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Ohh, if you can keep this up, this is going to be a fun read.
Intresting to see where this goes.
Absolutely love this. Without a doubt this will be a joy ride. Airy is so perfect as a new form for her. Literally weaponizing the Pony's natural trust against them. Betrayal hurts like no other.
I'm really hoping for her to succeed because it would be a nice twist for once.
oh well well well this is a wonderful start can't wait to see where this goes.
Question: will the ending be happy or bad? or is it going to be a twist ending?
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Oof, pretty early to ask that question. I have already written the ending (it's the stuff between that's still in-progress), so you'll just have to wait and see.
I liked the concept of Airy, too bad she is too underused
Where the Fairy Flies
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If that's intentional, then it's genius.
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Who is the character in the actual series, I don't know anything about it.
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It is clever... from the game's perspective: they used it in the game. I'm just re-using it as a reference.
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Well, the story will at one point contain a short, modified summary that will spoil the entire game (chapter 2) so... if you want to avoid spoilers, I recommend playing the game... or at least watching a walkthrough/cutscenes on youtube.
I get the felling a little fairy will entranse Sombra whit her sweet flies of fancy.
"Knowledge is Power." That is true, but I hope she doesn't forget that Friendship is Power also. Can't gain knowledge or power on her own after all, and saving the Crystal Heart will earn her the friendship of everyone.
Looks like Celestia and Luna are too busy with Equestria to lend their aid to Amore. Could Airy use this to create a wedge between the two nations?
Oooo as a person who has Bravely Default as one of their favorite games of all time, I am SUPER into this story so far!! Even if it's not explicitly Airy, I can already see where this is going and am all for it! So excited to see the next chapters!!
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I think that still falls under the knowledge is power statement since you are using some knowledge to gain power in this case it's by getting trust. Well that is true that she cannot gather power by ourselves. She can easily use the tools that are available to her such as her inherent traits to be able to manipulate her way into getting what she needs/wants.
I really enjoy this concept of a story. Even if I haven't heard of what the game is, it may even get me to play it. And I can't wait to see what happens next with this story
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Well, you're gonna have to wait till tuesday for update. Also, chapter 2's gonna have basically, the entire game plot summarized as "a story" so... feel free to pause your reading and either play the game or watch a walkthrough on youtube. It's a nintendo 3DS game, so...
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I have an old DSi and a switch ðŸ˜
And here we GO!
Yes Airy! A sweet tale of heroism that puts her on a good light. All she needs to do is sweeten the deal by re-fueling this crystal heart with prayers :D
[1] "aligned with the main roads"
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Thanks for noticing, i'll get to fixing these.
Hmmm on the question of asterisks, I personally would love to see some sort of inclusion of them, if you can think of a good place they would fit! I think it could be neat if Airy found a way to reverse engineer them, but also implement a way to make the bearers loyal to her, so that she could give them to her followers and ensure they can't be used against her.
Weather you decide to involve them or not, looking forward to the next chapter!!
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you meant to type "whether" not "weather" . But yeah, i'm still spinning the wheel on whether i should have her make the astericks or not... though i have already planned on HOW they're made (at least her versions).
This looks really promising. I’ll be sure to take a peak and see what’s inside a bit later.
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[1] Missing unit of time.
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[1] Missing, "a".
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[2] Would recommend changing to "the illusion of privacy."
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be unable to
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You mean 'chance' right?
Why do I feel that she's still going to get dressed up as a doll for the young foal.
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How about in the next chapter, you'll just DM the grammar errors? i'll give you permission to send me a message. But thank you, these things slip away from me, even after i try to read the chapter before posting.
Ah, what a butyfull seed that has been planted.
Airy's presence alone is already causing some dominoes to fall earlier than expected. The chaos will be fun to watch.
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Well, we saw how the dominoes fell in the show, with Sombra and Luna, while this will mostly be showing how the dominoes got placed... but yeah, we'll also see the fall, at the end
I've literally written a 5.5k document detailing places, events and important characters for the story. The whole plot is planned out, all i need to do is write the chapters... and while i could simply just throw everything within 50k word story, i'm not gonna: let's give readers like you some meat for those bones.
Curse my ability to read fast!!!!
Also cant wait for the next chapeter :3
True, proper crop rotation can garante good harvests for decades on its own, ad in an erigation system and the only thing stoping it is effectiv scale of opartion.
I do enjoy a bit of interspersed lewdness personally,
I don't mind lewd scenes. But I don't think Airy going to partisapte in anything other then voyeurism.
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Well, beyond a little fingerplay, it wouldn't be Airy doing the lewd.... hmm, gonna add that to the note itself.
I'm in the middle, mainly I don't care... Could be good some spice? Maybe, maybe not, but I leave it to the author to decide
P.S: Good work with the chapter, if I may ask... Maybe I missed it but... Does Airy have any clue about where is Grogar sealed and how is sealed? And does this story follow the comics with Sombra and the Umbrum?
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Well, the prologue establishes that Grogar is trapped in realm of darkness (where he met Airy), that his bell keeps him trapped there (location of he doesn't know). So, the spell he send Airy with to Crystal Empire is basically a brute force method to bypass the need for bell (Grogar won't appear in this story anymore).
As for Sombra.... well, i'll explain that in later chapters. But spoiler alert: it's not what you think it will be.
This is exactly what Airy needed to do. Now she has a stronger hand in helping the empire. There's less suspicion of her now, but she should be careful in thinking of betraying Grogar.
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By "(Grogar won't appear in this story anymore)" does that mean that Airy will not release the seal in this story and you have plans for a sequel?