on this "fateful day" is the cops coming in and busting down my door, arresting my ass. Look at that, you make me want to get arrested. That's great.

Just for the record, I don't usually do descriptions, I just felt the need to point out some of my gripes with it.

The dim screen illuminates your darkened room, and the smell of old pizza and soda cans linger in the air.

This right here is a beautiful description... Well, it's setting atmosphere, so I can't really critique it beyond that.

You manage to grab and reach for your cigarettes near the monitor. You open the pack and notice you’re down to your last one. *Better head out soon and restock.* you say to yourself as you take it out and put it to your mouth.

How do you manage to grab and reach for something? Do you turn your hand into a fist before you reach to get it? Shouldn't it be "You reach to grab your lighter"?

Also I noticed that you're using asterisks instead of quotation marks. Why? It looks horrible, was it really so hard to just use quotation marks? Is your keyboard broken?

*FLICK!* the lighter says

And now the lighter is talking. That's amazing...

After it’s lit you put your lighter on the desk and inhale that glorious toxic.

Inhale the glorious toxic what? Toxic fumes? Toxic slime? Just kind of ended the sentence there, but that's what smoking does to you.

*Oooowwwwww…these sticks will kill me yet…*

Holy shit, I've never seen such an obnoxious smoker. I've seen people cough but not go "Ow" for a ridiculously long time and then say "the cigarettes are killing me". Oh, but I forgot, that was me smoking.

*You’re not that bad looking. Shame you live out of province…* you say as you check over a bunch of Facebook profiles of potential victims. It’s been a dry few weeks for you. Usually you could find women fresh for the picking everyday near your city. Maybe it’s because you’ve already taken all the good ones. It’s a shame though; even the good ones get boring after a while. You look up above your computer to your wall and smile. About 15 pictures of women varying from teens to women in their mid-30’s litter it. Each picture has an X crossed into it. All victims, most of them are smart enough to keep their mouth shut, while some…well, let’s just say they ended up being murdered and discarded into a nearby trash burning dump. You weren’t stupid though. You always made sure to clean up the body before you were getting rid of it. Every night before you killed them you always made them shower up and clean themselves down perfectly. There was a struggle, but that was the fun part of it. The more they struggled, the greater the urge to rape them. But you had to be restrained; the body had to be clean of any proof of you on them. The only thing you ever left was either bruised, and/or contusions on their necks. It started out fun for you but soon the fun left. They all just turned into objects to play with, to use and abuse, and to torture as you see fit. Now the rape is boring and you feel empty.

Where do I start with this paragraph? First off, way to just completely make my skin crawl. This is absolutely disgusting, I don't care if this is suppossed to be a dark fic, this is more a mental illness.

Way to be subtle about saying they were murdered to. You just came out and fucking said "Yeah, I killed them", almost as if you were insulting your reader's intelligence. "Yeah, they won't get if I allure to murdering the victims, they're dumb fucks, let me just spell it out." Also, do you have any idea how forensic science works? Forcing someone to shower before you kill them won't make it so the cops can't find you. Oh, and rape too now?

What in the living fuck is going on here? This is horrible so far, but I'm going to continue reading, and maybe if you're serious about this you'll actually take what I have to say into consideration.

*FIND SOMEONE TO RAPE YOU FAGGOT!*

Okay, this is almost humorous. What you meant was "Find someone to rape, you faggot" but instead you made it sound like you need to find someone to rape you.... Look, I'm correcting you on how to persuade yourself to commit sexual assault...

*I’m looking dick, but it’s no fun anymore.* you say rather annoyed to your crotch.*

No, just fucking no. This is getting too fucking weird. It's just so wrong.

Also, the dialogue makes it seems like you look like a dick. Instead of saying "I'm looking good today" it would be "I'm looking dick today".

*Might as well lurk 4chan for a bit…* you say to yourself as you take another drag from your smoke. You pull up the site and aim for the same board you always go for to find jailbait.

I know that 4chan is scary, but not as scary as this fucking story. Seriously, way to make it seem like everyone that goes on 4chan is as creepy as this fuck.

You’ve been to jail on a few occasions for little things being overly drunk, theft, arson, and stuff in your young adult years; but you don’t know how you did it but so far you never got put in for rape or murder.

By the way, it doesn't make it better to point out a massive plot hole in your story. It still makes the story ass.

As you’re going for the panel you notice something new.

Don't use "you're" and other contractions out of dialogue.

*Bunch of fucking autistics…* you grunt out and open the thread to see the other replies for another laugh. You scroll it and see more autistic nonsense

Are you literally trying to make this person an asshole? I've seen GTA characters with more of a conscience than this miserable fuck. Also, don't you mean scroll down?

