A journey north along the Neighagra River leads a unicorn and his pegasus wife to the isolated agricultural settlement of Flora Fields. A sudden flood traps some of the earth ponies and their families on a nearby hill with no way to escape. With no other option, the townsfolk turn to the visitors for help. And so a lovely research trip turns into a terror-filled night where lives are on the line.
This story is part of The Quicksilver Chronicles, a series of stories that follow the adventures of Quicksilver and Misty as they make their way through whatever fate throws at them.
Cover art by 108Fiona8Fay.
Thanks to my pre-readers OConnerGT-R, mikemeiers, and FionaF. With a special thanks to my editor EverfreePony.
Chapters (4)
Wow! The writing in here is truly magnificent. Every little detail seems super intriguing and it's honestly really uplifting to see these characters' story come so far. I look forward with much anticipation to seeing the rest. Their dynamic is shown so strongly that I just can't wait to see more of it. And the world, even at mundane points, feels so magical.
The stakes feel really high, I appreciate how delightful of a read that makes this. Seeing Quicksilver and Misty be suspicious of the water from early on is nice too. Excited to see where this leads.
First of all, WOW! I am so in love with this so far! Please, whatever you do, never stop writing. This is a magnificent piece and I don’t think I could survive without knowing the rest of their story. During certain parts, I burst out laughing without meaning to and when Quicksilver and Misty were having their heart to heart after waking up, I cried. I cried so hard and had to stop reading to calm myself. This is amazing!
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Thanks for your comments. I've worked hard on their relationship over the 10 story series, and it's very satisfying to know that readers connect with Q&M.
BTW, given your comments, I think you'll really like the next story in the series that will start publishing in a couple weeks.
I have to say that this story is a very solid one to read. I was one of the pre-readers that read the original draft a while back, and there’s a noticeable difference between the original and the final product. For starters it flows much better than when I read it, which is surprising because the original draft already had a solid flow to it.
The characters, Quicksilver and Misty, are still very well written. Their banter is very nice, also their personalities are very well thought out and enjoyable to read.
Honestly the only thing left to say is that the hard work this author put into their story has paid off very well. I can normally find a few points to offer constructive criticism on, but this author has done a good job at giving me no room to critique this story. As I mentioned earlier it’s a very solid story with very solid characters, and if any one likes this story I highly recommend they follow the author to read the rest of the series.
Excellent story you got going ther keep up the good work
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Thanks.
The next story will start publishing in two weeks, so keep an eye out for it...
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I will look oot far it
And so the first story of the chronicles comes to a close. This was the second story I’ve edited for bkc, and I have to say, I admire him for being able to withstand me tearing his story apart. I could also see how much he learned over the course of the story. At first, I oftentimes needed to step in and add/rewrite a few paragraphs, but as the story progressed, the author became able to tackle these larger parts himself or at least adjust what I wrote for him to better match his style and vision. The epilogue is probably the largest testament to how much he learned. It was mostly rewritten from scratch, and, aside a few minor errors, there really wasn’t anything for me to correct.
Nice premise for a story.
I'm very interested to see what you came up with. Ill give this a whirl.
The Monk
“A spider’s got to spider.” -Scarheart
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I'll be interested in your thoughts after it's been whirled...
Awesome chapter!
I've enjoyed this story greatly
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Thanks for saying so. Should you keep reading, hopefully you'll enjoy the rest of the series also.
My Little review & Feedback I did your review.
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Thanks for taking a look at it.
Great chapter. The sequence of events unfolded in a way that stayed interesting throughout.
It's a rather great story as the premise of chronicles. I really like the connection between everypony in this story. The light of the bond shines brighter in the darkness. This theme is the very thing I want to read. Can't wait to read the next story.
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Thanks for your comment.
Each story in the Chronicles is pretty different in it's tone and subject. I look forward to your comments as you battle your way through them.
You can has review!
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Thanks. I added a couple comment to the review thread itself.
Looking promising :3
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Jethro Tull - Heavy Horses! Damn I love that album - had to go put it on before continuing.
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I'm a big Tull fan myself, and enjoyed that little Easter egg.
That was a nice story.
I need a spin-off of what followed, stat!
So, I finished your story, and while I overall liked it, and didn't regret reading it, the whole thing is just kinda... how to say this nicely? Lukewarm?
Don't get me wrong, the overall slice-of-life vibes of the story is appealing, and this actually could be a two-parter in the show itself, but somehow I couldn't connect to the setting and characters enough to enjoy the story to its fullest. The exception to this was Quicksilver and Misty. They are likeable characters, and their interactions are cute, but even theirs sometimes fall flat. I've felt this often during the story, by the way. The way the protags interact with the secondary characters is a bit too "by-the-book", or maybe I could say, realistic.
Also, your writing style is a bit dull. Not boring, but very mechanical, it tells things like it is, almost like a newspaper article. I'm not vouching for purple prose, just something a bit more evocative.
I've read Paul Asaran's review too, and I mostly agree with him, and said these things much better than I could.
Of course, I wouldn't want to bring you down with this, I'm guilty of many things you did in this story, too, and I'm pretty sure you've improved since this one. So cheers, and have an upvote, you've earned it.
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I will admit my first couple stories could benefit from a re-write (if I knew then what I know now). All I can say is that my writing has improved over the course of the series, even more so in the Dark Steel spin-off series. Should you keep reading, I believe you'll see the improvement. A slave-driver editor who won't let me get away with things helped a lot.
This is what we in the business call "high intensity training".
😭 the feels!
A fun little adventure.
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Thanks. Glad you liked it.