Starlight bares her soul in the hopes of receiving some badly needed sympathy. She should have known better.
Featured Apr 14-16, 2022.
Written for Bicyclette's A Thousand Words contest.
Thanks to Airy Words for proofreading and "professional beer-fridge raider" (their words).
Pretty natural flow of dialogue, a funny little motif, and concise. A harmless little piece to read, With constructed characters. Interesting use of Starlight 1st person
Starlight’s worst enemy is always herself, no matter which show season it happens to be.
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I've had so much fun doing the Dark Steel series in 1st person, I decided to give that a try here too.
Woot, a bkc story for the best duo!
With a delicate balance between empathy and banter that highlights the genuine chemistry these two mares share. Good luck for the contest!
Okay this is kinda funny, glad to see another Starlight fic.
Short, sweet, and fun to read.
You definitely capture empathetic Trixie - your best friend while explaining why, in no uncertain terms, you are a moron.
I love this. You captured Trixie's abrasive nature and Starlight's self loathing perfectly.
A bit surprised Trixie was actually good at this, but you did it believably enough that it never felt too out of character. Well done!
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Thanks for the positive comment.
When I started writing, I actually wanted to focus more on Starlight. But somehow Trixie ended up doing the majority of the talking. Another example of my limited control over where a story takes me.
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I get that.
If you have a idea, you need to go where it takes you, because the hardest thing in the world is to force ideas to come to you.
I actually think you did a really good job showing Starlight's mindset, even without talking though.
If anything, I felt her depiction was as strong as Trixie's, if not stronger.
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Very cool that you picked that up despite how little dialogue she had. Sometimes less really is more.
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I was thinking more or less the same thing.
Sometimes letting the characters and the audience breathe is the right way to handle things.
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Agreed
"Shut up and be happy."
~Trixie
Trixie could be a good element of Honesty.
Brutal honesty is still honesty, isn't it?
Quite a good short story.
Featuring Trixie telling Starlight to stop being an idiot.
Trixie became a counselor for a reason. She's actually very good at this sort of thing when she can put her ego aside. The trick is getting her to manage that; it's a heavy load to shift, after all.
Lovely bit of Startrix friendshipping. Thank you for it and best of luck in the judging.
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That's an excellent point. I didn't actually remember/consider her getting that job at the school when I though up this story. But it's so obvious in hindsight...
do love how smugly Trixie this is
hehehe, that is fun!
this makes me think of SparklingTwilight's Trixie, funnily enough
aww yeah, understandable for Starlight to be so insecure about this!
ehehe, so true! what else could explain the change in mane? though i wonder what that says about Trixie's lack of a different manecut
aww, i do not understand why Rarity is the exception here, but i love that
Trixie is just a fillystine who doesn't even appreciate the joys of working on a rock farm!
aww, Trixie really is living up to her Guidance Counselor role here!
a very sweet StarTrix friendshipping! Trixie is the perfect balance of aggravatingly smug and genuinely trying to be a good and helpful friend. thank you for it!
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I think her behavior in episodes like Sweet and Elite (S02E09) show her as best able to "play the game" out of the mane-6. I'm not saying she would, but she is more than able to fake a friendship. She is also willing and able to take advantage of a friendship, for example with Spike in Secret of My Excess (S02E10). Trixie is correct. Rarity could pull off such a performance.
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My first audio reading of a story. Very cool. Thanks.
Found a mini-review here: https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/1027890/fic-reviews-november-30th