>RAPE; and hit the submit button. It takes a few minutes before anyone notices but then the thread turns into a shitstorm of people calling you a faggot while others take your idea and start posting >RAPE as well. You laugh. *These fags are easy to troll.*

Do you even know this fandom? That wouldn't exactly be enough for a "shitstorm", I'll tell you that much.

At this point, because this story seems to be too long for it's own good, I'm just going to go over some glaring problems that I find.

That hit a nerve. *So let me get this straight, you show up in my house and start calling me an ugly creature without even telling me who you are? I could ask what the hell you are. From what I’m seeing you’re a flying horse that looks like someone dropped a bucket of paint on you.*

Oh, really?! Really! Are we supposed to feel bad for this horrible waste of maggot food after all we know? And is that really the best insult he can come up with? What kind of paint is that, rainbow paint that gets painted in a perfect rainbow patter? That's awesome, I want that shit.

*What did you say to me!? I’m not a horse, I’m a Pegasus pony! PE-GA-SUS PON-Y!*

I'm surprised, Rainbow Dash seems surprisingly in character as of right now.

*What the flying feather are you talking about? Equestria is a land ruled by the two royal sisters.*

What a boring way to describe Equestria. Really, of all the ways to describe it, that's how she does it?

As she starts for the stairs your eyes are drawn to her rainbow colored tail. You watch it move side to side and she walks away. You also notice that bit of pink barely noticeable but enough to draw you to it. Suddenly it feels like time itself goes into slow motion.

NO! Fucking, NOOOOOO! This... Isn't... Happening!

*WILL YOU STOP STALLING AND FUCKING GET THAT PONY ASS ON TOP OF ME!?*

Is his penis talking to him. It is, isn't it? His dick is talking to him!

Want to know something, I'm done with my detailed review stuff. The rest is just fucked up.

What can I say. The character is fucked up beyond anything else. I hated him. That's always fucking great, you know, when the reader wants a bird of prey to piss acid on him. The story, what there is of it, isn't even unique. Oh boy, Rainbow Dash abuse, never seen that a million times before.

Do you want to know the saddest part about this? I know this isn't a serious story. I could sit here and continue going into detail, but it won't make a lick of difference. While I usually offer my assistance to writers, I'd appreciate you keep me out of this story...

I need to go take shower, reading this story was the equivalent of rolling around in a mixture of cow piss, horse shit, period blood, and dog vomit.

-Love, Fuckfully Yours, Madcat

Evil Homer
Evil Homer #19 · Sep 23rd, 2012 · · · Sunshine and Rainbows ·
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Takes a look at the username.
Takes a look at the Summary.
Takes a look at the gore tag.
Takes a look at the thumbs down.
Takes a look at the comments so far.

Yeah, I'm not even going to bother to read this. This is either a trollfic or was made specifically to be added to the TWE's list.

>Evil Homer - TWE's Tactical Tactless Nuke

Bastler
Bastler #20 · Sep 23rd, 2012 · · · Sunshine and Rainbows ·
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Interesting story, will there be a second chapter?
(I know that the "Incomplete" tag should answer this, but most of this kind of story have never received a second chapter)

1324505

Thank you for mentioning this great list, now I have a lot to read :pinkiecrazy:
It's clearly easier to find interesting fics there than with searching through all storys.
--
Edite:
Misunderstood the list, only found two more interesting storys.

Evil Homer
Evil Homer #21 · Sep 23rd, 2012 · · · Sunshine and Rainbows ·
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1325696

What list are you talking about?

Bastler
Bastler #22 · Sep 23rd, 2012 · · · Sunshine and Rainbows ·
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1326100

The lists from the Train Wreck Explorers Group. At first I thought there were storys with bad topics listed, so I wrote the thanks part of my comment. Later I noticed that they list bad written storys, so nothing interesting for me, because I would only destroy my english (more), when I read too many of them. (I am not good enough in english (english is not my main language) to find errors, so I would memorise them)

Evil Homer
Evil Homer #23 · Sep 23rd, 2012 · · · Sunshine and Rainbows ·
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1326253
Got it.
But you can check out the Padded Room there where we keep good fics to remind ourselves that there are stories out there worth reading.

MIKEANTHONY321
MIKEANTHONY321 #25 · Sep 24th, 2012 · · · Gluttony ·
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The writing quality has vastly improved since the last story. Overall, I'm really starting to enjoy it! The last part, however, was the cruelest and saddest thing I've ever read...I almost cried. :fluttercry::fluttershyouch::fluttershbad:

The Great Derpsby
The Great Derpsby #26 · Sep 24th, 2012 · · · Gluttony ·
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Well, he's moved away from arousing Rainbow with his actions. Which, all things considered, might've been more humiliating and painful than simply abusing her; after all, feeling like your own body is betraying you makes things even worse.

SosukeRyou
SosukeRyou #27 · Sep 24th, 2012 · · 2 · Gluttony ·
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A haiku, in response to your story.
No no no no, no no no, no no.
No no no no no, no.
No no no.
No no no, no no, no.
No no no no no no no no no no.

OneAmongOthers
OneAmongOthers #28 · Sep 24th, 2012 · · 5 · Gluttony ·
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I am amazed trash like this makes it past moderation.. I feel a bit disgusted at this site for allowing it.

boronium
boronium #30 · Sep 25th, 2012 · · · Gluttony ·
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From a friend of mine:

Is is really you RT? It's a bit strange because there is a gap when you post your stories here and on pastebin? Or do you just put this for RT.
What are you doing on failfiction anyway?

If it is you, keep up the good work!

RapeTrain-Express
RapeTrain-Express #31 · Sep 25th, 2012 · · · Gluttony ·
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1336612
I'm the real deal.
I'm just here to see people get mad over a story.

Gavilain
Gavilain #33 · Sep 29th, 2012 · · · Bursting Bubbles ·
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Another story where Rainbow Dash lost her black belt.

MIKEANTHONY321
MIKEANTHONY321 #36 · Sep 30th, 2012 · · · Bursting Bubbles ·
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1360993

I like it!

I know, I know, I'm a really bad person. :fluttercry:
I'm not proud of it, but I'm actually pretty fond of this story. :pinkiesad2:

DOOMRIDER
DOOMRIDER #37 · Oct 4th, 2012 · · · Bursting Bubbles ·
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kudos to you dear writer . you have written a horrific train wreck that i cant stop reading despite my better judgment.
but... if i ever was able to meat the anon I
WOLD SMILE WIDE SHAKE HIS HAND AND PRESSED TO HATE RAPE HIS FACE WITH MY FUCK KNUCKLES!
AND THERE ANTE NO BREAKS ON THIS RAPE TRAIN!!!!!!!!!!
webbikeworld.com/motorcycle-gloves/velocity-gear/ss-metalwear-gloves/ss-metal-wear-glove-knuckles.jpg

Jade Curtiss
Jade Curtiss #38 · Oct 9th, 2012 · · · What is love ·
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i.qkme.me/3pdrs7.jpg

Aww shit! It's Thomas the Rape Train!

MIKEANTHONY321
MIKEANTHONY321 #40 · Oct 9th, 2012 · · · What is love ·
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"Woke up feeling horny as hell...a good source of vitamin Dash fixed that"

I don't think you realize how unbelievably funny I thought that was! :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::pinkiehappy:

TrixLicks
TrixLicks #41 · Oct 9th, 2012 · · · What is love ·
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I'm hoping the rest of the mane 6 turn up nd kick this guys arse.... Fail and then all get raped :pinkiecrazy:

Triv_
Triv_ #42 · Oct 10th, 2012 · · · What is love ·
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I hope the tables get turned on him, I wanna see his reaction to that :pinkiecrazy::rainbowlaugh:

ddiablo2008
ddiablo2008 #43 · Oct 10th, 2012 · · · What is love ·
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I'm surprised that fluttershy isn't in the mix.

nodamnbrakes
nodamnbrakes #44 · Oct 10th, 2012 · · · What is love ·
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It's really hilarious that so many people are getting butthurt about all the ponyrape because most of you have probably fapped to Rainbow Dash and/or Derpy Hooves and clicked on this in the hope of finding a good human/pony clopfic. If this story had taken the turn of Dash and Derpy falling in love with the protagonirapist, you would be like 'that's so erotic, i came' and upvote it. In fact I think most of you would probably lock Rainbow Dash in your shed and rape her every night if you found her in your house one day, except you're all pussies so you'd delude yourselves into believing you were in love. But you will never fulfill your fantasies of having sex with a polychromatic cartoon winged horse, so you sit in your basements and read stories like this one instead.
And you have the gall, the GALL, to be offended by this work of art.
@author: you wouldn't happen to be a fan of mrhappyface, would you? His stories are literary manna.
Also I second what ddiablo2008 said. Needs moar Fluttershy.
Make her eat ground up butterflies or something, lol.

Anyway, this was pretty much my reaction throughout the entire story.

Julie
Julie #45 · Oct 11th, 2012 · · · Gluttony ·
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I feel like a jerk! :fluttercry:
Good story:rainbowkiss:

Julie
Julie #47 · Oct 11th, 2012 · · · Lust ·
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Poor Dashie:fluttercry:

RapeTrain-Express
RapeTrain-Express #48 · Oct 11th, 2012 · · · What is love ·
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1419431
Can't say I'm familiar with his stuff.

dusher4
dusher4 #49 · Oct 12th, 2012 · · · Fear and Hate ·
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“Aww, you too look so cute together. *two

Other than that, nice rapefic. :pinkiecrazy:

Xpep9000
Xpep9000 #50 · Oct 12th, 2012 · · · Fear and Hate ·
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Why do I keep coming back for updates? :rainbowderp:

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